Discuss a significant issue in your home country about which you are passionate and describe how you would use the education you obtain at our institution, American University (AU), Washington, DC, to create positive civic and social change once you return home. (250 words or less)
Before any materialistic values, we must think about moral wealth. After all, this is a heritage we will pass to the forthcoming generation. Therefore, when it comes to my motherland I cannot stop thinking about a mindset issue of people here.
I live in Kyrgyzstan, a charming little Central Asian country with colossal glaciers, 7000m mountains and the pearl of Central Asia lake Issyk Kul. But because its soviet past majority of the older generation consists of people with communistic views who raise a new generation under the shadow of a soviet mindset. This way of thinking once succeed in the destruction of one country, and now I don’t want this to repeat to mine. So I decided to start changes from myself.
"We have the power to make this the best generation of mankind in the history of the world or make it the last."- said John F. Kennedy and I believe that education obtained from American University will become my power to make changes in the heads of the new generation. Because there I won’t gain only scholastic intelligence, but also as a part of the completely new community will nurture in me new moral beliefs and understanding of this life. Upon arrival home, I will try to spread my knowledge to the citizens. However, it is not expected to be easy with the common effort of local citizens, I believe, by introducing fresh views of the new generation we will make our country flourish.
Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, however, if, so, therefore, after all
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 3.0 13.1623246493 23% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 7.0 7.85571142285 89% => OK
Conjunction : 7.0 10.4138276553 67% => OK
Relative clauses : 3.0 7.30460921844 41% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 29.0 24.0651302605 121% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 42.0 41.998997996 100% => OK
Nominalization: 9.0 8.3376753507 108% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1193.0 1615.20841683 74% => OK
No of words: 247.0 315.596192385 78% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.82995951417 5.12529762239 94% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.96437052324 4.20363070211 94% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.81009576366 2.80592935109 100% => OK
Unique words: 150.0 176.041082164 85% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.607287449393 0.561755894193 108% => OK
syllable_count: 382.5 506.74238477 75% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.60771543086 93% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 8.0 5.43587174349 147% => OK
Article: 1.0 2.52805611222 40% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 2.10420841683 190% => OK
Conjunction: 3.0 0.809619238477 371% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 4.0 4.76152304609 84% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 12.0 16.0721442886 75% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 20.0 20.2975951904 99% => OK
Sentence length SD: 45.2495395925 49.4020404114 92% => OK
Chars per sentence: 99.4166666667 106.682146367 93% => OK
Words per sentence: 20.5833333333 20.7667163134 99% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.0 7.06120827912 57% => More transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 3.0 4.38176352705 68% => More paragraphs wanted.
Language errors: 0.0 5.01903807615 0% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 6.0 8.67935871743 69% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 3.9879759519 25% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 5.0 3.4128256513 147% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.0630848493323 0.244688304435 26% => The similarity between the topic and the content is low.
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0249238338004 0.084324248473 30% => Sentence topic similarity is low.
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0279345740212 0.0667982634062 42% => Sentences are similar to each other.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0401477629922 0.151304729494 27% => Maybe some paragraphs are off the topic.
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0111554382107 0.056905535591 20% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.6 13.0946893788 89% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 59.64 50.2224549098 119% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.9 11.3001002004 88% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.73 12.4159519038 86% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.78 8.58950901804 102% => OK
difficult_words: 65.0 78.4519038076 83% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 8.5 9.78957915832 87% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.0 10.1190380762 99% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.7795591182 83% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Minimum 250 words wanted.
Minimum four paragraphs wanted.
It is not exactly right on the topic in the view of e-grader. Maybe there is a wrong essay topic.
Rates: 11.2359550562 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 0.67 Out of 6
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.