One of the most conspicuous trend in today’s business world is the colossal upsurge in the use of computer technology. There is wide spread worry that this will only lead to a myriad of concerns in the society. In my opinion computer technology has more negative impacts than positives in the society.
On the one hand, critics may point out that one of the most significant benefits of computer technology is the availability of extra time. For example, mother, unlike In the past now have more time to spend with their families, as less time spent doing the house chores, thanks to efficient household machineries.
On the other hand, there are a number of arguments in favour of my stance. One of the most preponderant one is that , computer dependency has negative consequences for the community in various ways. Firstly, people are losing jobs because machines are increasingly taking over the roles of humans, such as in the car – manufacturing sector. According to “Times Magazine December 2017 edition”, the proportion of Americans employed in manufacturing has dropped from 30 per cents to 10 per cents today. Secondly, a large portion of the human population has lost enthusiasm because of technological dependency and is increasingly becoming lazier and less efficient.
Lastly, in my opinion, the government of Australia is taking a great initiative in educating its citizens are being encouraged to spend a significant portion of their time in physical activity like games and exercises, In order to compensate for their computer reliance and addition.
In view of the arguments outlined above, one can conclude that despite having some benefits, the drawbacks of computer technology in the society are indeed too dire to ignore.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
first, firstly, if, lastly, may, second, secondly, so, thus, for example, such as, in my opinion, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 12.0 13.1623246493 91% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 3.0 7.85571142285 38% => OK
Conjunction : 4.0 10.4138276553 38% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 4.0 7.30460921844 55% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 12.0 24.0651302605 50% => OK
Preposition: 51.0 41.998997996 121% => OK
Nominalization: 8.0 8.3376753507 96% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1491.0 1615.20841683 92% => OK
No of words: 284.0 315.596192385 90% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.25 5.12529762239 102% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.10515524023 4.20363070211 98% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.00325872053 2.80592935109 107% => OK
Unique words: 164.0 176.041082164 93% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.577464788732 0.561755894193 103% => OK
syllable_count: 484.2 506.74238477 96% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.60771543086 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 0.0 5.43587174349 0% => OK
Article: 4.0 2.52805611222 158% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 2.10420841683 48% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.809619238477 0% => OK
Preposition: 7.0 4.76152304609 147% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 12.0 16.0721442886 75% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 23.0 20.2975951904 113% => OK
Sentence length SD: 53.3499973966 49.4020404114 108% => OK
Chars per sentence: 124.25 106.682146367 116% => OK
Words per sentence: 23.6666666667 20.7667163134 114% => OK
Discourse Markers: 9.58333333333 7.06120827912 136% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.38176352705 114% => OK
Language errors: 5.0 5.01903807615 100% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 4.0 8.67935871743 46% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 6.0 3.9879759519 150% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 3.4128256513 59% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.0233995079285 0.244688304435 10% => The similarity between the topic and the content is low.
Sentence topic coherence: 0.00720064955671 0.084324248473 9% => Sentence topic similarity is low.
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0129444634232 0.0667982634062 19% => Sentences are similar to each other.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0129341293588 0.151304729494 9% => Maybe some paragraphs are off the topic.
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0139072051667 0.056905535591 24% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 15.1 13.0946893788 115% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 39.67 50.2224549098 79% => OK
smog_index: 11.2 7.44779559118 150% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 13.4 11.3001002004 119% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.47 12.4159519038 108% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.23 8.58950901804 107% => OK
difficult_words: 80.0 78.4519038076 102% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 9.78957915832 112% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.2 10.1190380762 111% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 10.7795591182 102% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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It is not exactly right on the topic in the view of e-grader. Maybe there is a wrong essay topic.
Rates: 11.2359550562 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 0.67 Out of 6
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