Do you think extreme sports like skiing, water rafting etc. are dangerous and should be prohibited?

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Do you think extreme sports like skiing, water rafting etc. are dangerous and should be prohibited?

Recently, extreme sports have sparked an ongoing controversy, which inevitably leads to a moot question "are dangerous sports should be prohibited?" Whereas it is a widely held view that adventure sports can be beneficial for the society by the supervision of government, I will discuss controversial aspects of that throughout this essay.
From the psychological standpoint, extreme sports are bound up inextricably with the secretion of adrenaline, which indicates they lead to both happiness and exciting. As a well-known example, a longitudinal study conducted by eminent scientists in 2014 demonstrates the relationship between skiing and water rafting as well as the less probability of depression. Their academic criticism was impressive. Consequently, my empirical evidence presented thus far supports the contention that the likelihood of taking risks is correlated positively with not only adventure sports but also better physical applications.
Within the realm of obesity, without the slightest doubt, extreme sports attribute to fitness, in that it would come down to the better physical appearance, protecting against diabetes, and less health care costs. A salient example of such attribution is governmental roles, which is a cause for concern since it was mistaken to take health care policies for granted. Had there been a paradigm shift earlier, scholars might have had the opportunity to pinpoint political problems. Besides, this criterion is an indispensable part of modern lifestyle. Hence, it is reasonable to infer the pivotal role of extreme sports.
To conclude, as for myself, as the saying goes "all's well that ends well," after analyzing what elaborated above, I firmly believe that extreme sports can play a key role in helping to the mental and physical needs of the society and government must remain liable to enforce some strict rules to protect athletes.

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Grammar and spelling errors:
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, besides, but, consequently, hence, if, so, thus, well, whereas, as for, as well as

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 13.0 10.5418719212 123% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 7.0 6.10837438424 115% => OK
Conjunction : 6.0 8.36945812808 72% => OK
Relative clauses : 9.0 5.94088669951 151% => OK
Pronoun: 18.0 20.9802955665 86% => OK
Preposition: 39.0 31.9359605911 122% => OK
Nominalization: 8.0 5.75862068966 139% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1624.0 1207.87684729 134% => OK
No of words: 291.0 242.827586207 120% => OK
Chars per words: 5.58075601375 5.00649968141 111% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.13022058845 3.92707691288 105% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.13482686922 2.71678728327 115% => OK
Unique words: 192.0 139.433497537 138% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.659793814433 0.580463131201 114% => OK
syllable_count: 501.3 379.143842365 132% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.57093596059 108% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 6.0 4.6157635468 130% => OK
Article: 2.0 1.56157635468 128% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 1.71428571429 233% => Less adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 1.0 0.931034482759 107% => OK
Preposition: 6.0 3.65517241379 164% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 11.0 12.6551724138 87% => OK
Sentence length: 26.0 20.5024630542 127% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 95.6036930024 50.4703680194 189% => OK
Chars per sentence: 147.636363636 104.977214359 141% => OK
Words per sentence: 26.4545454545 20.9669160288 126% => OK
Discourse Markers: 8.0 7.25397266985 110% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.12807881773 97% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.33497536946 19% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 8.0 6.9802955665 115% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 2.75862068966 36% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 2.91625615764 69% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.16881768716 0.242375264174 70% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0479754085918 0.0925447433944 52% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0577181717252 0.071462118173 81% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0975243584503 0.151781067708 64% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0674723028776 0.0609392437508 111% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 18.1 12.6369458128 143% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 36.63 53.1260098522 69% => OK
smog_index: 11.2 6.54236453202 171% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 14.6 10.9458128079 133% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 15.38 11.5310837438 133% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 10.24 8.32886699507 123% => OK
difficult_words: 98.0 55.0591133005 178% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 21.0 9.94827586207 211% => Linsear_write_formula is high.
gunning_fog: 12.4 10.3980295567 119% => OK
text_standard: 15.0 10.5123152709 143% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 88.8888888889 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 80.0 Out of 90
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