TPO 38 Writing Independent
Do you agree or disagree with the following statement?
Leadership comes naturally: one cannot learn to be a leader.
Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.
Since the dawn of civilization, different groups have been formed in various levels of society with certain goals among which a certain person or group has a special duty to manage the people and the activities. As we know, such people are called leaders who usually put certain decisions into action and cope with the problems in a group, organization or society. Certain characteristics are considered indispensable for a leader such as management, determination, tenacity, etc. In this regard, some people are inclined toward the fact that to have such qualities a person should inherently have such qualities and thus it is almost impossible for others to become a leader while others hold exactly the opposite view. I personally believe that it is possible that one learns to be a leader. In what follows, I will elaborate on my idea through two significant reasons.
First of all, no one can't deny the fact that the nurturing process in every individual's life has a great impact on the person's traits. The very activities and the experiences in childhood and afterward the experiences at schools have a great impact on the person's desires, views, and most importantly personality. Through playing games with friends, a child can learn certain things that he can either be a leader or the person who obeys the rules. Also, he would be familiar with the responsibilities of a leader. But, the external factors may lead him to prefer each of the roles. Moreover, at school, he can learn to practice the abilities with the school activities. Besides, the students can experience and practice being a leader when assigned by their teacher to be a leader of a group. The experiences, the activities and the results they see in such activities, form the student’s attitude and skill about the leadership.
Moreover, in addition to the experiences in the person's early life, certain courses in the schools and universities which are taught by knowledgeable and experienced people can have a conspicuous influence on everyone who aims to be a leader. A case in point is one of my uncles. He used to be a reserved guy who always avoided taking responsibilities let alone leading a number of people when he was a teenager. After entering the university in his favorite major, mechanical engineering, he created new designs of a certain machine, which won many awards. Soon, he became passionate about running a new company related to his field. But, this time rather than passing on the responsibilities of management to someone else, he thought of himself as a leader. By attending many workshops and other activities, he achieved the qualities and after the establishment of his company, he started to flourish as a great manager and leader.
To recapitulate, all aforementioned reasons lead us to the fact that one can learn to be a leader and we can't necessarily conclude that all leaders were naturally qualified for such a role. Although the fact that certain qualities are innate in people and these qualities play significant roles in the qualification of a leader, the fact that these qualities can be raised in the individuals in the young age, or be transferred through academic courses almost dismisses the fact that leadership should come naturally.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 22, Rule ID: CANT[1]
Message: Did you mean 'can't' or 'cannot'?
Suggestion: can't; cannot
...ficant reasons. First of all, no one cant deny the fact that the nurturing proces...
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Line 3, column 77, Rule ID: POSSESIVE_APOSTROPHE[1]
Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'individuals'' or 'individual's'?
Suggestion: individuals'; individual's
...act that the nurturing process in every individuals life has a great impact on the persons ...
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Line 7, column 106, Rule ID: CANT[1]
Message: Did you mean 'can't' or 'cannot'?
Suggestion: can't; cannot
...hat one can learn to be a leader and we cant necessarily conclude that all leaders w...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, besides, but, first, if, may, moreover, so, thus, while, in addition, such as, first of all
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 21.0 15.1003584229 139% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 12.0 9.8082437276 122% => OK
Conjunction : 20.0 13.8261648746 145% => OK
Relative clauses : 19.0 11.0286738351 172% => OK
Pronoun: 40.0 43.0788530466 93% => OK
Preposition: 71.0 52.1666666667 136% => OK
Nominalization: 9.0 8.0752688172 111% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2733.0 1977.66487455 138% => OK
No of words: 543.0 407.700716846 133% => OK
Chars per words: 5.03314917127 4.8611393121 104% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.82725184711 4.48103885553 108% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.03144740318 2.67179642975 113% => OK
Unique words: 269.0 212.727598566 126% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.495395948435 0.524837075471 94% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 865.8 618.680645161 140% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.51630824373 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 11.0 9.59856630824 115% => OK
Article: 8.0 3.08781362007 259% => Less articles wanted as sentence beginning.
Subordination: 4.0 3.51792114695 114% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 1.86738351254 107% => OK
Preposition: 9.0 4.94265232975 182% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 23.0 20.6003584229 112% => OK
Sentence length: 23.0 20.1344086022 114% => OK
Sentence length SD: 67.2136227078 48.9658058833 137% => OK
Chars per sentence: 118.826086957 100.406767564 118% => OK
Words per sentence: 23.6086956522 20.6045352989 115% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.21739130435 5.45110844103 77% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 5.5376344086 54% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 12.0 11.8709677419 101% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 3.85842293907 52% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 9.0 4.88709677419 184% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.149361580179 0.236089414692 63% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0505488130872 0.076458572812 66% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0516450192063 0.0737576698707 70% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.101894938174 0.150856017488 68% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.04309416982 0.0645574589148 67% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.1 11.7677419355 120% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 48.13 58.1214874552 83% => OK
smog_index: 11.2 6.10430107527 183% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 12.3 10.1575268817 121% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.19 10.9000537634 112% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.32 8.01818996416 104% => OK
difficult_words: 122.0 86.8835125448 140% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 15.0 10.002688172 150% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.2 10.0537634409 111% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 10.247311828 117% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 73.3333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 22.0 Out of 30
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