Some people believe that governments are responsible for the increase in obesity in children, while others think it is the fault of the parents.Discuss the extent to which you agree or disagree with this statement.

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Some people believe that governments are responsible for the increase in obesity in children, while others think it is the fault of the parents.
Discuss the extent to which you agree or disagree with this statement.

Obesity in children has become an alarming issue in today's world. It is considered by many that it is the regulatory bodies which are responsible for the eke in children obesity, however, others attribute responsibility to parents. This essay will discuss how both governments and parents are liable for this and should take imperative measures to tackle this issue.

In order to fight with the obesity in children governments can play a major role by certain rules and regulations. Governments should put a high tax on sugary drinks and junk foods and also should ban the unhealthy foods adverts targeting on children. For instance, governments can also fight obesity by promoting the sports team and sports in their country so that the young people get encourage to participate in outdoor sports. In brief, though these measures the obesity rate in children may reduce.

However, governments alone can not alleviate obesity in children and here parents involvement also becomes indispensable. For majority of children their parents are their role models and so the parents should also try to portray themselves as their children role models in every aspects of life. For example, parents should watch their children's screen time and encourage them to take part in outdoor activities and sports. In addition, parents are also liable to provide their children with healthy foods which does not lead to obesity in their young ones.

This essay discussed how both the governments and parents are equally responsible to eradicate obesity in children through certain regulations and measures. In my view, the obesity in children can easily get eradicated by the involvement of both governments and parents.

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Average: 7.2 (1 vote)
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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 151, Rule ID: A_INFINITVE[1]
Message: Probably a wrong construction: a/the + infinitive
...latory bodies which are responsible for the eke in children obesity, however, others at...
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Line 3, column 398, Rule ID: ALLOW_TO[1]
Message: Did you mean 'participating'? Or maybe you should add a pronoun? In active voice, 'encourage' + 'to' takes an object, usually a pronoun.
Suggestion: participating
... so that the young people get encourage to participate in outdoor sports. In brief, though the...
^^^^^^^^^^^^^^

Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, however, if, may, so, for example, for instance, in addition, in brief, in my view

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 7.0 10.5418719212 66% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 11.0 6.10837438424 180% => OK
Conjunction : 13.0 8.36945812808 155% => OK
Relative clauses : 4.0 5.94088669951 67% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 19.0 20.9802955665 91% => OK
Preposition: 38.0 31.9359605911 119% => OK
Nominalization: 4.0 5.75862068966 69% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1439.0 1207.87684729 119% => OK
No of words: 273.0 242.827586207 112% => OK
Chars per words: 5.27106227106 5.00649968141 105% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.06481385082 3.92707691288 104% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.73219806714 2.71678728327 101% => OK
Unique words: 133.0 139.433497537 95% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.487179487179 0.580463131201 84% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 448.2 379.143842365 118% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.57093596059 102% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 3.0 4.6157635468 65% => OK
Article: 1.0 1.56157635468 64% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 1.71428571429 58% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.931034482759 0% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 3.65517241379 109% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 13.0 12.6551724138 103% => OK
Sentence length: 21.0 20.5024630542 102% => OK
Sentence length SD: 33.2106420528 50.4703680194 66% => OK
Chars per sentence: 110.692307692 104.977214359 105% => OK
Words per sentence: 21.0 20.9669160288 100% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.15384615385 7.25397266985 99% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.12807881773 97% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 5.33497536946 37% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 7.0 6.9802955665 100% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 2.75862068966 109% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 2.91625615764 103% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.266731449796 0.242375264174 110% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.11207808679 0.0925447433944 121% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0514392566162 0.071462118173 72% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.191300029861 0.151781067708 126% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0626053883675 0.0609392437508 103% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.9 12.6369458128 110% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 50.16 53.1260098522 94% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.54236453202 135% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.5 10.9458128079 105% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.29 11.5310837438 115% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.09 8.32886699507 97% => OK
difficult_words: 59.0 55.0591133005 107% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 12.0 9.94827586207 121% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.4 10.3980295567 100% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 10.5123152709 114% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 72.2222222222 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 65.0 Out of 90
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