TPO 50- Scientists are considering the possibility of sending humans to Mars in the coming decades. Although there have been successful manned missions to the Moon in the 1960s and 1970s, Mars is 150 times further away from Earth than the Moon is. Thus th

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TPO 50- Scientists are considering the possibility of sending humans to Mars in the coming decades. Although there have been successful manned missions to the Moon in the 1960s and 1970s, Mars is 150 times further away from Earth than the Moon is. Thus the project of sending humans to Mars would require solving an array of problems the Moon missions did not have to face

Both the reading and listening discuss sending humans to the Mars. The reading passage propose three problem that may occure in the space. The professor brings up solusion to those problem.

First of all, the reading passage states that lack of food, water, and oxygen is a big problem for the people in space. On the other hand, the lecturer holds the view that the hydropanic mehtod hepl to solve this problem. she explain that in this method put the root of plan into the water instead of soil. In result, the plan recycle water to the kleen eater and change the cabondiaxad to the oxygen and also the astronunt can cultivat foods.

secondly, the author claims that two years travel to the space can affect human's body. However professor underlines the fact that by using the several technics this problem will be eliminated. she mention to the regular exercise to increase bon abillity and also consum of calsum.

Finally, tthe exposition to the dangerous radiate mentioned by author could be controled as the professor states. she thinks the radiation from the sun are occationally hence we can dam it by a small shelter that have less weight. In addition a monitor can help the scapceship to approximate the amount and also the time of sun's radiations.

To sum up, although there is some problem in case of traveling to the space but the elit human brings up solusion.

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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 102, Rule ID: CD_NN[1]
Message: Possible agreement error. The noun 'problem' seems to be countable, so consider using: 'problems'.
Suggestion: problems
...Mars. The reading passage propose three problem that may occure in the space. The profe...
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Line 1, column 176, Rule ID: THIS_NNS[2]
Message: Did you mean 'this problem' or 'those problems'?
Suggestion: this problem; those problems
...ce. The professor brings up solusion to those problem. First of all, the reading passage st...
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Line 3, column 223, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: She
...anic mehtod hepl to solve this problem. she explain that in this method put the roo...
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Line 3, column 227, Rule ID: HE_VERB_AGR[1]
Message: The pronoun 'she' must be used with a third-person verb: 'explains'.
Suggestion: explains
... mehtod hepl to solve this problem. she explain that in this method put the root of pla...
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Line 5, column 1, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: Secondly
...lso the astronunt can cultivat foods. secondly, the author claims that two years trave...
^^^^^^^^
Line 5, column 88, Rule ID: SENT_START_CONJUNCTIVE_LINKING_ADVERB_COMMA[1]
Message: Did you forget a comma after a conjunctive/linking adverb?
Suggestion: However,
...el to the space can affect humans body. However professor underlines the fact that by u...
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Line 5, column 194, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: She
...chnics this problem will be eliminated. she mention to the regular exercise to incr...
^^^
Line 5, column 198, Rule ID: HE_VERB_AGR[1]
Message: The pronoun 'she' must be used with a third-person verb: 'mentions'.
Suggestion: mentions
...cs this problem will be eliminated. she mention to the regular exercise to increase bon...
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Line 7, column 70, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...he dangerous radiate mentioned by author could be controled as the professor stat...
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Line 7, column 116, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: She
...d be controled as the professor states. she thinks the radiation from the sun are o...
^^^
Line 7, column 236, Rule ID: SENT_START_CONJUNCTIVE_LINKING_ADVERB_COMMA[2]
Message: Did you forget a comma after a conjunctive/linking adverb?
Suggestion: addition,
...small shelter that have less weight. In addition a monitor can help the scapceship to ap...
^^^^^^^^

Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, finally, first, hence, however, may, second, secondly, so, in addition, first of all, to sum up, on the other hand

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 5.0 10.4613686534 48% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 7.0 5.04856512141 139% => OK
Conjunction : 7.0 7.30242825607 96% => OK
Relative clauses : 7.0 12.0772626932 58% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 16.0 22.412803532 71% => OK
Preposition: 34.0 30.3222958057 112% => OK
Nominalization: 4.0 5.01324503311 80% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1144.0 1373.03311258 83% => OK
No of words: 239.0 270.72406181 88% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.78661087866 5.08290768461 94% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.93187294222 4.04702891845 97% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.38228583441 2.5805825403 92% => OK
Unique words: 142.0 145.348785872 98% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.594142259414 0.540411800872 110% => OK
syllable_count: 352.8 419.366225166 84% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.55342163355 97% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 3.0 3.25607064018 92% => OK
Article: 6.0 8.23620309051 73% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 1.25165562914 80% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.51434878587 66% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 2.5761589404 155% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 14.0 13.0662251656 107% => OK
Sentence length: 17.0 21.2450331126 80% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 22.9968942002 49.2860985944 47% => The essay contains lots of sentences with the similar length. More sentence varieties wanted.
Chars per sentence: 81.7142857143 110.228320801 74% => OK
Words per sentence: 17.0714285714 21.698381199 79% => OK
Discourse Markers: 8.92857142857 7.06452816374 126% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.09492273731 122% => OK
Language errors: 11.0 4.19205298013 262% => Less language errors wanted.
Sentences with positive sentiment : 3.0 4.33554083885 69% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 6.0 4.45695364238 135% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 5.0 4.27373068433 117% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.0435380136653 0.272083759551 16% => The similarity between the topic and the content is low.
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0154810065578 0.0996497079465 16% => Sentence topic similarity is low.
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0229492103003 0.0662205650399 35% => Sentences are similar to each other.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0274303931354 0.162205337803 17% => Maybe some paragraphs are off the topic.
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0172678115754 0.0443174109184 39% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 9.7 13.3589403974 73% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 62.68 53.8541721854 116% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 5.55761589404 56% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 8.7 11.0289183223 79% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.21 12.2367328918 83% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.38 8.42419426049 99% => OK
difficult_words: 59.0 63.6247240618 93% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 6.0 10.7273730684 56% => Linsear_write_formula is low.
gunning_fog: 8.8 10.498013245 84% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 11.2008830022 80% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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It is not exactly right on the topic in the view of e-grader. Maybe there is a wrong essay topic.

Rates: 3.33333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 1.0 Out of 30
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