zoos are essential in society
The article states that zoos are essential TO SOCIETY and provides three reasons of support. However, the professor explains that there are problems with THE AUTHOR'S arguments. The professor doesn’t believe zoos benefit animals or society and refutes each of the author's reasons.
First, the reading states that animals are treated well IN ZOOS. The professor refutes this point BY STATING that animal treatment is not AS pretty AS THE AUTHOR BELIEVES. THE PROFESSOR PROVIDES AN EXAMPLE OF two red pandas THAT died TO ILLUSTRATE THIS. SADLY, they were exposed to rat poison. Safety managers could have prevented this BUT THEY DIDN'T AND SO, this PLAINLY SHOWS THE lack of care IN ZOOS.
Second, the article claims that zoos are educational FOR VISITORS. However, the professor says that they are, IN FACT, USED for entertainment. ZOOS CHOOSE animals to attract visitors, NOT TO EDUCATE THEM. THESE visitors learn a message IN ZOOS: IT'S OKAY TO use animals. HE CONCEDES THAT some zoos DO inform, but UNFORTUNATELY, EVEN THESE ZOOS have artificial, misleading exhibits.
Third, the reading claims that zoos protect endangered species. The professor says that this idea IS PROBLEMATIC. HE AGREES THAT zoos succeeded with THE ENDANGERED Taamar. However, ZOOS USUALLY have a poor success rate. They have a small number of animals, WHICH FORCES animals interbreed with THEIR family. As a result, they have SEVERE birth defects. ALSO, HE STATES THAT zoos PRESENT no advantage TO SAVING ENDANGERED SPECIES WHEN COMPARED TO SAVING THEM IN THEIR natural habitats.
Grammar and spelling errors:
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Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...refutes each of the authors reasons. First, the reading states that animals a...
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...INLY SHOWS THE lack of care IN ZOOS. Second, the article claims that zoos are...
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Message: Did you mean 'it's' (='it is') instead of 'its' (possessive pronoun)?
Suggestion: It's; It is
...THESE visitors learn a message IN ZOOS: ITS OKAY TO use animals. HE CONCEDES THAT s...
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...ave artificial, misleading exhibits. Third, the reading claims that zoos prot...
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Message: Specify a number, remove phrase, use 'a few', or use 'some'
Suggestion: a few; some
...LLY have a poor success rate. They have a small number of animals, WHICH FORCES animals interbree...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, however, if, second, so, third, well, in fact, as a result
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 8.0 10.4613686534 76% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 1.0 5.04856512141 20% => OK
Conjunction : 6.0 7.30242825607 82% => OK
Relative clauses : 14.0 12.0772626932 116% => OK
Pronoun: 32.0 22.412803532 143% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 22.0 30.3222958057 73% => OK
Nominalization: 2.0 5.01324503311 40% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1329.0 1373.03311258 97% => OK
No of words: 250.0 270.72406181 92% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.316 5.08290768461 105% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.97635364384 4.04702891845 98% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.53527118865 2.5805825403 98% => OK
Unique words: 146.0 145.348785872 100% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.584 0.540411800872 108% => OK
syllable_count: 402.3 419.366225166 96% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.55342163355 103% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 8.0 3.25607064018 246% => Less pronouns wanted as sentence beginning.
Article: 10.0 8.23620309051 121% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 1.25165562914 80% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.51434878587 66% => OK
Preposition: 1.0 2.5761589404 39% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 20.0 13.0662251656 153% => OK
Sentence length: 12.0 21.2450331126 56% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 25.177122552 49.2860985944 51% => The essay contains lots of sentences with the similar length. More sentence varieties wanted.
Chars per sentence: 66.45 110.228320801 60% => OK
Words per sentence: 12.5 21.698381199 58% => More words per sentence wanted.
Discourse Markers: 3.8 7.06452816374 54% => More transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.09492273731 98% => OK
Language errors: 5.0 4.19205298013 119% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 12.0 4.33554083885 277% => Less positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 7.0 4.45695364238 157% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 4.27373068433 23% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.263365899985 0.272083759551 97% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0768225904972 0.0996497079465 77% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.110337785621 0.0662205650399 167% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.166921487743 0.162205337803 103% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.130618928442 0.0443174109184 295% => More connections among paragraphs wanted.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 9.9 13.3589403974 74% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 59.3 53.8541721854 110% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 5.55761589404 56% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 8.0 11.0289183223 73% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.69 12.2367328918 104% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.28 8.42419426049 110% => OK
difficult_words: 80.0 63.6247240618 126% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 5.0 10.7273730684 47% => Linsear_write_formula is low.
gunning_fog: 6.8 10.498013245 65% => OK
text_standard: 10.0 11.2008830022 89% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 65.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 19.5 Out of 30
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.