TPO INTEGRATED 46

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TPO INTEGRATED 46

There has been some debates among whether the electronic data base is beneficial or not.
 
The lecture says that keeping the medical records of the patients electronically  is not beneficial. However, the reading opposes this point by saying that keeping the data base of the patients saved electronically is beneficial.
 
 
     The first point of dispute is if the electronic medical records will save money . The lecture claims that patient's records should be saved on  papers for backup. Also, some  papers  records are signed by the patients so they have to be kept in the paper form. Thus, the doctors will spend more money for the storage places. However, the reading refutes this point by saying that electronic records will save money as they are easily accessed by the doctors at any time. They do not need a space for storage.
 
 
 
   Another controversial issue is if the electronic records will prevent errors . The professor contents that most doctors write their notes by using pens and papers, and  then the stuff interpret this hand writing to electronic data base. So the poor human's mistakes will not be prevented. But the author of the reading disagrees, he says that the electronic medical records will reduce the chance of errors as they are in standardization form and legible computer fonts.
 
  The final point of dispute is if the medical records will aid the researchers . The lecture claims that it is difficult to access the medical records of the patients. There are a lot of strict rules and permits needed. The patients can easily lock their records except for their own treatments. Yet the reading refutes this point by saying that the medical records will help the researchers by gathering more information.

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Average: 7.3 (1 vote)
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Grammar and spelling errors:
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...tronic data base is beneficial or not.   The lecture says that keeping the medica...
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...that patients records should be saved on  papers for backup. Also, some  papers  r...
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... saved on  papers for backup. Also, some  papers  records are signed by the patien...
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...n  papers for backup. Also, some  papers  records are signed by the patients so th...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, however, if, so, then, thus, except for

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 15.0 10.4613686534 143% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 11.0 5.04856512141 218% => Less auxiliary verb wanted.
Conjunction : 7.0 7.30242825607 96% => OK
Relative clauses : 8.0 12.0772626932 66% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 21.0 22.412803532 94% => OK
Preposition: 24.0 30.3222958057 79% => OK
Nominalization: 2.0 5.01324503311 40% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1486.0 1373.03311258 108% => OK
No of words: 297.0 270.72406181 110% => OK
Chars per words: 5.00336700337 5.08290768461 98% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.15134772569 4.04702891845 103% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.60204193322 2.5805825403 101% => OK
Unique words: 141.0 145.348785872 97% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.474747474747 0.540411800872 88% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 437.4 419.366225166 104% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.55342163355 97% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 2.0 3.25607064018 61% => OK
Article: 7.0 8.23620309051 85% => OK
Subordination: 0.0 1.25165562914 0% => More adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 3.0 1.51434878587 198% => OK
Preposition: 0.0 2.5761589404 0% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 18.0 13.0662251656 138% => OK
Sentence length: 16.0 21.2450331126 75% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 37.3779495306 49.2860985944 76% => OK
Chars per sentence: 82.5555555556 110.228320801 75% => OK
Words per sentence: 16.5 21.698381199 76% => OK
Discourse Markers: 3.16666666667 7.06452816374 45% => More transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.09492273731 122% => OK
Language errors: 13.0 4.19205298013 310% => Less language errors wanted.
Sentences with positive sentiment : 8.0 4.33554083885 185% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 6.0 4.45695364238 135% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 4.27373068433 94% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.49069180844 0.272083759551 180% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.177204298653 0.0996497079465 178% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.103827700474 0.0662205650399 157% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.279604430364 0.162205337803 172% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0985737561022 0.0443174109184 222% => More connections among paragraphs wanted.

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 10.4 13.3589403974 78% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 63.7 53.8541721854 118% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 5.55761589404 56% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 8.4 11.0289183223 76% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.42 12.2367328918 93% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.57 8.42419426049 90% => OK
difficult_words: 59.0 63.6247240618 93% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.5 10.7273730684 79% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.4 10.498013245 80% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 11.2008830022 80% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 73.3333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 22.0 Out of 30
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