TPO20 – Independent: A/D? Successful people try new things and take risks rather than only doing what they know how to do well.
In this intriguing world, nothing's clear about future. this fact influences on whatever humans want to do in their lives. I, personally speaking, feels that this is an important and determining part of the success process to predict the results, and examine their positive and negative results at the same time and finally take risk of them. this is the approach which prosperous people utilize. In what followed, the reasons supporting my viewpoint are vindicated.
To begin with, courage is one of a attitude of their personality.When brave people take risks, they know the possibility of their failure. this motivates them to work harder until they reach their goals. because they are aware of the problems they might face to, they prepare themselves to solve them as well as they can. they anticipate the feasable obstacule and blocks they must take them away from their route to the success. To put it into a more vivid picture, my cousin is the chief of his factory. he feels a significant stree. there is alot of pressure on him, but he is the most prosperous person I've ever seen in my life. he always pay attention to his competiters, what they do or going to do. that's why he always know what should he do at the exact time to have the best results. Although, he knows that his conclusion about other factories works is just a guesst.
Moreover, if a person just do his work completely, it doesn't mean he always can be successful. As I mentioned, there are a lot of problems which are inpredictable, and he should solve them. As an example, imagine a surgen who has an emergancy patient and his disease is unclear. The surgen decide to surger the patient and find out his disease while he is operating the patient. he always do his job great, but this is the exact time taking risks to be more successful.
In conclusion, taking all the aforementioned reasons, in my book it is unavoidable to take risks for achieving success. I believe in this way because of the reasons I described
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, finally, if, moreover, so, well, while, in conclusion, as well as, to begin with
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 17.0 15.1003584229 113% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 6.0 9.8082437276 61% => OK
Conjunction : 11.0 13.8261648746 80% => OK
Relative clauses : 6.0 11.0286738351 54% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 58.0 43.0788530466 135% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 42.0 52.1666666667 81% => OK
Nominalization: 1.0 8.0752688172 12% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1648.0 1977.66487455 83% => OK
No of words: 352.0 407.700716846 86% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.68181818182 4.8611393121 96% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.33147354134 4.48103885553 97% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.69121373957 2.67179642975 101% => OK
Unique words: 189.0 212.727598566 89% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.536931818182 0.524837075471 102% => OK
syllable_count: 517.5 618.680645161 84% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 13.0 9.59856630824 135% => OK
Article: 2.0 3.08781362007 65% => OK
Subordination: 5.0 3.51792114695 142% => OK
Conjunction: 4.0 1.86738351254 214% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 6.0 4.94265232975 121% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 22.0 20.6003584229 107% => OK
Sentence length: 16.0 20.1344086022 79% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 37.4089804483 48.9658058833 76% => OK
Chars per sentence: 74.9090909091 100.406767564 75% => OK
Words per sentence: 16.0 20.6045352989 78% => OK
Discourse Markers: 3.86363636364 5.45110844103 71% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 17.0 5.5376344086 307% => Less language errors wanted.
Sentences with positive sentiment : 15.0 11.8709677419 126% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 3.85842293907 78% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 4.88709677419 82% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.218141568843 0.236089414692 92% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0617405848121 0.076458572812 81% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0620585225894 0.0737576698707 84% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.126832432331 0.150856017488 84% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0555772062622 0.0645574589148 86% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 8.6 11.7677419355 73% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 63.7 58.1214874552 110% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 8.4 10.1575268817 83% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 9.57 10.9000537634 88% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.66 8.01818996416 96% => OK
difficult_words: 72.0 86.8835125448 83% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 8.5 10.002688172 85% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.4 10.0537634409 84% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.247311828 88% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 60.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 18.0 Out of 30
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.