In recent times, there is an ongoing disputation on the purpose of education, and it inevitably ignited into a controversy. Even though the multitudinous of people hold a view that the purpose of education is to prepare the workforce, I vehemently dissent from the view. Moreover, I strongly concur that the purpose of education should be two-fold, it should be self-fulfilling as well as workforce enabling.
Firstly, people face burnout working in a job that does not provide self-fulfillment. Moreover, students who are forced to take an education that disinterests them results in poor grades. For example, in 2004, a group of eminent researchers conducted a longitudinal study and ascertained empirical evidence correlating the forced choice of study to depression, and other psychological problems. Furthermore, there is a massive rise in the suicide rate of students as parents are forcing them to take subjects which disinterest the students. Moreover, it stifles the creativity among the students and leads to a reduction of academic potential in other subjects.
Secondly, education without career prospects results in a financial burden for the students. Since the college tuition fee has increased to an exorbitant price, and students have to resort to loans to complete education, bleak financial prospects in the jobs after education may prove a major burden to them. Thus, even though education choices should lead to self-fulfillment, they also should take care of the job prospects eliminating the need for further discussion.
In conclusion, after analyzing the embellished points, we can observe the facts that education without self-fulfillment leads to burnout, and in some case suicides, and education without career opportunities rarely help in financial security. Therefore, I firmly believe that the purpose of education should be both self-fulfilling and workforce enabling as well.
Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, first, firstly, furthermore, if, may, moreover, second, secondly, so, therefore, thus, well, for example, in conclusion, as well as
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 8.0 10.5418719212 76% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 8.0 6.10837438424 131% => OK
Conjunction : 8.0 8.36945812808 96% => OK
Relative clauses : 8.0 5.94088669951 135% => OK
Pronoun: 17.0 20.9802955665 81% => OK
Preposition: 43.0 31.9359605911 135% => OK
Nominalization: 18.0 5.75862068966 313% => Less nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1626.0 1207.87684729 135% => OK
No of words: 292.0 242.827586207 120% => OK
Chars per words: 5.56849315068 5.00649968141 111% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.13376432452 3.92707691288 105% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.2796491741 2.71678728327 121% => OK
Unique words: 162.0 139.433497537 116% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.554794520548 0.580463131201 96% => OK
syllable_count: 506.7 379.143842365 134% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.57093596059 108% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 7.0 4.6157635468 152% => OK
Article: 1.0 1.56157635468 64% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 1.71428571429 233% => Less adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 5.0 0.931034482759 537% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 5.0 3.65517241379 137% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 13.0 12.6551724138 103% => OK
Sentence length: 22.0 20.5024630542 107% => OK
Sentence length SD: 46.7605001973 50.4703680194 93% => OK
Chars per sentence: 125.076923077 104.977214359 119% => OK
Words per sentence: 22.4615384615 20.9669160288 107% => OK
Discourse Markers: 10.5384615385 7.25397266985 145% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.12807881773 97% => OK
Language errors: 0.0 5.33497536946 0% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 5.0 6.9802955665 72% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 5.0 2.75862068966 181% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 2.91625615764 103% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.198732967207 0.242375264174 82% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0715732961279 0.0925447433944 77% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0473451638006 0.071462118173 66% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.123878152605 0.151781067708 82% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.039133539686 0.0609392437508 64% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 16.0 12.6369458128 127% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 40.69 53.1260098522 77% => OK
smog_index: 11.2 6.54236453202 171% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 13.1 10.9458128079 120% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 15.32 11.5310837438 133% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.32 8.32886699507 112% => OK
difficult_words: 85.0 55.0591133005 154% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 10.5 9.94827586207 106% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.8 10.3980295567 104% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 10.5123152709 105% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 80.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 72.0 Out of 90
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