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tpo 65

First, the professor disputes the reading that tuna farming will lead to more serious overfishing toward the young fish, casusing reduction of the wild tuna. Instead, He cites that to solve the problem of female tuna is disalbe to lay eggs in captivity, the scientists have invented a kind of biologically chemical that can envoket them to lay eggs. Owing to the new invention, tuna farmer will not have to catch the young tuna in the ocean to supply the amount of tuna.

Second, about the cost of breeding tuna, the professor concurs with the high requirement of protein to raise tuna, but he thinks it is not essential to use the expensive fish as main food. Rather, he points out that some kinds of plante are also equipped with high protein and the other nuterient that tuna need. Hence, changing to feed the tuna by the plant, the cost of breeding can significiantly decrease.

Lastly, even though tuna are prone to infection because of the parasites, the professor believes we can solve the problem by scientific results. In fact, there have already been some researches that the potential cause of the problem and proposes some possible solutions. Therefore, sooner or later, the problem of the parasite can be handled.

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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 364, Rule ID: NEW_XX[1]
Message: Use simply 'invention'.
Suggestion: invention
... envoket them to lay eggs. Owing to the new invention, tuna farmer will not have to catch the...
^^^^^^^^^^^^^

Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, hence, if, lastly, second, so, therefore, in fact, kind of

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 6.0 10.4613686534 57% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 7.0 5.04856512141 139% => OK
Conjunction : 4.0 7.30242825607 55% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 6.0 12.0772626932 50% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 12.0 22.412803532 54% => OK
Preposition: 32.0 30.3222958057 106% => OK
Nominalization: 4.0 5.01324503311 80% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1023.0 1373.03311258 75% => OK
No of words: 210.0 270.72406181 78% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.87142857143 5.08290768461 96% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.80675409584 4.04702891845 94% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.5120345261 2.5805825403 97% => OK
Unique words: 123.0 145.348785872 85% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.585714285714 0.540411800872 108% => OK
syllable_count: 317.7 419.366225166 76% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.55342163355 97% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 2.0 3.25607064018 61% => OK
Article: 6.0 8.23620309051 73% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 1.25165562914 80% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.51434878587 66% => OK
Preposition: 3.0 2.5761589404 116% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 9.0 13.0662251656 69% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 23.0 21.2450331126 108% => OK
Sentence length SD: 37.3822430944 49.2860985944 76% => OK
Chars per sentence: 113.666666667 110.228320801 103% => OK
Words per sentence: 23.3333333333 21.698381199 108% => OK
Discourse Markers: 8.44444444444 7.06452816374 120% => OK
Paragraphs: 3.0 4.09492273731 73% => More paragraphs wanted.
Language errors: 1.0 4.19205298013 24% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 0.0 4.33554083885 0% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 5.0 4.45695364238 112% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 4.27373068433 94% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.51388104885 0.272083759551 189% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.211188126198 0.0996497079465 212% => Sentence topic similarity is high.
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.126359372568 0.0662205650399 191% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.326684719528 0.162205337803 201% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.140812337068 0.0443174109184 318% => More connections among paragraphs wanted.

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.2 13.3589403974 99% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 56.59 53.8541721854 105% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 5.55761589404 56% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.1 11.0289183223 101% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.26 12.2367328918 92% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.61 8.42419426049 102% => OK
difficult_words: 51.0 63.6247240618 80% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 13.5 10.7273730684 126% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.2 10.498013245 107% => OK
text_standard: 14.0 11.2008830022 125% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Minimum four paragraphs wanted. The correct pattern:

para 1: introduction
para 2: doubt 1
para 3: doubt 2
para 4: doubt 3

Less contents wanted from the reading passages(25%), more content wanted from the lecture (75%).

Don't need a conclusion paragraph.

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Rates: 76.6666666667 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 23.0 Out of 30
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