Dangerous activities like extreme skiing,bungee jumping etc...and whether you support them or not.What is your opinion?
The popularity of extreme sports is increasing day to day. Although some people hate adventure sports because they are dangerous and expensive, in my opinion, risky sports will bring fame, health benefits and self-confidence.
Quite a few merits can be derived from adventure sports.An oft-quoted advantage is risky sports can bring fame.For instance, Mountain dew a leading beverage company hire extreme sports athletes as their company brand ambassadors to promote products.with this sportspersons will become internationally famous..Another merit with extreme sports is health of athlete can be developed. A survey conducted by London university on a group of people revealed that players of extreme sports are healthier than normal people. A further advantage is risky sports will raise self-confidence.This can be clearly established by the fact that athletes who perform skiing have to calculate the forthcoming risks by changing the path and speed of the travel.These instant decisions will raise confidence in players.
However. quite common criticism about extreme sports is they are dangerous to the extent that sometimes they will take a toll on athlete's life.Besides, adventure sport equipments are so expensive that a common man cannot afford.Nevertheless, these arguments hold little water to say risky sports are not productive. In fact, we came across a recent incident in a chess competition.
a player died of cardiac arrest because of the stress involved in the game.Furthermore, nowadays there are many sports centers giving risky sport equipments in installment basis and in discounts to encourage the players.Hence these criticisms are not enough to prove risky sports are not productive.
In conclusion, not with standing with minor negative aspects,I strongly assert that extreme sports has been significantly beneficial to the humanity and the drawbacks can be minimized with proper care and attention.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
besides, furthermore, hence, however, if, nevertheless, so, for instance, in conclusion, in fact, in my opinion
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 18.0 10.5418719212 171% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 11.0 6.10837438424 180% => OK
Conjunction : 6.0 8.36945812808 72% => OK
Relative clauses : 6.0 5.94088669951 101% => OK
Pronoun: 17.0 20.9802955665 81% => OK
Preposition: 36.0 31.9359605911 113% => OK
Nominalization: 7.0 5.75862068966 122% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1647.0 1207.87684729 136% => OK
No of words: 291.0 242.827586207 120% => OK
Chars per words: 5.65979381443 5.00649968141 113% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.13022058845 3.92707691288 105% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.29589991826 2.71678728327 121% => OK
Unique words: 170.0 139.433497537 122% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.584192439863 0.580463131201 101% => OK
syllable_count: 508.5 379.143842365 134% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.57093596059 108% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 5.0 4.6157635468 108% => OK
Article: 5.0 1.56157635468 320% => Less articles wanted as sentence beginning.
Subordination: 1.0 1.71428571429 58% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.931034482759 0% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 3.65517241379 109% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 9.0 12.6551724138 71% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 32.0 20.5024630542 156% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 107.105808997 50.4703680194 212% => The lengths of sentences changed so frequently.
Chars per sentence: 183.0 104.977214359 174% => OK
Words per sentence: 32.3333333333 20.9669160288 154% => OK
Discourse Markers: 12.3333333333 7.25397266985 170% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.12807881773 121% => OK
Language errors: 17.0 5.33497536946 319% => Less language errors wanted.
Sentences with positive sentiment : 4.0 6.9802955665 57% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 2.75862068966 109% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 2.91625615764 69% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.0467229730978 0.242375264174 19% => The similarity between the topic and the content is low.
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0248146423114 0.0925447433944 27% => Sentence topic similarity is low.
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0194092399054 0.071462118173 27% => Sentences are similar to each other.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0307351354221 0.151781067708 20% => Maybe some paragraphs are off the topic.
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0214503166733 0.0609392437508 35% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 21.4 12.6369458128 169% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 30.54 53.1260098522 57% => Flesch_reading_ease is low.
smog_index: 11.2 6.54236453202 171% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 17.0 10.9458128079 155% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 16.14 11.5310837438 140% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.84 8.32886699507 118% => OK
difficult_words: 85.0 55.0591133005 154% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 14.5 9.94827586207 146% => OK
gunning_fog: 14.8 10.3980295567 142% => OK
text_standard: 15.0 10.5123152709 143% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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It is not exactly right on the topic in the view of e-grader. Maybe there is a wrong essay topic.
Rates: 11.1111111111 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 10.0 Out of 90
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