TPO 54. The Salton Sea in California is actually a salty inland lake. The level of salt in the lake's water—what scientists call its salinity—has been increasing steadily for years because the lake's water is evaporating faster than it is be

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TPO 54. The Salton Sea in California is actually a salty inland lake. The level of salt in the lake's water—what scientists call its salinity—has been increasing steadily for years because the lake's water is evaporating faster than it is being replaced by rainfall or rivers. If the trend continues, the lake's water will soon become so salty that the lake will be unable to support fish and bird populations. The lake would then become essentially a dead zone. Fortunately, there are several ways to reverse the trend that is threatening the lake's health.

One option is direct removal of salt from the lake's water in special desalination facilities. Water from the lake would be pumped into the facilities and heated. This would cause the water to evaporate into steam, while salt and other materials dissolved in the water would be left behind. The steam would then be cooled down and returned to the lake as salt-free water. Gradually, the high salt levels would be reduced and the lake’s overall health would be restored.

Another possible solution is to dilute the salt level in the lake with water from the ocean. Since water in the Pacific Ocean is 20 percent less salty than water in the lake, bringing ocean water into the lake would decrease the lake’s salinity. The ocean water could be delivered through pipelines or canals.

Yet another solution would be to control the lake's salinity by constructing walls to divide the lake into several sections. In the smaller sections, salinity would be allowed to increase. However, in the main and largest section, salinity would be reduced and controlled by, among other things, directing all the freshwater from small rivers in the area to flow into that main section of the lake.

both of the reading passage and the lecture argues about how could reduce the level of salt from the lake's water. The author brings up some solutions which are concidered all dubious by the professor. I will explain both aspect and compaire them in the subsequence parageraphs.

First point which is proposed by the reading passage is that the water from the lake's water hited in order to to separate salts from the water. Conversly, the professor find this solution useless due to other chemical component remained in this process, element which are so danger for the human. so the professor disagree with this solution.

Secondly, bringing the ocean water to decrease the salts in the river is not a good opinion as professor said, since it cost for the government alot. She put it in argue that the pipe must be a thausand kilometer which will be so costly.

Finally, the author claims that dividing the lake into the several section will be solve the defect. On the other hand, the professor debate that it can work in the short time but in the long time the process will be stoped due to a geological phenomenon like eathqueke which caused collaps the sections.

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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 1, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: Both
both of the reading passage and the lecture ...
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Message: Possible typo: you repeated a word
Suggestion: to
...ter from the lakes water hited in order to to separate salts from the water. Conversl...
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Line 5, column 298, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: So
...ment which are so danger for the human. so the professor disagree with this soluti...
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Line 19, column 60, Rule ID: MANY_NN[1]
Message: Possible agreement error. The noun section seems to be countable; consider using: 'several sections'.
Suggestion: several sections
... claims that dividing the lake into the several section will be solve the defect. On the other ...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, finally, first, second, secondly, so, on the other hand

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 9.0 10.4613686534 86% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 7.0 5.04856512141 139% => OK
Conjunction : 3.0 7.30242825607 41% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 9.0 12.0772626932 75% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 13.0 22.412803532 58% => OK
Preposition: 26.0 30.3222958057 86% => OK
Nominalization: 6.0 5.01324503311 120% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 987.0 1373.03311258 72% => OK
No of words: 204.0 270.72406181 75% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.83823529412 5.08290768461 95% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.77926670891 4.04702891845 93% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.37258953133 2.5805825403 92% => OK
Unique words: 121.0 145.348785872 83% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.593137254902 0.540411800872 110% => OK
syllable_count: 300.6 419.366225166 72% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.55342163355 97% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 2.0 3.25607064018 61% => OK
Article: 4.0 8.23620309051 49% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 1.25165562914 80% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.51434878587 0% => OK
Preposition: 2.0 2.5761589404 78% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 10.0 13.0662251656 77% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 20.0 21.2450331126 94% => OK
Sentence length SD: 43.9618016009 49.2860985944 89% => OK
Chars per sentence: 98.7 110.228320801 90% => OK
Words per sentence: 20.4 21.698381199 94% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.0 7.06452816374 85% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.09492273731 98% => OK
Language errors: 4.0 4.19205298013 95% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 1.0 4.33554083885 23% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 7.0 4.45695364238 157% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 4.27373068433 47% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.162326174557 0.272083759551 60% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0634141511734 0.0996497079465 64% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0700292797615 0.0662205650399 106% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0985625692007 0.162205337803 61% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0219673696067 0.0443174109184 50% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.6 13.3589403974 87% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 59.64 53.8541721854 111% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 5.55761589404 56% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.9 11.0289183223 90% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.79 12.2367328918 88% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.42 8.42419426049 100% => OK
difficult_words: 49.0 63.6247240618 77% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 10.5 10.7273730684 98% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.0 10.498013245 95% => OK
text_standard: 10.0 11.2008830022 89% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 66.6666666667 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 20.0 Out of 30
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