TPO26 - Integrated TOEFL essay
The reading discusses the expanding of zebra mussel to north america. The author mentions the reasons which can anticipate that these zebra mussel are haphazerd for fish population of north america. Otherwise, the speaker tries to reject these agreements to approve that if zebra mussel spreading can't be stopped, humans don't have enough knowledge to pause it.
First of all, based on the passage, they can be transported by ships. The author mentions that these zerba mussle can undrego conditions which are in the ballast water to reach north america, or they can stick themselves to the bottom of ships. In contrary, the speaker states another aspect of this issue. she points out that the ships can be required to travel in the salt water, and it can kill zerba mussels. So the first reason given by the author omitted from the options.
Moreover, the lecturer explains that being dominent is just the begining for the zerba mussels. The other fish can change their habitats to survive. she expresses that they maybe have negative effects on fish which eat planktons, but they can contribute with other fish. The positive point can be eliminating the number of fish which compete to other fish. However, this describtion is the opposite side of what the passage states. On the basis of the article, being dominant and declining the averall fish population is the only effects zerba mussles can have.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 298, Rule ID: CANT[1]
Message: Did you mean 'can't' or 'cannot'?
Suggestion: can't; cannot
... approve that if zebra mussel spreading cant be stopped, humans dont have enough kno...
^^^^
Line 1, column 322, Rule ID: EN_CONTRACTION_SPELLING
Message: Possible spelling mistake found
Suggestion: don't
...ussel spreading cant be stopped, humans dont have enough knowledge to pause it. Fi...
^^^^
Line 3, column 308, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: She
...er states another aspect of this issue. she points out that the ships can be requir...
^^^
Line 5, column 150, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: She
...h can change their habitats to survive. she expresses that they maybe have negative...
^^^
Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, first, however, if, may, moreover, so, first of all
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 11.0 10.4613686534 105% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 10.0 5.04856512141 198% => OK
Conjunction : 4.0 7.30242825607 55% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 10.0 12.0772626932 83% => OK
Pronoun: 21.0 22.412803532 94% => OK
Preposition: 29.0 30.3222958057 96% => OK
Nominalization: 3.0 5.01324503311 60% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1172.0 1373.03311258 85% => OK
No of words: 236.0 270.72406181 87% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.96610169492 5.08290768461 98% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.91947592106 4.04702891845 97% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.36425490066 2.5805825403 92% => OK
Unique words: 130.0 145.348785872 89% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.550847457627 0.540411800872 102% => OK
syllable_count: 356.4 419.366225166 85% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.55342163355 97% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 4.0 3.25607064018 123% => OK
Article: 8.0 8.23620309051 97% => OK
Subordination: 0.0 1.25165562914 0% => More adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 3.0 1.51434878587 198% => OK
Preposition: 2.0 2.5761589404 78% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 14.0 13.0662251656 107% => OK
Sentence length: 16.0 21.2450331126 75% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 37.0093755358 49.2860985944 75% => OK
Chars per sentence: 83.7142857143 110.228320801 76% => OK
Words per sentence: 16.8571428571 21.698381199 78% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.0 7.06452816374 57% => More transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 3.0 4.09492273731 73% => More paragraphs wanted.
Language errors: 4.0 4.19205298013 95% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 3.0 4.33554083885 69% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 4.45695364238 45% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 9.0 4.27373068433 211% => Less facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.347067039531 0.272083759551 128% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.116441477809 0.0996497079465 117% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.079203860206 0.0662205650399 120% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.23102280741 0.162205337803 142% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0910265669124 0.0443174109184 205% => More connections among paragraphs wanted.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 10.4 13.3589403974 78% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 63.7 53.8541721854 118% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 5.55761589404 56% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 8.4 11.0289183223 76% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.25 12.2367328918 92% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.65 8.42419426049 103% => OK
difficult_words: 63.0 63.6247240618 99% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 10.7273730684 103% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.4 10.498013245 80% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 11.2008830022 80% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Minimum four paragraphs wanted. The correct pattern:
para 1: introduction
para 2: doubt 1
para 3: doubt 2
para 4: doubt 3
Less contents wanted from the reading passages(25%), more content wanted from the lecture (75%).
Don't need a conclusion paragraph.
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Rates: 60.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 18.0 Out of 30
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