TPO 18- Do you agree or disagree with the following statement?
Students are more influenced by their teachers than by their friends.
Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.
There is no shortage of debate whether students are more influenced by their teachers than by their friends. In my humble opinion, I believe that friends are the most influential person in ones lives. I feel this way for two main reasons, which I will explore in the following essay.
First of all, friendship in essential in every human race. There is a saying that "No man can live on an island alone" and it is impossible to be happy without the help of our friends. Peers can easily influence the minds of their buddy because they spend most of their time together at school and bonding right after class. Majority of their time are spend with close friends rather than other people. For instance, my best friend in high school can greatly influence me with my decisions in life because she understands me well and know what I want. Having to deal with hard choices of life, I know my friend can clear my mind and help me decide which path to take. My friend influenced me to study well, because she herself excelled well in academic classes. As a result, we graduated with honors in high school and we surround ourselves with positive people who can uplift us to be a good individual. I believe that in order to influence other people, you must set a good example for others.
Secondly, teachers also can influence students but it has weak impact for myself. In addition, teachers at my time just taught us the curriculum and subjects we need to learn. I don't feel that they influence me to be better individual growing up. For example, my physics teacher on high school don't motive students who are far behind the subject. In fact, his style of teaching was more on letting students stand on their sit if they cannot correctly answer the questions. I think that has negative impact for students because instead of working hard for the subject they are failing they will not strive hard to excel because they feel that they are the weakest link in the class and they are not smart enough. In fact, when students failed on his exam the professor will call the names of students who get low grades and they sill stand in front of the class and telling the scores they got, so it is very humiliating for the students who failed the quiz. Their self esteem and confidence will be shattered because of this approach. To sum, professors only did their job to teach students and they don't have any effect on students to influence them to exceed in their future.
To summarize, I believe that people close to you are more influential. This is because friends can influence you deeply due to they know you better and share the same passion with each other.
Grammar and spelling errors:
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, if, second, secondly, so, well, for example, for instance, i feel, i think, in addition, in fact, as a result, first of all
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 18.0 15.1003584229 119% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 14.0 9.8082437276 143% => OK
Conjunction : 13.0 13.8261648746 94% => OK
Relative clauses : 14.0 11.0286738351 127% => OK
Pronoun: 74.0 43.0788530466 172% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 64.0 52.1666666667 123% => OK
Nominalization: 10.0 8.0752688172 124% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2195.0 1977.66487455 111% => OK
No of words: 477.0 407.700716846 117% => OK
Chars per words: 4.60167714885 4.8611393121 95% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.67336384929 4.48103885553 104% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.34026688755 2.67179642975 88% => OK
Unique words: 238.0 212.727598566 112% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.498951781971 0.524837075471 95% => OK
syllable_count: 652.5 618.680645161 105% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.51630824373 92% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 15.0 9.59856630824 156% => OK
Article: 0.0 3.08781362007 0% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 3.51792114695 85% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.86738351254 54% => OK
Preposition: 6.0 4.94265232975 121% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 23.0 20.6003584229 112% => OK
Sentence length: 20.0 20.1344086022 99% => OK
Sentence length SD: 46.9306692118 48.9658058833 96% => OK
Chars per sentence: 95.4347826087 100.406767564 95% => OK
Words per sentence: 20.7391304348 20.6045352989 101% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.13043478261 5.45110844103 112% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 5.0 5.5376344086 90% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 14.0 11.8709677419 118% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 3.85842293907 104% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 5.0 4.88709677419 102% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.233108355033 0.236089414692 99% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.07818617197 0.076458572812 102% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0767839721053 0.0737576698707 104% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.158662366281 0.150856017488 105% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.037918816724 0.0645574589148 59% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 10.6 11.7677419355 90% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 68.1 58.1214874552 117% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 8.7 10.1575268817 86% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 9.4 10.9000537634 86% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.44 8.01818996416 93% => OK
difficult_words: 85.0 86.8835125448 98% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 7.5 10.002688172 75% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.0 10.0537634409 99% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.247311828 88% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 70.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 21.0 Out of 30
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