It is irrefutable to say that, professional sports stars and film stars, nowadays, have become famous public figures to millions of people around the world, especially the young people. Considering this, there are some analysts who hold an opinion that these stars should become a role model for young people, while others consider that they should not be. I am inclined to believe that, following a good role model will be beneficial for adolescents. This essay will assert both sides of the statement and deliver reasonable conclusion.
To begin, there are many benefits of making celebrities as a role model. Firstly, there are many sports personalities who are actively participating in social activities like helping poor children to study and creating awareness on protecting national heritage. These things definitely stand as motivation to the young generation. Secondly, some famous entertainment stars deliver very meaningful movies which involve lots of creativity, this helps children to think like them. For instance, Aamir Khan, an Indian actor, acted various roles in movies which can motivate children to become like him.
On the contrary, seeing stars as role models also have a number of downsides. First of all, youngsters start getting inspired from their negative roles and imitating the same act at home or in streets can have a severe impact on the society. Moreover, celebrities are often found in smoking advertisements, charged with drugs and other criminal activities, youth following their path can result in the destruction of ethical values of a society. For instance, Sanjay Dutt, Bollywood Actor is well known for his roles as a villain, his terrorist acts in different movies have given rise to violence and crime in streets of Mumbai. All these were committed by adolescents for thrill and adventure.
On the other hand, seeing sports stars as role models also has a number of downsides. First of all, regardless of the role of performing in matches and games, athletes have no moral sparks or admirable lifestyles for children to follow. For instance, some popular sports stars may have money, fame and appear prominently on covers of numerous magazines but this doesn’t mean that the youth should worship them as a hero outside the stadiums, so if you are particularly keen on their moral guide and a perfect way of studying, you are amazingly mistaken. Secondly, relationship between athletes and kids are just similar as celebrities with fans, their appearance in public and in front reporters is usually just an outer shell in order to blur away many scandals and bad sides. However, these cannot be compared to its good sides.
In summary, the entertainment industry caters different types of celebrities that could set out negative or positive effects to young people. I believe, if adolescent follows well- mannered celebrity it would helpful for him to become more successful in his life.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, firstly, however, if, may, moreover, second, secondly, so, well, while, for instance, in summary, first of all, on the contrary, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 15.0 10.5418719212 142% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 12.0 6.10837438424 196% => OK
Conjunction : 17.0 8.36945812808 203% => Less conjunction wanted
Relative clauses : 10.0 5.94088669951 168% => OK
Pronoun: 33.0 20.9802955665 157% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 62.0 31.9359605911 194% => OK
Nominalization: 11.0 5.75862068966 191% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2479.0 1207.87684729 205% => Less number of characters wanted.
No of words: 474.0 242.827586207 195% => Less content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.22995780591 5.00649968141 104% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.66599839874 3.92707691288 119% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.7605910475 2.71678728327 102% => OK
Unique words: 272.0 139.433497537 195% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.573839662447 0.580463131201 99% => OK
syllable_count: 778.5 379.143842365 205% => syllable counts are too long.
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.57093596059 102% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 10.0 4.6157635468 217% => Less pronouns wanted as sentence beginning.
Article: 2.0 1.56157635468 128% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 1.71428571429 117% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.931034482759 0% => OK
Preposition: 5.0 3.65517241379 137% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 21.0 12.6551724138 166% => OK
Sentence length: 22.0 20.5024630542 107% => OK
Sentence length SD: 64.3461444366 50.4703680194 127% => OK
Chars per sentence: 118.047619048 104.977214359 112% => OK
Words per sentence: 22.5714285714 20.9669160288 108% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.80952380952 7.25397266985 108% => OK
Paragraphs: 6.0 4.12807881773 145% => Less paragraphs wanted.
Language errors: 3.0 5.33497536946 56% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 14.0 6.9802955665 201% => Less positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 2.75862068966 145% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 2.91625615764 103% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.230496775078 0.242375264174 95% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.070592029283 0.0925447433944 76% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0681026977048 0.071462118173 95% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.110983868073 0.151781067708 73% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0505310067461 0.0609392437508 83% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.5 12.6369458128 115% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 49.15 53.1260098522 93% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.54236453202 135% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.9 10.9458128079 109% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.35 11.5310837438 116% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.12 8.32886699507 109% => OK
difficult_words: 132.0 55.0591133005 240% => Less difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 11.5 9.94827586207 116% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.8 10.3980295567 104% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 10.5123152709 114% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Maximum five paragraphs wanted.
Rates: 77.7777777778 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 70.0 Out of 90
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