In the past, young people depended too much on their parents to make decisions for them; today young people are better able to make decisions about their own lives.
As technology has increasingly developed, people struggle to find the best career. In the long past ago, children continue their parent's job since they hadn’t a large variety of chosen. furthermore, the parent can affect directly on their children destiny, and the children are condemned to be a farmer or be a son of an aristocratic family and help the parents to govern their asset. During the era, humans have been changed this inertia and every child can make a big decision in their life and have less dependency on their parents. Besides, the parent has a lower role in the career of their children. I will open a great point of view to explain the reason that causes to fade parent’s role in their children's careers.
I could point out, first of all, the united nations (un) impose directly force on government that the primary and secondary schools should be free of charge for every child around the world. this means that children whether those are in poverty position in the society or those growing up in a wealthy situation are equally educated. In the matter of fact, the family that are below poverty level, parents couldn’t aggregate the information in order to help their children in the scope of their future. For this purpose, children should gather information to construct their future. furthermore those who was growing in a family that parent have a high position I the society, should investigate their own destiny by less interface of their parent due to there is so many occupation that parent haven’t no imagination about the construction of them.
Second, there is no doubt that parent has role in the thoughts of their adolescent, but the society play key role in training them. there is a plenty group in the society that penetrate to the mind of children and can be more influence to do versa of parent’s idea. For instance, today peers are more closely to each other rather than before because the parent have constantly time to spend with their children so there learn a lot from each other.
To recapitulate, all mentioned before illustrate that parent fade to make a destiny for their children and nowadays, by improving the technology young people gain a lot of information in some case more than their parent which are adequate for making a decision for whole life.
Grammar and spelling errors:
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Suggestion: Furthermore
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Suggestion: Furthermore
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Suggestion: furthermore,
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Suggestion: many occupations
...face of their parent due to there is so many occupation that parent haven't no imagination...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
besides, but, first, furthermore, if, second, so, for instance, no doubt, first of all
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 15.0 15.1003584229 99% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 8.0 9.8082437276 82% => OK
Conjunction : 10.0 13.8261648746 72% => OK
Relative clauses : 11.0 11.0286738351 100% => OK
Pronoun: 37.0 43.0788530466 86% => OK
Preposition: 60.0 52.1666666667 115% => OK
Nominalization: 12.0 8.0752688172 149% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1944.0 1977.66487455 98% => OK
No of words: 397.0 407.700716846 97% => OK
Chars per words: 4.89672544081 4.8611393121 101% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.46372701284 4.48103885553 100% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.64824058224 2.67179642975 99% => OK
Unique words: 201.0 212.727598566 94% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.506297229219 0.524837075471 96% => OK
syllable_count: 613.8 618.680645161 99% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 3.0 9.59856630824 31% => OK
Article: 4.0 3.08781362007 130% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 3.51792114695 28% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 1.86738351254 107% => OK
Preposition: 5.0 4.94265232975 101% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 15.0 20.6003584229 73% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 26.0 20.1344086022 129% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 60.6997711876 48.9658058833 124% => OK
Chars per sentence: 129.6 100.406767564 129% => OK
Words per sentence: 26.4666666667 20.6045352989 128% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.73333333333 5.45110844103 105% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 8.0 5.5376344086 144% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 6.0 11.8709677419 51% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 3.85842293907 104% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 5.0 4.88709677419 102% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.316670104701 0.236089414692 134% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.10623957621 0.076458572812 139% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0813391418904 0.0737576698707 110% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.212254500664 0.150856017488 141% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0907434039092 0.0645574589148 141% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.9 11.7677419355 127% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 53.55 58.1214874552 92% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 12.3 10.1575268817 121% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.44 10.9000537634 105% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.19 8.01818996416 102% => OK
difficult_words: 82.0 86.8835125448 94% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 10.002688172 110% => OK
gunning_fog: 12.4 10.0537634409 123% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 10.247311828 117% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 73.3333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 22.0 Out of 30
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