Do you agree or disagree with the following statement?
Successful people try new things and take risks rather than only doing what they know how to do well.
Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.
I agree with the opinion that taking risks is fundamentally important for innovation and success. I feel this way for many reasons, which I will discuss in the following essay.
first of all, exploring the unknown helps us learn the right path. Not every try could be a breakthrough. However, we could benefit a lot from our failures. The survival bias is a perfect example on what I mean. Companies were trying to solve the dilemma why fighter jets that survived world war II had many hits to the wings, but the rest of the body was intact. This was extremely significant since they wanted to make the aircrafts more resilient. At first glance, one might think that wings needed more shields to protect them. Nevertheless, this is not exactly the case since you are investigating the planes that made it to safety. Other planes that got hits to the main frame was more vulnerable, was shot down and never reached their final destination and it was actually the body that required more support. Thus, manufacturers caught up the lesson and finally changed the design. This is a simple story about how we could learn from our failures.
Secondly, every major success demands a sacrifice, whether it was a job or education. Most entrepreneurs in this century either left their job or dropped out of an Ivy league university. For instance, the founder of Amazon chose to abandon his wall street job and establish his own online business. What's more, Microsoft former CEO was a Harvard dropout. This does not mean that everyone should give up their career and follow their passion. Instead, we have to be fully aware of the risks of our decisions since statistics show that the rate of success of startups is very small and individuals may end up in debt after devoting time and money to their ideas.
To sum up, I am convinced that humans are on top of the animal kingdom due to their risk-taking behavior to domesticate animals, tame fire and discover new lands. Had we stayed in our comfort zone, we would have still been hunters and gatherers.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
actually, but, finally, first, however, if, may, nevertheless, second, secondly, so, still, thus, for instance, i feel, i mean, first of all, to sum up
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 18.0 15.1003584229 119% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 8.0 9.8082437276 82% => OK
Conjunction : 13.0 13.8261648746 94% => OK
Relative clauses : 10.0 11.0286738351 91% => OK
Pronoun: 44.0 43.0788530466 102% => OK
Preposition: 40.0 52.1666666667 77% => OK
Nominalization: 4.0 8.0752688172 50% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1705.0 1977.66487455 86% => OK
No of words: 357.0 407.700716846 88% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.77591036415 4.8611393121 98% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.34677393335 4.48103885553 97% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.55056744953 2.67179642975 95% => OK
Unique words: 227.0 212.727598566 107% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.635854341737 0.524837075471 121% => OK
syllable_count: 520.2 618.680645161 84% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 10.0 9.59856630824 104% => OK
Article: 2.0 3.08781362007 65% => OK
Subordination: 0.0 3.51792114695 0% => More adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 1.0 1.86738351254 54% => OK
Preposition: 2.0 4.94265232975 40% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 21.0 20.6003584229 102% => OK
Sentence length: 17.0 20.1344086022 84% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 44.5662898951 48.9658058833 91% => OK
Chars per sentence: 81.1904761905 100.406767564 81% => OK
Words per sentence: 17.0 20.6045352989 83% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.19047619048 5.45110844103 132% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 5.5376344086 54% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 13.0 11.8709677419 110% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 3.85842293907 52% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 6.0 4.88709677419 123% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.0921726023827 0.236089414692 39% => The similarity between the topic and the content is low.
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0277566660611 0.076458572812 36% => Sentence topic similarity is low.
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0350384962125 0.0737576698707 48% => Sentences are similar to each other.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0629529432884 0.150856017488 42% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0310354581609 0.0645574589148 48% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 9.6 11.7677419355 82% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 62.68 58.1214874552 108% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 8.7 10.1575268817 86% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.15 10.9000537634 93% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.11 8.01818996416 101% => OK
difficult_words: 82.0 86.8835125448 94% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 6.5 10.002688172 65% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.8 10.0537634409 88% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.247311828 88% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 76.6666666667 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 23.0 Out of 30
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