High schools are giving more and more time to traditional subjects as compared to subjects like computer skills and information technology. Due to this, high school pass outs do not get jobs. Do you think that schools should give more consideration to computers and other advanced subjects?
Support your point of view with reasons and/or examples from your own experience or observations.
Some people believe that secondary education should continuously provide programs including basic subjects to students. However, others claim this is the cause of the number of teens who do not have work after dropping-out. I personally agree to the former argument due to the necessity of conventional subjects and to explore more their skills. This essay will discuss my justifications for the stated reasons.
To begin with, the youth are required to obtain a high school diploma. By doing so, they must first be able to passed all the subjects within the curriculum that include subjects like Math, Science, History and much more. Studying these essential subjects could aid them profound knowledge and to develop their skills. Consequently, finding a job may not be that difficult in the future. To illustrate, Math wizards since high school become an Engineer which provided them a decent job afterwards.
Apart from this, one must understand that finishing high school while equipped with basic subjects can discover one's hidden potential. Skills can be developed through learning the simple foundations of subjects like arts and P.E. As taking up these subjects may help the students realized their talents and improve them along the way. For example, great basketball players today have been already training and developing their skills since participations in intramurals as part of the high school activities.
To recapitulate, traditional subjects are really a vital part of one's individual development not just focusing on one specific skill. Indeed it is a fulfillment to finish schooling on the right path.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 7, column 135, Rule ID: SENT_START_CONJUNCTIVE_LINKING_ADVERB_COMMA[1]
Message: Did you forget a comma after a conjunctive/linking adverb?
Suggestion: Indeed,
...ot just focusing on one specific skill. Indeed it is a fulfillment to finish schooling...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
consequently, first, however, if, may, really, second, so, while, apart from, for example, to begin with
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 8.0 10.5418719212 76% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 9.0 6.10837438424 147% => OK
Conjunction : 6.0 8.36945812808 72% => OK
Relative clauses : 6.0 5.94088669951 101% => OK
Pronoun: 20.0 20.9802955665 95% => OK
Preposition: 35.0 31.9359605911 110% => OK
Nominalization: 4.0 5.75862068966 69% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1375.0 1207.87684729 114% => OK
No of words: 256.0 242.827586207 105% => OK
Chars per words: 5.37109375 5.00649968141 107% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.0 3.92707691288 102% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.80769717957 2.71678728327 103% => OK
Unique words: 172.0 139.433497537 123% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.671875 0.580463131201 116% => OK
syllable_count: 407.7 379.143842365 108% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.57093596059 102% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 3.0 4.6157635468 65% => OK
Article: 1.0 1.56157635468 64% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 1.71428571429 58% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.931034482759 0% => OK
Preposition: 5.0 3.65517241379 137% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 14.0 12.6551724138 111% => OK
Sentence length: 18.0 20.5024630542 88% => OK
Sentence length SD: 39.7808409429 50.4703680194 79% => OK
Chars per sentence: 98.2142857143 104.977214359 94% => OK
Words per sentence: 18.2857142857 20.9669160288 87% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.42857142857 7.25397266985 102% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.12807881773 97% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.33497536946 19% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 6.0 6.9802955665 86% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 0.0 2.75862068966 0% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 8.0 2.91625615764 274% => Less facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.310276567889 0.242375264174 128% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0916573113159 0.0925447433944 99% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0501404024076 0.071462118173 70% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.171933187399 0.151781067708 113% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.040072522088 0.0609392437508 66% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.0 12.6369458128 103% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 53.21 53.1260098522 100% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.54236453202 135% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.3 10.9458128079 94% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.87 11.5310837438 120% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.09 8.32886699507 109% => OK
difficult_words: 74.0 55.0591133005 134% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.5 9.94827586207 85% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.2 10.3980295567 88% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.5123152709 86% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 77.7777777778 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 70.0 Out of 90
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