TPO-50 - Integrated Writing TaskScientists are considering the possibility of sending humans to mars in the coming decades. Although there have been successful manned missions to the Moon in the 1960s and 1970s, Mars is 150 times further away from Earth t

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TPO-50 - Integrated Writing Task

Scientists are considering the possibility of sending humans to mars in the coming decades. Although there have been successful manned missions to the Moon in the 1960s and 1970s, Mars is 150 times further away from Earth than the Moon is. Thus the project of sending humans to Mars would require solving an array of problems the Moon missions did not have to face

Both the reading passage and the lecture argues the idea of sending humans to mars. With this in mind, the author states that there are several problems which could be solved in this project. On the othe hand, the lecturer claims that although this project is challenging, there are several solution for all the problems that mentioned in the passage.

First of all, the writer points the view that it takes aproximately two years to go to mars and back. Therefore, it is not easy to carry enough food, water, and oxygen because of limited capicity of space vehicles. The professor makes it clear that astronauts can use hydroponic technique to cultivate food crops on space with need less space. Moreove, in this maner some amount of water and released oxygen will be produced to meet the astronauts needed.

Second, the writing material argues the problem of zero-gravity environment of space and its negative effects on humans body. However, the speaker explains that there are several techniques which can help to astronauts to maintain their health in zero- gravity environment. For instance, there are some regular exercise which prevent decreas of muscle mass and also using some mineral to compensation reduction of bone density.

Finally, while the writer explains tremendous amount of space radiation in mars would be dangerous for astronauts and the lack of magnetic field in mars to protect people from solar radiation, the professor contradicts this idea. She makes it clear that the dangerous level of radiation in mars does not exist in all the time. Furthermore, there are some equipment to help astronauts to be safe untile dangerous times pass.

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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 284, Rule ID: MANY_NN[1]
Message: Possible agreement error. The noun solution seems to be countable; consider using: 'several solutions'.
Suggestion: several solutions
... this project is challenging, there are several solution for all the problems that mentioned in ...
^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^
Line 5, column 88, Rule ID: TO_NON_BASE[1]
Message: The verb after "to" should be in the base form: 'mar'.
Suggestion: mar
...t takes aproximately two years to go to mars and back. Therefore, it is not easy to ...
^^^^

Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, finally, first, furthermore, however, second, so, therefore, while, for instance, first of all

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 11.0 10.4613686534 105% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 6.0 5.04856512141 119% => OK
Conjunction : 7.0 7.30242825607 96% => OK
Relative clauses : 10.0 12.0772626932 83% => OK
Pronoun: 19.0 22.412803532 85% => OK
Preposition: 39.0 30.3222958057 129% => OK
Nominalization: 10.0 5.01324503311 199% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1407.0 1373.03311258 102% => OK
No of words: 274.0 270.72406181 101% => OK
Chars per words: 5.13503649635 5.08290768461 101% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.0685311056 4.04702891845 101% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.55098785319 2.5805825403 99% => OK
Unique words: 155.0 145.348785872 107% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.565693430657 0.540411800872 105% => OK
syllable_count: 434.7 419.366225166 104% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.55342163355 103% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 2.0 3.25607064018 61% => OK
Article: 7.0 8.23620309051 85% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 1.25165562914 80% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.51434878587 66% => OK
Preposition: 3.0 2.5761589404 116% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 13.0 13.0662251656 99% => OK
Sentence length: 21.0 21.2450331126 99% => OK
Sentence length SD: 37.1305070826 49.2860985944 75% => OK
Chars per sentence: 108.230769231 110.228320801 98% => OK
Words per sentence: 21.0769230769 21.698381199 97% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.69230769231 7.06452816374 109% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.09492273731 98% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 4.19205298013 48% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 5.0 4.33554083885 115% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 6.0 4.45695364238 135% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 4.27373068433 47% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.0863388942477 0.272083759551 32% => The similarity between the topic and the content is low.
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0317886635196 0.0996497079465 32% => Sentence topic similarity is low.
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0347874205745 0.0662205650399 53% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0501180616301 0.162205337803 31% => Maybe some paragraphs are off the topic.
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0358755691444 0.0443174109184 81% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.3 13.3589403974 100% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 50.16 53.8541721854 93% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 5.55761589404 56% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.5 11.0289183223 104% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.53 12.2367328918 102% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.0 8.42419426049 107% => OK
difficult_words: 75.0 63.6247240618 118% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 10.5 10.7273730684 98% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.4 10.498013245 99% => OK
text_standard: 13.0 11.2008830022 116% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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It is not exactly right on the topic in the view of e-grader. Maybe there is a wrong essay topic.

Rates: 3.33333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 1.0 Out of 30
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