It is important to know about events happening around the world, even if it is unlikely that they will affect your daily life.
In the civilized and mordenized society, it is axiomatic that people around the world tied to each other. Aplethory of people possesse the conviction that knowing about event around the world will effect our daily life. whereas others might hold exactly the opposit view. I firmely believe that we must understand that what are going around us to improve our direction of life. In following, I am going to delve the most autstanding readon to advocate my point of view.
The first exquisite point to be mentioned is that the news around the world will affect to other country and conseqently to the every individual's life. I would like to start with economy. since all the country around the world tied to gether economicaly, so every little change would present a huge effect on other country. For example, I live in a country with have oily economy that means the goverment mangage the country by the money earning by sailing oils and gas. In this matter, when other contry for example unitet state strat to increase their oil product. As a result the price of oil will decreas. Accordingly, my country goes to inflamation situation which is coused a drop of incom to every individual. it should be stressed that the effect of buterfly theory will apply intuations.
Another noteworthy point supporting this opinion is that, As we are living in a increasingly developed society, imagiration have took a place in all society. it can give rise that every family have a relative in other country , as a result every family should be wory about the event that happen around the world. I have a sister which imagerate to united state. last year the president of us impose a new low for iranian imagiration which didn't let to reletive of iranian imigration to fly and visit their family. I was so sad because I missed my sister alot, besides she was ging to have a baby. By and large, it is stablished beyand doubt that evey person around the word are depend on what happend in other society.
To put it biefly, all enumerated reason lead us to the conclusion that it is important to know events happening around the worls because it will effect direct or undirect on our life.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
accordingly, besides, but, first, if, so, whereas, for example, as a result, by and large, to start with
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 14.0 15.1003584229 93% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 12.0 9.8082437276 122% => OK
Conjunction : 6.0 13.8261648746 43% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 16.0 11.0286738351 145% => OK
Pronoun: 42.0 43.0788530466 97% => OK
Preposition: 56.0 52.1666666667 107% => OK
Nominalization: 8.0 8.0752688172 99% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1798.0 1977.66487455 91% => OK
No of words: 381.0 407.700716846 93% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.71916010499 4.8611393121 97% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.41805628031 4.48103885553 99% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.50061394287 2.67179642975 94% => OK
Unique words: 202.0 212.727598566 95% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.530183727034 0.524837075471 101% => OK
syllable_count: 588.6 618.680645161 95% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 11.0 9.59856630824 115% => OK
Article: 1.0 3.08781362007 32% => OK
Subordination: 5.0 3.51792114695 142% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.86738351254 0% => OK
Preposition: 7.0 4.94265232975 142% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 20.0 20.6003584229 97% => OK
Sentence length: 19.0 20.1344086022 94% => OK
Sentence length SD: 41.7892330631 48.9658058833 85% => OK
Chars per sentence: 89.9 100.406767564 90% => OK
Words per sentence: 19.05 20.6045352989 92% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.2 5.45110844103 95% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 16.0 5.5376344086 289% => Less language errors wanted.
Sentences with positive sentiment : 7.0 11.8709677419 59% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 5.0 3.85842293907 130% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 8.0 4.88709677419 164% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.238796597828 0.236089414692 101% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0680650473698 0.076458572812 89% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.10111869818 0.0737576698707 137% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.165397120969 0.150856017488 110% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0743207920204 0.0645574589148 115% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 10.3 11.7677419355 88% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 60.65 58.1214874552 104% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.5 10.1575268817 94% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.1 10.9000537634 93% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.1 8.01818996416 101% => OK
difficult_words: 85.0 86.8835125448 98% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.0 10.002688172 80% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.6 10.0537634409 95% => OK
text_standard: 10.0 10.247311828 98% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 70.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 21.0 Out of 30
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