famous and entertainers and athletes deserve to have more privacy than they have now.
One of everyone's dream is to become prominent, but becoming famous brings lots of inconveniences. Relatedly, Athletes and entertainers lose many things which ordinary people have like their private life. Personally speaking, I concur that they deserve to have more privacy and I explicate my viewpoint with following reasons.
First and foremost, they are not able to have usual social interaction with others because everyone know famous people and want to ask celebrities or prominent person lots of questions or take a photo with them. For example, I saw an actor who came into shopping mall to do his shops, but people did not let him do his shops. Specially, young girls asked him repeatedly to take photo with them. However, he was like anyone in the mall deserve to comfortably buy his shopping list and come back home.
Additionally, their private life is under the scrutiny of media and public so as even their divorce is publically announced. A vivid example is the divorce of Agelina Juli and Brad pit which was the title of news for a long time. In my opinion one of the human right is having privacy and accordingly there is no exception for anyone.
Finally, although famous people have somewhat privacy, technological development like emerging telegram, whatsapp and instagram have captured their trivial freedom because these instruments accelerate the flow of information and enable people to get access to people's personal life quickly.
In conclusion, Although human rights are practicing todays more than past, by emerging highly developed technology and presence of social media everywhere, celebrities and athletes are loosing their privacy more and more. That is why, I believe they need more privacy than they have now.
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Grammar and spelling errors:
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
accordingly, but, finally, first, however, if, so, for example, in conclusion, in my opinion
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 12.0 15.1003584229 79% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 1.0 9.8082437276 10% => OK
Conjunction : 17.0 13.8261648746 123% => OK
Relative clauses : 5.0 11.0286738351 45% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 26.0 43.0788530466 60% => OK
Preposition: 32.0 52.1666666667 61% => OK
Nominalization: 5.0 8.0752688172 62% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1472.0 1977.66487455 74% => OK
No of words: 284.0 407.700716846 70% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.18309859155 4.8611393121 107% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.10515524023 4.48103885553 92% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.71889361024 2.67179642975 102% => OK
Unique words: 174.0 212.727598566 82% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.612676056338 0.524837075471 117% => OK
syllable_count: 477.9 618.680645161 77% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.51630824373 112% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 7.0 9.59856630824 73% => OK
Article: 1.0 3.08781362007 32% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 3.51792114695 57% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 1.86738351254 107% => OK
Preposition: 3.0 4.94265232975 61% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 13.0 20.6003584229 63% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 21.0 20.1344086022 104% => OK
Sentence length SD: 63.6782779048 48.9658058833 130% => OK
Chars per sentence: 113.230769231 100.406767564 113% => OK
Words per sentence: 21.8461538462 20.6045352989 106% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.07692307692 5.45110844103 130% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.53405017921 110% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 5.5376344086 36% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 5.0 11.8709677419 42% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 3.85842293907 26% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 7.0 4.88709677419 143% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.37479698505 0.236089414692 159% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.126053385635 0.076458572812 165% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.140661505569 0.0737576698707 191% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.204442793724 0.150856017488 136% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.141380852176 0.0645574589148 219% => More connections among paragraphs wanted.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.9 11.7677419355 118% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 41.7 58.1214874552 72% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 12.7 10.1575268817 125% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.76 10.9000537634 117% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.01 8.01818996416 112% => OK
difficult_words: 78.0 86.8835125448 90% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.5 10.002688172 115% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.4 10.0537634409 103% => OK
text_standard: 13.0 10.247311828 127% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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We are expecting: No. of Words: 350 while No. of Different Words: 200
Rates: 76.6666666667 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 23.0 Out of 30
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