TPO 54 Integrated Writing Task

The reading is about the increasing level of salt in the Salton Sea caused by the rapid evaporation rate. Its states provided three ways to reverse the trend that is threatening the lake's health. Conversely, in the lecture, the professor holds a different view that all these solutions are not realistic or practical and points to inaccuracies in each of the author's reasons.
First of all, the article posits that one way is removing salt directly by desalination facilities include pumping water to somewhere else, evaporation, cooling it down, and returning it to the lake. The lecturer refutes this point by explaining that there are several problems and side-effects in this way. When water evaporates, some solid components remain which can produce some health problems. According to her, remained materials contain chemicals such as toxic selenium, and if it is carried with the wind, it can be dangerous for people.
Secondly, the reading asserts that dilution of the salt level with ocean water by bringing it via pipelines or canals. However, the speaker says this action needs a great budget. The local government can't effort it because the ocean is one hundred miles away. As a result, using pipes or canals can be very expensive.
Thirdly, the article states that another solution is controlling the level of salt by the construction of the wall and dividing the lake. On the other side, the lecturer opposes this by saying that this solution is not durable. Different kinds of a disaster such as an earthquake can adversely affect it. In a short time, these walls can separate the lake, but after a while, when an earthquake happens, the walls will collapse and won’t work anymore.

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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 183, Rule ID: POSSESIVE_APOSTROPHE[2]
Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'lakes'' or 'lake's'?
Suggestion: lakes'; lake's
...verse the trend that is threatening the lakes health. Conversely, in the lecture, the...
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Line 3, column 200, Rule ID: CANT[1]
Message: Did you mean 'can't' or 'cannot'?
Suggestion: can't; cannot
...ds a great budget. The local government cant effort it because the ocean is one hund...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, conversely, first, however, if, second, secondly, so, third, thirdly, while, as to, such as, as a result, first of all

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 11.0 10.4613686534 105% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 6.0 5.04856512141 119% => OK
Conjunction : 10.0 7.30242825607 137% => OK
Relative clauses : 10.0 12.0772626932 83% => OK
Pronoun: 23.0 22.412803532 103% => OK
Preposition: 29.0 30.3222958057 96% => OK
Nominalization: 7.0 5.01324503311 140% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1420.0 1373.03311258 103% => OK
No of words: 283.0 270.72406181 105% => OK
Chars per words: 5.01766784452 5.08290768461 99% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.10153676581 4.04702891845 101% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.64839987552 2.5805825403 103% => OK
Unique words: 172.0 145.348785872 118% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.60777385159 0.540411800872 112% => OK
syllable_count: 441.9 419.366225166 105% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.55342163355 103% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 3.0 3.25607064018 92% => OK
Article: 10.0 8.23620309051 121% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 1.25165562914 240% => Less adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 3.0 1.51434878587 198% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 2.5761589404 155% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 15.0 13.0662251656 115% => OK
Sentence length: 18.0 21.2450331126 85% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 40.7414612731 49.2860985944 83% => OK
Chars per sentence: 94.6666666667 110.228320801 86% => OK
Words per sentence: 18.8666666667 21.698381199 87% => OK
Discourse Markers: 8.2 7.06452816374 116% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.09492273731 98% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 4.19205298013 48% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 4.0 4.33554083885 92% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 6.0 4.45695364238 135% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 5.0 4.27373068433 117% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.305835825899 0.272083759551 112% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0877023087892 0.0996497079465 88% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0770598970029 0.0662205650399 116% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.165665907125 0.162205337803 102% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0248962519002 0.0443174109184 56% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.6 13.3589403974 87% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 53.21 53.8541721854 99% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 5.55761589404 56% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.3 11.0289183223 93% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.84 12.2367328918 97% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.16 8.42419426049 109% => OK
difficult_words: 83.0 63.6247240618 130% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 10.7273730684 103% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.2 10.498013245 88% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 11.2008830022 107% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 90.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 27.0 Out of 30
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