‘To meet the demands of a modern society, schools should stop teaching and humanities such as music and history and focus on science and technology. Which are more useful in the modern age’. To what extent do you agree with this view?
In this modern world, People have been taking more benefits using modern technology. Health care, satellite, computer languages are some of the modern technologies that rule the world, while enchanting the human mind and adding new subjects to school syllabus. It is believed that arts and history related subject should remove from the school syllabus and instead of those new subjects should such as technology should add in the school subjects.
First and foremost, school education must provide supply to demand for the modern job market. Day by day, the demand on the new technology from job market is getting increase in a significant level. For example, video games have a big demand in the market, but there are less number of computer game developers in the market. Therefore, it should be taken in to account that, old subjects such as wood work, history and cooking has removed and new technological subject should fill the gap.
On the other hand, new technological related employees take significant salaries, while spending a good quality lifestyle. Because of the quality payments, more and more school levers have joined with new technological jobs. For example, computer language experts have paid good remuneration package including health insurance. Therefore, it is believed that, to spend a better quality life, pupils should learn new modern subjects such as design thinking patterns.
In conclusion, as the educational system had removed the old subjects, remaining old subjects should be removed from school syllabus and should add new subjects such as science and technology. The governments should take in to account the above points and revamp the educational system.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 133, Rule ID: SOME_OF_THE[1]
Message: Simply use 'some'.
Suggestion: some
...care, satellite, computer languages are some of the modern technologies that rule the world...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, first, if, so, therefore, while, for example, in conclusion, such as, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 8.0 10.5418719212 76% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 10.0 6.10837438424 164% => OK
Conjunction : 11.0 8.36945812808 131% => OK
Relative clauses : 4.0 5.94088669951 67% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 9.0 20.9802955665 43% => OK
Preposition: 25.0 31.9359605911 78% => OK
Nominalization: 4.0 5.75862068966 69% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1431.0 1207.87684729 118% => OK
No of words: 269.0 242.827586207 111% => OK
Chars per words: 5.31970260223 5.00649968141 106% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.0498419064 3.92707691288 103% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.66282608323 2.71678728327 98% => OK
Unique words: 140.0 139.433497537 100% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.520446096654 0.580463131201 90% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 432.9 379.143842365 114% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.57093596059 102% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 3.0 4.6157635468 65% => OK
Article: 2.0 1.56157635468 128% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 1.71428571429 233% => Less adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 1.0 0.931034482759 107% => OK
Preposition: 5.0 3.65517241379 137% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 13.0 12.6551724138 103% => OK
Sentence length: 20.0 20.5024630542 98% => OK
Sentence length SD: 36.6224944616 50.4703680194 73% => OK
Chars per sentence: 110.076923077 104.977214359 105% => OK
Words per sentence: 20.6923076923 20.9669160288 99% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.07692307692 7.25397266985 98% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.12807881773 97% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.33497536946 19% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 6.0 6.9802955665 86% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 2.75862068966 72% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 5.0 2.91625615764 171% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.187338279726 0.242375264174 77% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0766058192881 0.0925447433944 83% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0610301087266 0.071462118173 85% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.125204762624 0.151781067708 82% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0547074764368 0.0609392437508 90% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.0 12.6369458128 111% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 51.18 53.1260098522 96% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.54236453202 135% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.1 10.9458128079 101% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.58 11.5310837438 118% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.21 8.32886699507 99% => OK
difficult_words: 61.0 55.0591133005 111% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 9.94827586207 111% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.0 10.3980295567 96% => OK
text_standard: 14.0 10.5123152709 133% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 82.7777777778 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 74.5 Out of 90
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