TPO60
The reading text and lecture are both about the what efforts the wildlife expert should take to save the Rhino from the Poachers. While the author proposes the three theory to save the rhino. At the same time, lecturer is disputes all these thories and states that these claims have some weakness.
First of all, the reading text suggests that, expert can dehorn the Rhino, which can make it unattractive to the poachers. It is also mentions that, this process is does not hurts the animal. In contrast to that, lecturer claims that, Horn is the very important for the survival of the rhino in the wild. Moreover, he states that, rhino use his horn to dig the hole in soil to find the water, navigate his small baby and lastly, to protect its territory from the other animals.
Furthermore, reading passage argues that, By educating the buyer of the horn, we can save the rhino population. However, professor opposes that view of the author and goes on to say that, it is not the effective way. When person is binding some ancient belief of the health benefits of the rhino horn, at that time it is became too hard to convince them to not use this horn. Because, person's old belief is more stronger than the, educator's thinking.
In the last, the writer posits that, If government will legalize the sell of the rhino horn , then It were effective to save the rhino. On the other hand, tutor does not supports this claim and said that, If government will do this then, it will became more hard to save the rhino population. Because, If government will do that, as a result of that the more people willing to horn, which are earlier have the fear of the illegal sale of the horn. Eventually, the demand of the rhino horns will increase drastically and resulted as the high price of the horn. This condition will promote the poacher to kill more rhino.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 131, Rule ID: SENTENCE_FRAGMENT[1]
Message: “While” at the beginning of a sentence requires a 2nd clause. Maybe a comma, question or exclamation mark is missing, or the sentence is incomplete and should be joined with the following sentence.
...ke to save the Rhino from the Poachers. While the author proposes the three theory to...
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Line 3, column 175, Rule ID: DOES_X_HAS[1]
Message: Did you mean 'hurt'? As 'do' is already inflected, the verb cannot also be inflected.
Suggestion: hurt
...mentions that, this process is does not hurts the animal. In contrast to that, lectur...
^^^^^
Line 3, column 175, Rule ID: DID_BASEFORM[3]
Message: The verb 'does' requires base form of the verb: 'hurt'
Suggestion: hurt
...mentions that, this process is does not hurts the animal. In contrast to that, lectur...
^^^^^
Line 5, column 322, Rule ID: BEEN_PART_AGREEMENT[1]
Message: Consider using a past participle here: 'become'.
Suggestion: become
...s of the rhino horn, at that time it is became too hard to convince them to not use th...
^^^^^^
Line 5, column 408, Rule ID: MOST_COMPARATIVE[2]
Message: Use only 'stronger' (without 'more') when you use the comparative.
Suggestion: stronger
...is horn. Because, persons old belief is more stronger than the, educators thinking. In the...
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Line 5, column 427, Rule ID: THE_PUNCT[1]
Message: Did you forget something after 'the'?
...ersons old belief is more stronger than the, educators thinking. In the last, the...
^^^^
Line 7, column 92, Rule ID: COMMA_PARENTHESIS_WHITESPACE
Message: Put a space after the comma, but not before the comma
Suggestion: ,
...will legalize the sell of the rhino horn , then It were effective to save the rhin...
^^
Line 7, column 171, Rule ID: DOES_X_HAS[1]
Message: Did you mean 'support'? As 'do' is already inflected, the verb cannot also be inflected.
Suggestion: support
...hino. On the other hand, tutor does not supports this claim and said that, If government...
^^^^^^^^
Line 7, column 171, Rule ID: DID_BASEFORM[3]
Message: The verb 'does' requires base form of the verb: 'support'
Suggestion: support
...hino. On the other hand, tutor does not supports this claim and said that, If government...
^^^^^^^^
Line 7, column 247, Rule ID: DID_BASEFORM[1]
Message: The verb 'will' requires the base form of the verb: 'become'
Suggestion: become
...f government will do this then, it will became more hard to save the rhino population....
^^^^^^
Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, first, furthermore, however, if, lastly, moreover, so, then, while, in contrast, as a result, first of all, in contrast to, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 11.0 10.4613686534 105% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 10.0 5.04856512141 198% => OK
Conjunction : 6.0 7.30242825607 82% => OK
Relative clauses : 17.0 12.0772626932 141% => OK
Pronoun: 33.0 22.412803532 147% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 38.0 30.3222958057 125% => OK
Nominalization: 6.0 5.01324503311 120% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1526.0 1373.03311258 111% => OK
No of words: 332.0 270.72406181 123% => OK
Chars per words: 4.59638554217 5.08290768461 90% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.2685907696 4.04702891845 105% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.22632929454 2.5805825403 86% => OK
Unique words: 166.0 145.348785872 114% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.5 0.540411800872 93% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 467.1 419.366225166 111% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.55342163355 90% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 7.0 3.25607064018 215% => Less pronouns wanted as sentence beginning.
Article: 4.0 8.23620309051 49% => OK
Subordination: 6.0 1.25165562914 479% => Less adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 0.0 1.51434878587 0% => OK
Preposition: 7.0 2.5761589404 272% => Less preposition wanted as sentence beginnings.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 16.0 13.0662251656 122% => OK
Sentence length: 20.0 21.2450331126 94% => OK
Sentence length SD: 34.5904046485 49.2860985944 70% => OK
Chars per sentence: 95.375 110.228320801 87% => OK
Words per sentence: 20.75 21.698381199 96% => OK
Discourse Markers: 9.1875 7.06452816374 130% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.09492273731 98% => OK
Language errors: 10.0 4.19205298013 239% => Less language errors wanted.
Sentences with positive sentiment : 11.0 4.33554083885 254% => Less positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 5.0 4.45695364238 112% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 0.0 4.27373068433 0% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.0 0.272083759551 0% => The similarity between the topic and the content is low.
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0 0.0996497079465 0% => Sentence topic similarity is low.
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0 0.0662205650399 0% => Sentences are similar to each other.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0 0.162205337803 0% => Maybe some paragraphs are off the topic.
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0 0.0443174109184 0% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 10.6 13.3589403974 79% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 68.1 53.8541721854 126% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 5.55761589404 56% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 8.7 11.0289183223 79% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 9.4 12.2367328918 77% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.86 8.42419426049 93% => OK
difficult_words: 68.0 63.6247240618 107% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 7.5 10.7273730684 70% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.0 10.498013245 95% => OK
text_standard: 8.0 11.2008830022 71% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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It is not exactly right on the topic in the view of e-grader. Maybe there is a wrong essay topic.
Rates: 3.33333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 1.0 Out of 30
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