TPO-50 - Integrated Writing Task: Scientists are considering the possibility of sending humans to Mars in the coming decades. Although there have been successful manned missions to the Moon in the 1960s and 1970s, Mars is 150 times further away from Earth
In the passage, the author states that sending humans to Mars would face some challenges and brings out three possible problems that astronauts would face if they wanted to travel Mars. However, the professor contends that the problems are not challenging and refutes each of them.
To begin with, the article holds the view that round-trip to Mars would last for two years. Space vehicles can carry limited amount of food, water and oxygen, so Mars mission is impossible. The professor, on the other hand, believes that by using hydropanic technic, astronauts can grow plants in water instead of soil. Consequently, they will be able to cultivate food in space. Moreover, these plants can recycle waste water to clean drinking water, and also plants can absorb carbon dyoxide and release oxygen.
Additionally, the writer mentions that astronauts on Mars mission would spend many months in zero-gravity, which can cause seriouse damages on the human body, such as decreased muscle mass and lower bone density. Nevertheless, the professor points out that many astronauts that were sent to sattelites, orbiting the earth, had stayed there for monthes without any problem. In fact by regular exercising they can reduce the effect on their muscles, and by supplying vitamines and minerals they can slow down the bone density reduction process.
Finally, the author suggests that astronauts on a mission to Mars would be exposed to harmfull levels of space radiation. Constructing a shield would be impossible, due the extra weight added to the ship. On the contrary, the professor claims that these radiations are not in a dangerous level and they happen occasionally when the Sun is particulary active. They can monitor the Sun radiations and construct a small shield area in spacecraft. As a result, only when the Sun radiations are increased they could stay in that shield until the danger is passed.
Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, consequently, finally, however, if, moreover, nevertheless, so, in fact, such as, as a result, on the contrary, to begin with, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 10.0 10.4613686534 96% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 16.0 5.04856512141 317% => Less auxiliary verb wanted.
Conjunction : 10.0 7.30242825607 137% => OK
Relative clauses : 14.0 12.0772626932 116% => OK
Pronoun: 22.0 22.412803532 98% => OK
Preposition: 38.0 30.3222958057 125% => OK
Nominalization: 2.0 5.01324503311 40% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1606.0 1373.03311258 117% => OK
No of words: 310.0 270.72406181 115% => OK
Chars per words: 5.18064516129 5.08290768461 102% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.19604776685 4.04702891845 104% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.6416893028 2.5805825403 102% => OK
Unique words: 181.0 145.348785872 125% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.583870967742 0.540411800872 108% => OK
syllable_count: 473.4 419.366225166 113% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.55342163355 97% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 3.0 3.25607064018 92% => OK
Article: 8.0 8.23620309051 97% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 1.25165562914 80% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 1.51434878587 132% => OK
Preposition: 5.0 2.5761589404 194% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 15.0 13.0662251656 115% => OK
Sentence length: 20.0 21.2450331126 94% => OK
Sentence length SD: 41.6202941951 49.2860985944 84% => OK
Chars per sentence: 107.066666667 110.228320801 97% => OK
Words per sentence: 20.6666666667 21.698381199 95% => OK
Discourse Markers: 10.0 7.06452816374 142% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.09492273731 98% => OK
Language errors: 0.0 4.19205298013 0% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 3.0 4.33554083885 69% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 7.0 4.45695364238 157% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 5.0 4.27373068433 117% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.0810694636278 0.272083759551 30% => The similarity between the topic and the content is low.
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0276501044088 0.0996497079465 28% => Sentence topic similarity is low.
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0373657437475 0.0662205650399 56% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0527889847227 0.162205337803 33% => Maybe some paragraphs are off the topic.
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0184001103299 0.0443174109184 42% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.3 13.3589403974 100% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 59.64 53.8541721854 111% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 5.55761589404 56% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.9 11.0289183223 90% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.76 12.2367328918 104% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.01 8.42419426049 107% => OK
difficult_words: 86.0 63.6247240618 135% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 10.5 10.7273730684 98% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.0 10.498013245 95% => OK
text_standard: 10.0 11.2008830022 89% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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It is not exactly right on the topic in the view of e-grader. Maybe there is a wrong essay topic.
Rates: 3.33333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 1.0 Out of 30
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