TPO-50 - Integrated Writing Task

Based on the given materials, the article as well as the lecture discusses traveling to Mars, which is located 150 times further away than the distance between Earth and Moon. The author states that since traveling to Mars is not as easy as the Moon missions, there are several viable problems which should be solved before the Mars mission is started. That being said, the lecturer provides several solutions to repudiate these problems.

Initially, the writer says that because of taking much more time during the Mars mission than the Moon one, astronauts will be faced with survival materials' shortages, which are caused by low capacity of spacecrafts. However, the speaker explains that this problem can be solved only by using Hydroponic, which makes plants able to grow in water instead of soil. By this strategy, astronauts can cultivate food crops which result in absorbing CO2 and emitting O2, and supply the required Oxygen for astronauts. In addition, Hydroponic can recycle waste water and change it to clean water vapor, which astronauts will need during the mission.

Second, the author proclaims that astronauts should do their activities in zero-gravity environment for a long time, and it results negative effects on their bodies. Yet again, the lecturer underscores that during previous experiments, many astronauts learn to use several techniques regarding solving this problem; regular exercises and eating vitamins and minerals like calcium can destroy threats for muscles and bone densities, respectively.

The final point of contention between the reading and the listening passage is space radiation. The writer thinks that released particles by the Sun can put the astronauts and their spacecrafts in danger, owing to the fact that they cannot use a shield, which ensues increases in weights, to be protected against the problem. On the other hand, the speaker explains that solar radiations occur occasionally, whenever the Sun is in its active period. She underscores a logical solution, in which spacecrafts can use special instruments to monitor the level of space radiation, and also have a protected area which can be used whenever the monitor shows any increase in the level of radiation.

Votes
Average: 0.3 (1 vote)
Essay Categories

Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, however, regarding, second, so, well, in addition, as well as, on the other hand

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 13.0 10.4613686534 124% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 13.0 5.04856512141 257% => Less auxiliary verb wanted.
Conjunction : 12.0 7.30242825607 164% => OK
Relative clauses : 18.0 12.0772626932 149% => OK
Pronoun: 21.0 22.412803532 94% => OK
Preposition: 42.0 30.3222958057 139% => OK
Nominalization: 8.0 5.01324503311 160% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1879.0 1373.03311258 137% => OK
No of words: 354.0 270.72406181 131% => OK
Chars per words: 5.30790960452 5.08290768461 104% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.33761313653 4.04702891845 107% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.67732983693 2.5805825403 104% => OK
Unique words: 208.0 145.348785872 143% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.587570621469 0.540411800872 109% => OK
syllable_count: 567.9 419.366225166 135% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.55342163355 103% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 2.0 3.25607064018 61% => OK
Article: 10.0 8.23620309051 121% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 1.25165562914 80% => OK
Conjunction: 4.0 1.51434878587 264% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 6.0 2.5761589404 233% => Less preposition wanted as sentence beginnings.

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 13.0 13.0662251656 99% => OK
Sentence length: 27.0 21.2450331126 127% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 55.7582482555 49.2860985944 113% => OK
Chars per sentence: 144.538461538 110.228320801 131% => OK
Words per sentence: 27.2307692308 21.698381199 125% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.61538461538 7.06452816374 94% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.09492273731 98% => OK
Language errors: 0.0 4.19205298013 0% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 3.0 4.33554083885 69% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 8.0 4.45695364238 179% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 4.27373068433 47% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.0 0.272083759551 0% => The similarity between the topic and the content is low.
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0 0.0996497079465 0% => Sentence topic similarity is low.
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0 0.0662205650399 0% => Sentences are similar to each other.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0 0.162205337803 0% => Maybe some paragraphs are off the topic.
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0 0.0443174109184 0% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 17.2 13.3589403974 129% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 44.07 53.8541721854 82% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 5.55761589404 158% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 13.8 11.0289183223 125% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.81 12.2367328918 113% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.61 8.42419426049 114% => OK
difficult_words: 104.0 63.6247240618 163% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 13.0 10.7273730684 121% => OK
gunning_fog: 12.8 10.498013245 122% => OK
text_standard: 14.0 11.2008830022 125% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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It is not exactly right on the topic in the view of e-grader. Maybe there is a wrong essay topic.

Rates: 3.33333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 1.0 Out of 30
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