The reading passage and the lecturer both talk about sending human to Mars. But the writer provides three reasons for which sending human to Mars is so challenging and it will impossible. But the lecturer opposes by saying there are problems to send human to Mars but also possible solution make possible the Mars mission.
The author indicates that round trip will take almost two years so necessary food, oxygen and water scarcity is a potential threat for the mission where, the lecturer mentions hydrophonic techniques as a solution. By this process astronaut can grow plant or vegetables in aerospace, again these vegetables release O2 and absorb CO2 so they breath with fresh air also.
Second, the author claims that long journey to space or zero gravity environment can cause severe harm to human body but the lecturer opposes these. She says that astronaut have experience of staying several month in such environment and if they do regular exercise or take calcium the problem might be solved since it help to reduce the lowering the bone density.
Third, the author also mentions that dangerous solar radiation in the interplanetary space would harmful for astronaut but the lecturer also clarify that, she says solar radiation is not harmful all the time, it can cause damage for some times. If the astronaut can use special technology to detect the harmful radiation they can save them from the harmful radiation.
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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 341, Rule ID: BREATHE_BREATH[1]
Message: Did you mean 'breathe'? 'breath' is a noun.
Suggestion: breathe
...ables release O2 and absorb CO2 so they breath with fresh air also. Second, the aut...
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Line 3, column 363, Rule ID: ALSO_SENT_END[1]
Message: 'Also' is not used at the end of the sentence. Use 'as well' instead.
Suggestion: as well
...bsorb CO2 so they breath with fresh air also. Second, the author claims that long...
^^^^
Line 5, column 201, Rule ID: MANY_NN[1]
Message: Possible agreement error. The noun month seems to be countable; consider using: 'several months'.
Suggestion: several months
...at astronaut have experience of staying several month in such environment and if they do regu...
^^^^^^^^^^^^^
Line 7, column 246, Rule ID: SENTENCE_FRAGMENT[1]
Message: “If” at the beginning of a sentence requires a 2nd clause. Maybe a comma, question or exclamation mark is missing, or the sentence is incomplete and should be joined with the following sentence.
...me, it can cause damage for some times. If the astronaut can use special technolog...
^^
Line 7, column 369, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...n save them from the harmful radiation.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, if, second, so, third
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 5.0 10.4613686534 48% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 9.0 5.04856512141 178% => OK
Conjunction : 13.0 7.30242825607 178% => OK
Relative clauses : 7.0 12.0772626932 58% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 17.0 22.412803532 76% => OK
Preposition: 19.0 30.3222958057 63% => OK
Nominalization: 9.0 5.01324503311 180% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1203.0 1373.03311258 88% => OK
No of words: 237.0 270.72406181 88% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.07594936709 5.08290768461 100% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.92362132708 4.04702891845 97% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.47176726811 2.5805825403 96% => OK
Unique words: 144.0 145.348785872 99% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.607594936709 0.540411800872 112% => OK
syllable_count: 372.6 419.366225166 89% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.55342163355 103% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 3.0 3.25607064018 92% => OK
Article: 5.0 8.23620309051 61% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 1.25165562914 80% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 1.51434878587 132% => OK
Preposition: 1.0 2.5761589404 39% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 9.0 13.0662251656 69% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 26.0 21.2450331126 122% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 52.4505646146 49.2860985944 106% => OK
Chars per sentence: 133.666666667 110.228320801 121% => OK
Words per sentence: 26.3333333333 21.698381199 121% => OK
Discourse Markers: 3.55555555556 7.06452816374 50% => More transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.09492273731 98% => OK
Language errors: 5.0 4.19205298013 119% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 5.0 4.33554083885 115% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 4.45695364238 67% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 4.27373068433 23% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.110261240097 0.272083759551 41% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0577256897464 0.0996497079465 58% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0744214809278 0.0662205650399 112% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0714516142233 0.162205337803 44% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0886516820033 0.0443174109184 200% => More connections among paragraphs wanted.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 15.7 13.3589403974 118% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 45.09 53.8541721854 84% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 5.55761589404 158% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 13.4 11.0289183223 121% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.48 12.2367328918 102% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.52 8.42419426049 101% => OK
difficult_words: 54.0 63.6247240618 85% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 10.7273730684 103% => OK
gunning_fog: 12.4 10.498013245 118% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 11.2008830022 80% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 85.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 25.5 Out of 30
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