TPO 54 Writing Integrated
The Salton Sea in California is actually a salty inland lake. The level of salt in the lake's water—what scientists call its salinity—has been increasing steadily for years because the lake's water is evaporating faster than it is being replaced by rainfall or rivers. If the trend continues, the lake's water will soon become so salty that the lake will be unable to support fish and bird populations. The lake would then become essentially a dead zone. Fortunately, there are several ways to reverse the trend that is threatening the lake's health.
The reading passage proposes several suggestions to help modify the increasing trend of the Salton Sea's salinity which is threatening the lake's life. However, the lecturer finds the ideas dubious and casts doubt on the reasons provided by the reading.
First, the author claims that the removal of lake water's salt using special desalination facilities would reduce the level of water salt. Conversely, the lecturer brings up the idea that desalination of water in this way presents some problems. For instance, although the facilities can remove salt, during the desalination process, they may leave behind solid materials which may cause serious health problems for people, like Selenium which is, in fact, a toxic material and if it is spread in the air by the wind and eventually the people breathe it, they face serious problems.
Furthermore, the reading holds the view that the ocean water which contains less salt can be transported into the lake by pipelines or canals. On the contrary, the professor underlines the fact that the method needs a large amount of investment which probably is not practical since local governments may not be able to pay for constructing hundreds of kilometers of pipelines. In other words, building such systems requires constructing pipes over long distances which is really expensive.
Finally, the reading passage asserts that by building a system of walls which divide the lake into sections, the salinity of the lake could be controlled. In contrast, the speaker dismisses the issue due to the fact that although the method could be helpful in the short term, it would not bring about durable results. Since the lake is located in a location where the geological activity is high, there might be some earthquakes which damage the constructed walls. Therefore, after an earthquake, the walls will be collapsed, and the water from the main section will be mixed with water from other parts.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 139, Rule ID: POSSESIVE_APOSTROPHE[2]
Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'lakes'' or 'lake's'?
Suggestion: lakes'; lake's
... Seas salinity which is threatening the lakes life. However, the lecturer finds the i...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
conversely, finally, first, furthermore, however, if, may, really, so, therefore, for instance, in contrast, in fact, in other words, on the contrary
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 14.0 10.4613686534 134% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 12.0 5.04856512141 238% => Less auxiliary verb wanted.
Conjunction : 5.0 7.30242825607 68% => OK
Relative clauses : 15.0 12.0772626932 124% => OK
Pronoun: 12.0 22.412803532 54% => OK
Preposition: 39.0 30.3222958057 129% => OK
Nominalization: 7.0 5.01324503311 140% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1629.0 1373.03311258 119% => OK
No of words: 316.0 270.72406181 117% => OK
Chars per words: 5.15506329114 5.08290768461 101% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.21620550194 4.04702891845 104% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.63323657619 2.5805825403 102% => OK
Unique words: 185.0 145.348785872 127% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.585443037975 0.540411800872 108% => OK
syllable_count: 486.9 419.366225166 116% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.55342163355 97% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 3.0 3.25607064018 92% => OK
Article: 11.0 8.23620309051 134% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 1.25165562914 240% => Less adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 1.0 1.51434878587 66% => OK
Preposition: 8.0 2.5761589404 311% => Less preposition wanted as sentence beginnings.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 12.0 13.0662251656 92% => OK
Sentence length: 26.0 21.2450331126 122% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 62.4559289064 49.2860985944 127% => OK
Chars per sentence: 135.75 110.228320801 123% => OK
Words per sentence: 26.3333333333 21.698381199 121% => OK
Discourse Markers: 12.4166666667 7.06452816374 176% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.09492273731 98% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 4.19205298013 24% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 2.0 4.33554083885 46% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 7.0 4.45695364238 157% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 4.27373068433 70% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.191069703327 0.272083759551 70% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0738751506142 0.0996497079465 74% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.070198339549 0.0662205650399 106% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.115004411513 0.162205337803 71% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0247658983607 0.0443174109184 56% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 16.0 13.3589403974 120% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 53.55 53.8541721854 99% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 5.55761589404 158% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 12.3 11.0289183223 112% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.94 12.2367328918 106% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.97 8.42419426049 106% => OK
difficult_words: 81.0 63.6247240618 127% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.5 10.7273730684 107% => OK
gunning_fog: 12.4 10.498013245 118% => OK
text_standard: 13.0 11.2008830022 116% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 90.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 27.0 Out of 30
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