TPO 53-Integrated Writing-Summarize the points made in the lecture, being sure to explain how they challenge the specific points made in the reading passage.

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TPO 53-Integrated Writing-Summarize the points made in the lecture, being sure to explain how they challenge the specific points made in the reading passage.

The reading passage explores three advantages of putting taxes on cigarettes and unhealthy food. However, the lecturer challenges the arguments respectively by giving three point as supports.
At first, the reading points out that high taxes of cigarettes and unhealthy food discourage people to participate in those behavior.

While, the professor says that these taxes do not necessarily lead to reduce the rate of using because people who addict to this kind of behavior is forced to buy cheaper and low quality cigarettes which have more harmful substances. Therefore, the policies cause greater health risks. Likewise, people who continue buying unhealthy food, have less money to spend for healthy food.

Additionally, although the passage mentions the fairness of putting taxes on cigarettes and malnutrition food because the government can spend money comes from this way into reducing the medical expense, the lecturer has the opposite view and states that it is much greater burden for those with low income because it is relative to income. For example imagine two high and low earny who take part in bad behaviors. The burden of tax put more pressure on the person with low salary.

Finally, the reading suggests that government's revenue from these types of taxes is spent for welfare projects like building public park, but the professor points out that the government would be less wiling to create policy which prevent smoking out door because of the huge money it can earn from addictive people.

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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 2, column 119, Rule ID: THIS_NNS[2]
Message: Did you mean 'this behavior' or 'those behaviors'?
Suggestion: this behavior; those behaviors
...ood discourage people to participate in those behavior. While, the professor says that thes...
^^^^^^^^^^^^^^
Line 8, column 36, Rule ID: POSSESIVE_APOSTROPHE[1]
Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'governments'' or 'government's'?
Suggestion: governments'; government's
.... Finally, the reading suggests that governments revenue from these types of taxes is sp...
^^^^^^^^^^^
Line 8, column 225, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...nt would be less wiling to create policy which prevent smoking out door because o...
^^

Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, finally, first, however, likewise, so, therefore, while, for example, kind of

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 5.0 10.4613686534 48% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 3.0 5.04856512141 59% => OK
Conjunction : 7.0 7.30242825607 96% => OK
Relative clauses : 10.0 12.0772626932 83% => OK
Pronoun: 14.0 22.412803532 62% => OK
Preposition: 33.0 30.3222958057 109% => OK
Nominalization: 3.0 5.01324503311 60% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1278.0 1373.03311258 93% => OK
No of words: 244.0 270.72406181 90% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.23770491803 5.08290768461 103% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.95227774224 4.04702891845 98% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.52695758702 2.5805825403 98% => OK
Unique words: 144.0 145.348785872 99% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.590163934426 0.540411800872 109% => OK
syllable_count: 395.1 419.366225166 94% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.55342163355 103% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 0.0 3.25607064018 0% => OK
Article: 8.0 8.23620309051 97% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 1.25165562914 80% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.51434878587 66% => OK
Preposition: 1.0 2.5761589404 39% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 10.0 13.0662251656 77% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 24.0 21.2450331126 113% => OK
Sentence length SD: 101.428250503 49.2860985944 206% => The lengths of sentences changed so frequently.
Chars per sentence: 127.8 110.228320801 116% => OK
Words per sentence: 24.4 21.698381199 112% => OK
Discourse Markers: 8.2 7.06452816374 116% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.09492273731 122% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 4.19205298013 72% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 3.0 4.33554083885 69% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 7.0 4.45695364238 157% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 0.0 4.27373068433 0% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.0651239558559 0.272083759551 24% => The similarity between the topic and the content is low.
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0310360027451 0.0996497079465 31% => Sentence topic similarity is low.
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0426623089602 0.0662205650399 64% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0519465921328 0.162205337803 32% => Maybe some paragraphs are off the topic.
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0438323194717 0.0443174109184 99% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 15.5 13.3589403974 116% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 47.12 53.8541721854 87% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 5.55761589404 158% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 12.7 11.0289183223 115% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.41 12.2367328918 110% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.03 8.42419426049 107% => OK
difficult_words: 65.0 63.6247240618 102% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.5 10.7273730684 79% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.6 10.498013245 110% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 11.2008830022 80% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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It is not exactly right on the topic in the view of e-grader. Maybe there is a wrong essay topic.

Rates: 3.33333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 1.0 Out of 30
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