TPO-50 - Integrated Writing Task
Both the reading and the lecture discuss problems of sending humans to Mars in the near future. According to the reading, the author claims that there are three problems with this voyage that make it impossible. The professor, on the other hands, refutes all the three problems provided by the author and asserts that even though a trip to Mars might be challenging, there are some solutions to make it possible.
Firstly, the reading points out that because the distance from earth to Mars is far, it is impossible to take enough food to Mars. The lecturer, by contrast, casts doubt on this idea by saying that there is a hydroponic technique by which astronauts can grow plants in space. in this technique, the plant's root would be in the water instead of soil. Therefore, they would occupy a little space in the spacecraft and make it possible to produce their own food crop. Moreover, these plants can recycle wastewater, so the people would be able to use clean water for drinking. The other positive effect of these plants is that the absorb co2 and release oxygen. As a result, plants can provide the people with the fresh air to breath.
Secondly, the author claims that the sever zero-gravity may have a negative effect on human. The professor, however, refutes this challenge by arguing that there is a lot of spacecraft which are orbiting in the space and the humans use some techniques to overcome zero-gravity. Regular exercise and taking vitamins and mineral such as calcium stop the probability decreasing of bone density. Therefore, using this method would make the Mars trip plausible.
Finally, the article avers that exposing to lots of radiation would have a bad effect on people and using a shield on spacecraft add weight to that. The speaker, nonetheless, rejects this idea by explaining that the radiation will not be at a dangerous level every time, but this radiation may be active occasionally. Moreover, he adds that to avoid this problem the monitor device and small shield which would not add to the weight can be used. Whenever the level of radiation is low, which is showing by the help of monitor device, they can live on the unsheltered cage, but when the te monitor shows the high level of radiation, they can live on the small sheltered cage.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 277, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: In
...ch astronauts can grow plants in space. in this technique, the plants root would b...
^^
Line 3, column 624, Rule ID: A_INFINITVE[1]
Message: Probably a wrong construction: a/the + infinitive
...positive effect of these plants is that the absorb co2 and release oxygen. As a result, pl...
^^^^^^^^^^
Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, finally, first, firstly, however, may, moreover, nonetheless, second, secondly, so, therefore, such as, as a result, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 16.0 10.4613686534 153% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 16.0 5.04856512141 317% => Less auxiliary verb wanted.
Conjunction : 11.0 7.30242825607 151% => OK
Relative clauses : 17.0 12.0772626932 141% => OK
Pronoun: 31.0 22.412803532 138% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 50.0 30.3222958057 165% => OK
Nominalization: 6.0 5.01324503311 120% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1895.0 1373.03311258 138% => OK
No of words: 393.0 270.72406181 145% => Less content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.82188295165 5.08290768461 95% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.45244063426 4.04702891845 110% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.53067219205 2.5805825403 98% => OK
Unique words: 194.0 145.348785872 133% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.493638676845 0.540411800872 91% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 581.4 419.366225166 139% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.55342163355 97% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 6.0 3.25607064018 184% => OK
Article: 10.0 8.23620309051 121% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 1.25165562914 160% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 1.51434878587 132% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 2.5761589404 155% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 18.0 13.0662251656 138% => OK
Sentence length: 21.0 21.2450331126 99% => OK
Sentence length SD: 44.7663343525 49.2860985944 91% => OK
Chars per sentence: 105.277777778 110.228320801 96% => OK
Words per sentence: 21.8333333333 21.698381199 101% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.72222222222 7.06452816374 109% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.09492273731 98% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 4.19205298013 48% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 5.0 4.33554083885 115% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 9.0 4.45695364238 202% => Less negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 4.27373068433 94% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.0 0.272083759551 0% => The similarity between the topic and the content is low.
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0 0.0996497079465 0% => Sentence topic similarity is low.
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0 0.0662205650399 0% => Sentences are similar to each other.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0 0.162205337803 0% => Maybe some paragraphs are off the topic.
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0 0.0443174109184 0% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.2 13.3589403974 91% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 58.62 53.8541721854 109% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 5.55761589404 56% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.3 11.0289183223 93% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.68 12.2367328918 87% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.05 8.42419426049 96% => OK
difficult_words: 84.0 63.6247240618 132% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 10.5 10.7273730684 98% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.4 10.498013245 99% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 11.2008830022 98% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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It is not exactly right on the topic in the view of e-grader. Maybe there is a wrong essay topic.
Rates: 3.33333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 1.0 Out of 30
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