TPO 53 Writing Integrated
Many countries require cigarette smokers to pay particularly high taxes on their purchases of cigarettes; similar taxes are being considered for unhealthy foods. The policy of imposing high taxes on cigarettes and other unhealthy products has a number of social benefits.
First of all, the taxes discourage people from indulging in unhealthy behaviors. Raising taxes on cigarettes, for instance, leads people to buy fewer of them. Smoking has declined as taxes on tobacco have risen, showing that these taxes do work to make society healthier. It can be expected that imposing similar taxes on unhealthy food and beverages would help reduce obesity rates.
Second, taxes of this kind are financially fair. When people get sick as a result of their smoking or eating unhealthy foods, they create medical costs. It is unfair that everyone in the society, including nonsmokers and people who follow a healthy diet, should contribute equally to covering these costs. Taxing people who engage in unhealthy behaviors creates extra income that can be used to cover the medical costs. In this way, some of the financial burden is shifted from all of society to just those who choose to participate in the unhealthy activities.
Finally, the high rate of taxation on cigarettes significantly increases revenue for the government. In addition to using this tax revenue on medical assistance, governments often use the revenue for other projects that benefit public welfare, such as building stadiums or creating public parks. Even basic government-supported services like public education benefit from these taxes. Thus, the taxes on cigarettes, and the proposed taxes on unhealthy foods, benefit everyone.
The reading passage and the lecture both discuss merits and demerits of high taxes for unhealthy foods and cigarettes in one country. In the reading part, the author mentions that the government makes several benefits with these extra taxes which not only is for all citizens, but also reduces addictions among people. In the listening part, however, the speaker challenges what the author states and rebuts the reasons.
To begin with, as mentioned in the article, the author sets forth that people using unhealthy lifestyle might alter their behavior. Moreover, it helps consumers of cigarettes or unhealthy food decrease usage of these substances. Nevertheless, the speaker refutes the idea asserting that it will not lead customer to change their life. they might take the cigarettes with lower price, which is much more harmful than the good quality products. In addition, if the unhealthy foods become expensive, people might continue to eat them, and on the other hand, spend less money to buy healthy foods because there is no money left for them.
Secondly, the author points out that people with healthy lifestyle and unhealthy lifestyle use equal facilities in a society; due to the fact that people with unhealthy lifestyle will use more medical treatments, it would be fair that they spend more taxes for buying unhealthy stuff. Nonetheless, the lecturer flatly contradicts the idea and contends that people have different range of incomes, it is not fair for people with less eicome pay mush more taxes to these products. Actually, idndividuals with less money deprive from tthe facilities muchg greater than other people and it becomes as a huge burden for them. Therefore, it will not be fair any more.
Finally, the author claims that the government spend the taxes for provideng stadium or better education for all citizens. Hence, with extra encome for governmnets all people take the benefits. In contrast, the professor is of the opinion that the governmet, now, become dependent on this money. As a result, the government does not force people not to use these products. it means that the government does not make policies to do not allow people smoke in the private or public places, or ban the people to eliminate this harmful lifestyle.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
actually, also, but, finally, hence, however, if, moreover, nevertheless, nonetheless, second, secondly, so, therefore, in addition, in contrast, as a result, to begin with, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 7.0 10.4613686534 67% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 7.0 5.04856512141 139% => OK
Conjunction : 13.0 7.30242825607 178% => OK
Relative clauses : 12.0 12.0772626932 99% => OK
Pronoun: 30.0 22.412803532 134% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 35.0 30.3222958057 115% => OK
Nominalization: 6.0 5.01324503311 120% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1899.0 1373.03311258 138% => OK
No of words: 372.0 270.72406181 137% => Less content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.10483870968 5.08290768461 100% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.39173103935 4.04702891845 109% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.49679381643 2.5805825403 97% => OK
Unique words: 190.0 145.348785872 131% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.510752688172 0.540411800872 95% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 581.4 419.366225166 139% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.55342163355 103% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 6.0 3.25607064018 184% => OK
Article: 10.0 8.23620309051 121% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 1.25165562914 240% => Less adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 3.0 1.51434878587 198% => OK
Preposition: 6.0 2.5761589404 233% => Less preposition wanted as sentence beginnings.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 17.0 13.0662251656 130% => OK
Sentence length: 21.0 21.2450331126 99% => OK
Sentence length SD: 56.8263913541 49.2860985944 115% => OK
Chars per sentence: 111.705882353 110.228320801 101% => OK
Words per sentence: 21.8823529412 21.698381199 101% => OK
Discourse Markers: 11.2352941176 7.06452816374 159% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.09492273731 98% => OK
Language errors: 8.0 4.19205298013 191% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 6.0 4.33554083885 138% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 8.0 4.45695364238 179% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 4.27373068433 70% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.375950072203 0.272083759551 138% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.115902616624 0.0996497079465 116% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.075468347741 0.0662205650399 114% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.231982375479 0.162205337803 143% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0401085845099 0.0443174109184 91% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.5 13.3589403974 101% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 50.16 53.8541721854 93% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 5.55761589404 56% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.5 11.0289183223 104% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.3 12.2367328918 101% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.16 8.42419426049 97% => OK
difficult_words: 82.0 63.6247240618 129% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 10.5 10.7273730684 98% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.4 10.498013245 99% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 11.2008830022 107% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Write the essay in 20 minutes.
Rates: 80.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 24.0 Out of 30
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