Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? Famous entertainers and athletes deserve to have more privacy than they have now. Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.

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Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? Famous entertainers and athletes deserve to have more privacy than they have now. Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.

People often may debate this argument that celebrities need to keep their life in silence.Ipersonally agree with this statement,even famous people deserve some space for them.i feel this way for two reason,Which i will explore in the following essay.

First of all,Enjoy the life in an a healthy way to maintain the emotional and fisical balance.In the celebrities cases that balance is almost impossible.An example of this, about 2 or 3 days ago i was washing the news where the paparazzi followed a rock start.This person wants to scaped from them.He speeded the cars so fast that, his car impact a big stone on his way.But the but thing in this case was that they also show to the public pictures of that.

Secondly,important people are expose to be harm by others. We have to respect the others life recognizing when actors and athletes just wants to be a normal person.Dispite to some celebrities likes to be controversial and emblematic.For instead, i was walking around in poblix market and was looking at a very extreme lady She was in a colorful pants and a black glasses.Imediatly the others start comments about her.For my surprise was madonna the queen of pop.She was there acting like a regular and comun person.On my perspective she seem happy doing some errents.But once someone recognize her.She doe s t like an then leve the place.this was another example of how people wants to be simple.

in summation,I my point of view is great be a celebrities but at the same time we need to understand. The need free time to scape and you them.As the result more of them going to keep a good life without all the pressure that the word put in their life and sometimes is cause to lose their life for ever

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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, if, look, may, second, secondly, so, then, i feel, first of all

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 17.0 15.1003584229 113% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 5.0 9.8082437276 51% => OK
Conjunction : 13.0 13.8261648746 94% => OK
Relative clauses : 9.0 11.0286738351 82% => OK
Pronoun: 41.0 43.0788530466 95% => OK
Preposition: 43.0 52.1666666667 82% => OK
Nominalization: 6.0 8.0752688172 74% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1420.0 1977.66487455 72% => OK
No of words: 301.0 407.700716846 74% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.71760797342 4.8611393121 97% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.16525528304 4.48103885553 93% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.9557876464 2.67179642975 111% => OK
Unique words: 185.0 212.727598566 87% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.614617940199 0.524837075471 117% => OK
syllable_count: 449.1 618.680645161 73% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 10.0 9.59856630824 104% => OK
Article: 2.0 3.08781362007 65% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 3.51792114695 28% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 1.86738351254 107% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 4.94265232975 81% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 6.0 20.6003584229 29% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 50.0 20.1344086022 248% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 202.74696874 48.9658058833 414% => The lengths of sentences changed so frequently.
Chars per sentence: 236.666666667 100.406767564 236% => Less chars_per_sentence wanted.
Words per sentence: 50.1666666667 20.6045352989 243% => Less words per sentence wanted.
Discourse Markers: 13.5 5.45110844103 248% => Less transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 34.0 5.5376344086 614% => Less language errors wanted.
Sentences with positive sentiment : 4.0 11.8709677419 34% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 3.85842293907 52% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 0.0 4.88709677419 0% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.0891266478783 0.236089414692 38% => The similarity between the topic and the content is low.
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0370780551501 0.076458572812 48% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0374384886467 0.0737576698707 51% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0536678363669 0.150856017488 36% => Maybe some paragraphs are off the topic.
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0339918556976 0.0645574589148 53% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 25.9 11.7677419355 220% => Automated_readability_index is high.
flesch_reading_ease: 29.19 58.1214874552 50% => Flesch_reading_ease is low.
smog_index: 11.2 6.10430107527 183% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 21.6 10.1575268817 213% => Flesch kincaid grade is high.
coleman_liau_index: 10.98 10.9000537634 101% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.58 8.01818996416 119% => OK
difficult_words: 66.0 86.8835125448 76% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 29.0 10.002688172 290% => Linsear_write_formula is high.
gunning_fog: 22.0 10.0537634409 219% => Gunning_fog is high.
text_standard: 22.0 10.247311828 215% => The average readability is very high. Good job!
What are above readability scores?

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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:

para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.

So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:

reasons == advantages or

reasons == disadvantages

for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.

or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.


Rates: 76.6666666667 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 23.0 Out of 30
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