TPO 54- The Salton Sea in California is actually a salty inland lake. The level of salt in the lake's water—what scientists call its salinity—has been increasing steadily for years because the lake's water is evaporating faster than it is be

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TPO 54- The Salton Sea in California is actually a salty inland lake. The level of salt in the lake's water—what scientists call its salinity—has been increasing steadily for years because the lake's water is evaporating faster than it is being replaced by rainfall or rivers. If the trend continues, the lake's water will soon become so salty that the lake will be unable to support fish and bird populations. The lake would then become essentially a dead zone. Fortunately, there are several ways to reverse the trend that is threatening the lake's health.

The reading and lecture are both about lake salton sea salinity level. The author of the reading believes that the high salinity levels are harmful to birds and fishes in the area and there are three solutions that are suggested. However, the lecturer casts doubts about the claims in the article and refutes all the theories presented. She says that the removal of salt in the water is a great idea, but the solutions are not realistic.

First of all, the author points out that desilination facilities will help remove the salt in the lake water. It is mentioned that the water in the lake would evaporate into steam and the salt and other impurities will be left behind, thus the clean water will be returned to the lake. Conversely, the point is challenged by the lecturer. She says that it is true that the salinity content of the lake would drastically dropped but health hazards might pose threats to human beings. Moreover, she argues that salt and chemical toxic Solinum will be retained in our atmosphere and when people ingest the harmful chemical into our lungs it would be dangerous to our overall health.

Secondly, the author contends that another solution is to dilute the salinity of the lake with water coming from the ocean. The article notes that water coming from the ocean will help to reduce the lake salinity if it will be combined together thru pipelines and canal system. On the contrary, the lecturer rebuts this argument. She suggests that it will require the construction of the pipeline and canal to merge the water together. Furthermore, she elaborates on this by mentioning that local government do not have enough resources to allocate this project and the pacific ocean is 100 kms away from the Salton sea and it is very expensive.

Finally, the author states that by making walls to divide the section of the lake it will control the salinity of the lake. The lecturer, on the other hand, posits that this plan is unlikely to work on the long term. She puts forth the idea that the area is within local region frequency and intense geologic activity with earthquakes which will destroy the wall division. In addition, she also notes that the walls can only withstand on short period, but if earthquake will struck again the walls be totally destroyed and the division with high salinity content will mixed with the low salt content.

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Average: 7.3 (1 vote)
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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 421, Rule ID: DID_BASEFORM[1]
Message: The verb 'would' requires the base form of the verb: 'drop'
Suggestion: drop
...y content of the lake would drastically dropped but health hazards might pose threats t...
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Line 7, column 476, Rule ID: DID_BASEFORM[1]
Message: The verb 'will' requires the base form of the verb: 'strike'
Suggestion: strike
...on short period, but if earthquake will struck again the walls be totally destroyed an...
^^^^^^
Line 7, column 569, Rule ID: DID_BASEFORM[1]
Message: The verb 'will' requires the base form of the verb: 'mix'
Suggestion: mix
...ivision with high salinity content will mixed with the low salt content.
^^^^^

Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, conversely, finally, first, furthermore, however, if, moreover, second, secondly, so, thus, in addition, first of all, it is true, on the contrary, on the other hand

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 20.0 10.4613686534 191% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 16.0 5.04856512141 317% => Less auxiliary verb wanted.
Conjunction : 17.0 7.30242825607 233% => Less conjunction wanted
Relative clauses : 18.0 12.0772626932 149% => OK
Pronoun: 37.0 22.412803532 165% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 49.0 30.3222958057 162% => OK
Nominalization: 7.0 5.01324503311 140% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1967.0 1373.03311258 143% => OK
No of words: 410.0 270.72406181 151% => Less content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.79756097561 5.08290768461 94% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.49982852243 4.04702891845 111% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.34312060258 2.5805825403 91% => OK
Unique words: 198.0 145.348785872 136% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.482926829268 0.540411800872 89% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 611.1 419.366225166 146% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.55342163355 97% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 8.0 3.25607064018 246% => Less pronouns wanted as sentence beginning.
Article: 10.0 8.23620309051 121% => OK
Subordination: 0.0 1.25165562914 0% => More adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 2.0 1.51434878587 132% => OK
Preposition: 3.0 2.5761589404 116% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 18.0 13.0662251656 138% => OK
Sentence length: 22.0 21.2450331126 104% => OK
Sentence length SD: 49.5223169545 49.2860985944 100% => OK
Chars per sentence: 109.277777778 110.228320801 99% => OK
Words per sentence: 22.7777777778 21.698381199 105% => OK
Discourse Markers: 9.77777777778 7.06452816374 138% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.09492273731 98% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 4.19205298013 72% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 7.0 4.33554083885 161% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 7.0 4.45695364238 157% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 4.27373068433 94% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.232642238428 0.272083759551 86% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0824301467217 0.0996497079465 83% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0803644985988 0.0662205650399 121% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.148040176599 0.162205337803 91% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0460545799427 0.0443174109184 104% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.6 13.3589403974 94% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 57.61 53.8541721854 107% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 5.55761589404 56% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.7 11.0289183223 97% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.86 12.2367328918 89% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.46 8.42419426049 100% => OK
difficult_words: 97.0 63.6247240618 152% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.0 10.7273730684 75% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.8 10.498013245 103% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 11.2008830022 98% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 73.3333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 22.0 Out of 30
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