An essay to show myself
Every scene around us, whether big or small, wide or narrow, has its meanings for each person. As a nature lover, the sense of wallowing in the earth’s space, the impressive beauty that nature given upon humans fascinated me. The two pictures that I sent to the admissions committee are very special to me. For me, I had a wonderful summer vacation with my family, and even more fortunate to have caught the opportunity to witness such a beautiful sunrise scene. The two photos contain my dreams, ambitions, and aspirations about what I want to contribute to Vinuni and the community. The wave originating from the river flowing into the sea is the beginning of a journey of searching and creating myself. It wants to discover new things and conquer dreams, ambitions. That wave carries the courage, desire and determination to overcome all adversities to achieve the set goals. The vast sea is the entire world of knowledge, a gathering place for talented people, a place to create conditions and opportunities for their talents to shine. And Vinuni is the vast sea that I talk about. Only when the waves reach out to the great sea, they can swing and show their full potential. When the wave reaches the enormous sea, it means it will have to strive more to survive in the middle of the sea. I consider myself a wave from the river trying to reach out to the enormous sea, towards a new sky with so many challenges awaiting. Is it that talents from the time of birth have or have to go through difficulties and hardships to become talents? I believe that not everyone is born intelligent, has outstanding, most people have to go through the days of self-training to awaken infinite talent in themselves. The image of the sun rising, dispelling the darkness to start a new day, is an image of faith and vitality in a brighter future. That belief is the prerequisite factor motivating me to reach out further, struggle in the sea of knowledge that I believe I will be where I belong. With the desire to dedicate myself to change my life, my family, and my society, I believe that I am the factor that Vinuni is looking for to train for the country. Although born not at the finish line, it is never too late to start from an imperfect starting point to a winner. And if we have perseverance, effort, passion and faith, we will succeed.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 1933, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...each out further, struggle in the sea of knowledge that I believe I will be where...
^^^
Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, if, look, so
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 11.0 13.1623246493 84% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 4.0 7.85571142285 51% => OK
Conjunction : 17.0 10.4138276553 163% => OK
Relative clauses : 13.0 7.30460921844 178% => OK
Pronoun: 46.0 24.0651302605 191% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 60.0 41.998997996 143% => OK
Nominalization: 3.0 8.3376753507 36% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1927.0 1615.20841683 119% => OK
No of words: 417.0 315.596192385 132% => OK
Chars per words: 4.62110311751 5.12529762239 90% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.5189133491 4.20363070211 108% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.7018664357 2.80592935109 96% => OK
Unique words: 223.0 176.041082164 127% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.534772182254 0.561755894193 95% => OK
syllable_count: 612.0 506.74238477 121% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.60771543086 93% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 12.0 5.43587174349 221% => Less pronouns wanted as sentence beginning.
Article: 9.0 2.52805611222 356% => Less articles wanted as sentence beginning.
Subordination: 3.0 2.10420841683 143% => OK
Conjunction: 5.0 0.809619238477 618% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 1.0 4.76152304609 21% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 20.0 16.0721442886 124% => OK
Sentence length: 20.0 20.2975951904 99% => OK
Sentence length SD: 33.453848807 49.4020404114 68% => OK
Chars per sentence: 96.35 106.682146367 90% => OK
Words per sentence: 20.85 20.7667163134 100% => OK
Discourse Markers: 0.85 7.06120827912 12% => More transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 1.0 4.38176352705 23% => More paragraphs wanted.
Language errors: 1.0 5.01903807615 20% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 18.0 8.67935871743 207% => Less positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 0.0 3.9879759519 0% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 3.4128256513 59% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.0792598611751 0.244688304435 32% => The similarity between the topic and the content is low.
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0202317611764 0.084324248473 24% => Sentence topic similarity is low.
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0312669538797 0.0667982634062 47% => Sentences are similar to each other.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0792598611751 0.151304729494 52% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0 0.056905535591 0% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 10.8 13.0946893788 82% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 59.64 50.2224549098 119% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.44779559118 42% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.9 11.3001002004 88% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 9.52 12.4159519038 77% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.15 8.58950901804 95% => OK
difficult_words: 93.0 78.4519038076 119% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 9.78957915832 112% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.0 10.1190380762 99% => OK
text_standard: 10.0 10.7795591182 93% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Minimum four paragraphs wanted.
Rates: 56.1797752809 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.33 Out of 6
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