Without a doubt, the influece of teachers and friends on students is considered one of the most important aspects of students lives. Recntly, many students are living in a very dynamic world and they get in touch with people from different perspective. I am sure that some people agree that students are more infulenced by their teachers than by their friends, while others would disagree. However, when it comes to me I totally agree that students are more infulenced by their friends. I feel this way for two reasons, which I will explore in the following essay.
To begin with, students spend a lot of time with their friends at the campus, which is the main cause of building strong relationship. Many students prefer to stay at the dorm during the year to get in touch with other friends from different perspective. My brother's experience is a compelling example of this. My brother is a student at medical school, and he is living in the dorm with his roommate. In fact, he always works with his friend on his graduation project. In addition, he spends plenty of time with his roommate at the library to finish his assignments. Furthermore, he always hangs out with him in tremendous subjects related to his life. So, with time, they trusted each other and they built a great friendship. Consequently, when my brother needs any advise he asks his friend to give him his opinion. This is because he believes that his friend thinks in effective way. Moreover, his friend knows his character and his interests. As a result, my brother strongly influenced by his colleague. On the other hand, my brother meets his professor once a week and there is no chance to spent time together. Also, my brother always shy and he can not speak friendly with his teachers. So, it is extremly hard for him to get influenced by his teachers. This experience taught me that students have a great impact on each other more than their teachers.
In addition, practice sports helps students to work together in effective environment. many students get involved in sports teams at the school, which is a great cahnce for them to interact to each other. For instance, my little daughter at elementar school and she is a member at the school's gym. In fact, every week, she goes to the gym to practice many sports. Moreover, she is able to see other students from different grades and classes. During that time, she can introduce herself to different people from different culture and they can explore many things together. Furthermore, she has many friends who can spend time with them during the weekend. Definitly, they can get close according to their interests. So, they can influence each other so easly. As you can see, students have the same minset and they can have a positive impact on each other on the long term.
In sum, I strongly agree that students are more influenced by their friends. This is because spending time at the campus helps students to build strong relationship, and because practice sports gets students in close environment.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 769, Rule ID: GIVE_ADVISE[2]
Message: Did you mean 'advice' (a noun)?
Suggestion: advice
...Consequently, when my brother needs any advise he asks his friend to give him his opin...
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Line 5, column 88, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: Many
...work together in effective environment. many students get involved in sports teams a...
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Line 5, column 286, Rule ID: POSSESIVE_APOSTROPHE[2]
Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'schools'' or 'school's'?
Suggestion: schools'; school's
...entar school and she is a member at the schools gym. In fact, every week, she goes to t...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, consequently, furthermore, however, if, moreover, so, while, for instance, i feel, in addition, in fact, as a result, to begin with, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 16.0 15.1003584229 106% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 10.0 9.8082437276 102% => OK
Conjunction : 12.0 13.8261648746 87% => OK
Relative clauses : 13.0 11.0286738351 118% => OK
Pronoun: 77.0 43.0788530466 179% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 83.0 52.1666666667 159% => OK
Nominalization: 9.0 8.0752688172 111% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2520.0 1977.66487455 127% => OK
No of words: 524.0 407.700716846 129% => OK
Chars per words: 4.80916030534 4.8611393121 99% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.7844588288 4.48103885553 107% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.58963769928 2.67179642975 97% => OK
Unique words: 227.0 212.727598566 107% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.43320610687 0.524837075471 83% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 739.8 618.680645161 120% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.51630824373 92% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 24.0 9.59856630824 250% => Less pronouns wanted as sentence beginning.
Article: 1.0 3.08781362007 32% => OK
Subordination: 5.0 3.51792114695 142% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 1.86738351254 107% => OK
Preposition: 10.0 4.94265232975 202% => Less preposition wanted as sentence beginnings.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 33.0 20.6003584229 160% => OK
Sentence length: 15.0 20.1344086022 74% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 27.0238475781 48.9658058833 55% => The essay contains lots of sentences with the similar length. More sentence varieties wanted.
Chars per sentence: 76.3636363636 100.406767564 76% => OK
Words per sentence: 15.8787878788 20.6045352989 77% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.72727272727 5.45110844103 87% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 5.5376344086 54% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 22.0 11.8709677419 185% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 3.85842293907 52% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 9.0 4.88709677419 184% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.171971771364 0.236089414692 73% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0583182818027 0.076458572812 76% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0765228637996 0.0737576698707 104% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.146705079757 0.150856017488 97% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0815795583906 0.0645574589148 126% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 9.2 11.7677419355 78% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 73.17 58.1214874552 126% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 6.8 10.1575268817 67% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.32 10.9000537634 95% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 6.82 8.01818996416 85% => OK
difficult_words: 81.0 86.8835125448 93% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.0 10.002688172 80% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.0 10.0537634409 80% => OK
text_standard: 7.0 10.247311828 68% => The average readability is low. Need to imporve the language.
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 70.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 21.0 Out of 30
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