Some people think placing advertisements in schools is a great resource for public schools that need additionally funding, but others think it exploits children by treating them as a captive audience for corporate sponsors.Choose which position you most a

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Some people think placing advertisements in schools is a great resource for public schools that need additionally funding, but others think it exploits children by treating them as a captive audience for corporate sponsors.
Choose which position you most agree with and discuss why you chose that position. Support your point of view with details from your own experiences, observations or reading.

Now a days, corpporate sponsors place their advertisements in public schools and this is a great resource for public schools that need additional funding. There are a group of people who thinks that placing advertisement in school is like exploiting childrens by treating them as a captive audience for corporate sponsors, whereas on other side some of them think that it is a great source of funding for public schools who needs addtional funding. However, I personally think that it is really a great source for public schools that needs additional funding.

In recent days, many corporate have started placing their advertisements in public schools and in return public schools get the additional funding which they needed for the expansion of their school or to carry out extra curricular activities. Being a public school and with very limited resources they have to face myriad and grim problem with carrying out expansions and some times it deter's growth aspect for the childerns of that schools. However, with the additional extra funding schools can carry out great programmes for their pupils and this certainly helps childern overall development.

To be very honest, even though some people think this kind of advertisements exploits childrens by treating them as a captive audience for corporate sponseres, it is not really true. The most vital area for public schools is lack of fund to carry out development programmes for their students and if they lack fund and if they get fund through some corporate sponser via adverstisement, it is really a great source for extra funding they always look for.

To sum up, having additional funding via advertisement is not bad idea as long as the fund is utilised for children developments.

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Average: 9.1 (3 votes)
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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 1, Rule ID: NOW_A_DAYS[1]
Message: Did you mean 'nowadays'?
Suggestion: Nowadays
Now a days, corpporate sponsors place their advert...
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Line 1, column 5, Rule ID: A_PLURAL[1]
Message: Don't use indefinite articles with plural words. Did you mean 'a day' or simply 'days'?
Suggestion: a day; days
Now a days, corpporate sponsors place their advert...
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Line 1, column 168, Rule ID: THERE_RE_MANY[3]
Message: Possible agreement error. Did you mean 'groups'?
Suggestion: groups
...at need additional funding. There are a group of people who thinks that placing adver...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
however, if, look, really, so, whereas, kind of, to sum up

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 12.0 10.5418719212 114% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 2.0 6.10837438424 33% => OK
Conjunction : 9.0 8.36945812808 108% => OK
Relative clauses : 9.0 5.94088669951 151% => OK
Pronoun: 28.0 20.9802955665 133% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 30.0 31.9359605911 94% => OK
Nominalization: 7.0 5.75862068966 122% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1468.0 1207.87684729 122% => OK
No of words: 286.0 242.827586207 118% => OK
Chars per words: 5.13286713287 5.00649968141 103% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.11236361783 3.92707691288 105% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.78961383123 2.71678728327 103% => OK
Unique words: 133.0 139.433497537 95% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.465034965035 0.580463131201 80% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 428.4 379.143842365 113% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.57093596059 95% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 3.0 4.6157635468 65% => OK
Article: 1.0 1.56157635468 64% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 1.71428571429 58% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.931034482759 0% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 3.65517241379 109% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 9.0 12.6551724138 71% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 31.0 20.5024630542 151% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 60.400719479 50.4703680194 120% => OK
Chars per sentence: 163.111111111 104.977214359 155% => OK
Words per sentence: 31.7777777778 20.9669160288 152% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.44444444444 7.25397266985 89% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.12807881773 97% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 5.33497536946 56% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 6.0 6.9802955665 86% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 2.75862068966 72% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 2.91625615764 34% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.555893951618 0.242375264174 229% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.283997710387 0.0925447433944 307% => Sentence topic similarity is high.
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.15783570207 0.071462118173 221% => The coherence between sentences is low.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.347261988778 0.151781067708 229% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.208113710829 0.0609392437508 342% => More connections among paragraphs wanted.

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 18.6 12.6369458128 147% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 48.47 53.1260098522 91% => OK
smog_index: 11.2 6.54236453202 171% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 14.2 10.9458128079 130% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.07 11.5310837438 113% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.05 8.32886699507 97% => OK
difficult_words: 52.0 55.0591133005 94% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 14.0 9.94827586207 141% => OK
gunning_fog: 14.4 10.3980295567 138% => OK
text_standard: 14.0 10.5123152709 133% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 72.2222222222 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 65.0 Out of 90
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