It is irrefutable to say that, popularity of extreme sports has continued to grow over the last decade. People would like to do some dangerous sports like scuba diving, bungee jumping, bull fighting, etc in many countries. I am inclined to believe that these sports are in fact dangerous and they should not be promoted. This essay will discuss some advantages and disadvantages of adventure sports before giving appropriate conclusion.
On one hand, people who are in favor of adventurous sports claim, the risk-taking sports help in the development of self- confidence and independence of a person. For instance, by successfully facing up the challenges of adventurous sports like rock- climbing, young people overcome with their fears. Specifically, going through a dangerous experience gives them the courage to face the hurdles of their daily life (explaining example). Furthermore, there is a lot of fame and money involved in these sports. Performers get attention by doing stunts on motorcycles and jumping from tall buildings. In addition, playing such sports may consider as the symbol of manpower and something of gaining prestige.
On the other hand, opponents of extreme sports say that, being a extreme sportsmen is vIt is irrefutable to say that, popularity of extreme sports has continued to grow over the last decade. People would like to do some dangerous sports like scuba diving, bungee jumping, bull fighting, etc in many countries. I am inclined to believe that these sports are in fact dangerous and they should not be promoted. This essay will discuss some advantages and disadvantages of adventure sports before giving appropriate conclusion.
On one hand, people who are in favor of adventurous sports claim, the risk-taking sports help in the development of self- confidence and independence of a person. For instance, by successfully facing up the challenges of adventurous sports like rock- climbing, young people overcome with their fears. Specifically, going through a dangerous experience gives them the courage to face the hurdles of their daily life (explaining example). Furthermore, there is a lot of fame and money involved in these sports. Performers get attention by doing stunts on motorcycles and jumping from tall buildings. In addition, playing such sports may consider as the symbol of manpower and something of gaining prestige.
On the other hand, opponents of extreme sports say that, being a extreme sportsmen is very risky and dangerous. If a rope breaks while bungee jumping, for example, a participant will be seriously injured or even die. Also, equipment needed for these sports are very expensive, many people cannot purchase them which eventually increases the chance of the tragedy. Above all, youngsters who gravitate towards these types of sports could not concentrate on their studies, due to which, they were not able to complete their studies and hence not able to get lucrative jobs.
To recapitulate, the foregoing discussion propounds the view that, we can say that adventure sports have many impressive benefits including problem-solving, self-confidence and teamwork. However, it is recommended that these sports should be tried under proper guidance and supervision. The government should provide adequate knowledge about these sports to athletes so that they can protect themselves from its dangers.
ery risky and dangerous. If a rope breaks while bungee jumping, for example, a participant will be seriously injured or even die. Also, equipment needed for these sports are very expensive, many people cannot purchase them which eventually increases the chance of the tragedy. Above all, youngsters who gravitate towards these types of sports could not concentrate on their studies, due to which, they were not able to complete their studies and hence not able to get lucrative jobs.
To recapitulate, the foregoing discussion propounds the view that, we can say that adventure sports have many impressive benefits including problem-solving, self-confidence and teamwork. However, it is recommended that these sports should be tried under proper guidance and supervision. The government should provide adequate knowledge about these sports to athletes so that they can protect themselves from its dangers.
Grammar and spelling errors:
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Suggestion: an
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Suggestion: sportsman
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Suggestion: sportsman
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, furthermore, hence, however, if, may, so, while, for example, for instance, in addition, in fact, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 24.0 13.1623246493 182% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 22.0 7.85571142285 280% => Less auxiliary verb wanted.
Conjunction : 22.0 10.4138276553 211% => Less conjunction wanted
Relative clauses : 22.0 7.30460921844 301% => Less relative clauses wanted (maybe 'which' is over used).
Pronoun: 57.0 24.0651302605 237% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 96.0 41.998997996 229% => Less preposition wanted.
Nominalization: 22.0 8.3376753507 264% => Less nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 3624.0 1615.20841683 224% => Less number of characters wanted.
No of words: 666.0 315.596192385 211% => Less content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.44144144144 5.12529762239 106% => OK
Fourth root words length: 5.08005667302 4.20363070211 121% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.9505830228 2.80592935109 105% => OK
Unique words: 209.0 176.041082164 119% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.313813813814 0.561755894193 56% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 1099.8 506.74238477 217% => syllable counts are too long.
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.60771543086 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 11.0 5.43587174349 202% => Less pronouns wanted as sentence beginning.
Article: 8.0 2.52805611222 316% => Less articles wanted as sentence beginning.
Subordination: 2.0 2.10420841683 95% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.809619238477 0% => OK
Preposition: 12.0 4.76152304609 252% => Less preposition wanted as sentence beginnings.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 34.0 16.0721442886 212% => Too many sentences.
Sentence length: 19.0 20.2975951904 94% => OK
Sentence length SD: 39.5616552671 49.4020404114 80% => OK
Chars per sentence: 106.588235294 106.682146367 100% => OK
Words per sentence: 19.5882352941 20.7667163134 94% => OK
Discourse Markers: 3.55882352941 7.06120827912 50% => More transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 8.0 4.38176352705 183% => Less paragraphs wanted.
Language errors: 5.0 5.01903807615 100% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 20.0 8.67935871743 230% => Less positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 10.0 3.9879759519 251% => Less negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 3.4128256513 117% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.0750465162567 0.244688304435 31% => The similarity between the topic and the content is low.
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0277120666403 0.084324248473 33% => Sentence topic similarity is low.
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0410812018516 0.0667982634062 62% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0480749846612 0.151304729494 32% => Maybe some paragraphs are off the topic.
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0433673222506 0.056905535591 76% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.0 13.0946893788 107% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 43.73 50.2224549098 87% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.9 11.3001002004 105% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 14.27 12.4159519038 115% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 6.83 8.58950901804 80% => OK
difficult_words: 95.0 78.4519038076 121% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.5 9.78957915832 87% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.6 10.1190380762 95% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.7795591182 83% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Maximum five paragraphs wanted.
It is not exactly right on the topic in the view of e-grader. Maybe there is a wrong essay topic.
Rates: 11.2359550562 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 0.67 Out of 6
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