TPO 52 Integrated-Asteroids are large space objects made of rock and ice. There are hundreds of thousands of asteroids in our solar system. Though we often hear ideas about establishing colonies of humans to live and work on our Moon or our neighboring pl

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TPO 52 Integrated-Asteroids are large space objects made of rock and ice. There are hundreds of thousands of asteroids in our solar system. Though we often hear ideas about establishing colonies of humans to live and work on our Moon or our neighboring planet, Mars, some think that sending people to an asteroid would actually be the best colonization option for a number of reasons. Low Gravity To begin with, asteroids are often much smaller than planets, so they have lower gravity. When landing a spaceship, the craft would not be pulled as strongly or as forcefully toward the asteroid's surface, making the landing safer than landing on the Moon or Mars; it would also allow a spacecraft to carry much more equipment needed to set up the colony. It would also be easier

The reading and the lecture are both about the colonization of asteroids, which are mostly made of rock and ice. The author of the reading believes that there are three reasons why colonizing asteroids is valuable. The lecturer challenges the statements made by the author. he is of the opinion that it is not practical.

First of all, the author suggests that asteroids have low gravity compared to mars or the Moon. As a result, it would take less effort to colonize them. it is mentioned that because of low gravity, spacecrafts would carry more equipments and use less fuel to land or take off. The argument is refuted by the lecturer. he says even though there are certain benefits of less efforts, there are critical health problems for people. Furthermore, he argues that astronauts in space face certain health risks such as losing muscles mass and low bone density. So the health risk would be much more serious for the long term colonists.

Secondly, the article posits that asteroids are rich in rare metals. The author notes the colonists or business people would pay more than enough to fund the colonists about their missions. The lecturer, however, rebuts this by asserting that costs of supporting the colony and transporting minerals would much higher. he elaborates on this by mentioning that when there are plenty of supply of rare metals and minerals, the value of them wouldn't stay the same. Consequently, they would become much cheaper.

Finally, it is stated in the reading that it is easy to reach asteroids. The author establishes that there are many asteroids that in the region of near earth orbits. Moreover, because of this reason, sending or bringing the colonists are much more affordable compared to going and returning from mars. The lecturer, on the other hand, opposes that it is not easy to return from asteroids. he puts forth the idea that asteroids orbits don't remain the same that at some point they may be closer to the earth, but they would travel farther away from the earth. Therefore, bringing back the colonists would be much more difficult.

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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 216, Rule ID: ENGLISH_WORD_REPEAT_BEGINNING_RULE
Message: Three successive sentences begin with the same word. Reword the sentence or use a thesaurus to find a synonym.
...s why colonizing asteroids is valuable. The lecturer challenges the statements made...
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Line 1, column 275, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
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Suggestion: He
...nges the statements made by the author. he is of the opinion that it is not practi...
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Line 7, column 79, Rule ID: TO_NON_BASE[1]
Message: The verb after "to" should be in the base form: 'mar'.
Suggestion: mar
... asteroids have low gravity compared to mars or the Moon. As a result, it would take...
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Line 7, column 154, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
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Suggestion: It
...ould take less effort to colonize them. it is mentioned that because of low gravit...
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Suggestion: He
...he argument is refuted by the lecturer. he says even though there are certain bene...
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Line 7, column 369, Rule ID: FEWER_LESS[2]
Message: Did you mean 'fewer'? The noun efforts is countable.
Suggestion: fewer
...en though there are certain benefits of less efforts, there are critical health prob...
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Suggestion: He
...ransporting minerals would much higher. he elaborates on this by mentioning that w...
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Message: Possible spelling mistake found
Suggestion: wouldn't
... metals and minerals, the value of them wouldnt stay the same. Consequently, they would...
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Suggestion: He
...t is not easy to return from asteroids. he puts forth the idea that asteroids orbi...
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Suggestion: don't
...ts forth the idea that asteroids orbits dont remain the same that at some point they...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, consequently, finally, first, furthermore, however, if, may, moreover, second, secondly, so, therefore, such as, as a result, first of all, on the other hand

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 20.0 10.4613686534 191% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 9.0 5.04856512141 178% => OK
Conjunction : 12.0 7.30242825607 164% => OK
Relative clauses : 16.0 12.0772626932 132% => OK
Pronoun: 34.0 22.412803532 152% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 39.0 30.3222958057 129% => OK
Nominalization: 2.0 5.01324503311 40% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1757.0 1373.03311258 128% => OK
No of words: 355.0 270.72406181 131% => OK
Chars per words: 4.94929577465 5.08290768461 97% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.34067318298 4.04702891845 107% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.49014721814 2.5805825403 96% => OK
Unique words: 191.0 145.348785872 131% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.538028169014 0.540411800872 100% => OK
syllable_count: 529.2 419.366225166 126% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.55342163355 97% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 9.0 3.25607064018 276% => Less pronouns wanted as sentence beginning.
Article: 11.0 8.23620309051 134% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 1.25165562914 160% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.51434878587 66% => OK
Preposition: 2.0 2.5761589404 78% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 22.0 13.0662251656 168% => OK
Sentence length: 16.0 21.2450331126 75% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 34.5528999154 49.2860985944 70% => OK
Chars per sentence: 79.8636363636 110.228320801 72% => OK
Words per sentence: 16.1363636364 21.698381199 74% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.36363636364 7.06452816374 104% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.09492273731 98% => OK
Language errors: 10.0 4.19205298013 239% => Less language errors wanted.
Sentences with positive sentiment : 7.0 4.33554083885 161% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 8.0 4.45695364238 179% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 7.0 4.27373068433 164% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.0879406200019 0.272083759551 32% => The similarity between the topic and the content is low.
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0260640447143 0.0996497079465 26% => Sentence topic similarity is low.
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0335626068986 0.0662205650399 51% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0576837130109 0.162205337803 36% => Maybe some paragraphs are off the topic.
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.025402925102 0.0443174109184 57% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 10.0 13.3589403974 75% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 63.7 53.8541721854 118% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 5.55761589404 56% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 8.4 11.0289183223 76% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.13 12.2367328918 91% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.03 8.42419426049 95% => OK
difficult_words: 81.0 63.6247240618 127% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 6.5 10.7273730684 61% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.4 10.498013245 80% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 11.2008830022 80% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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