Some people think that scientists make the most important contributions to society. Other the people think that the contributions of artists are the most important. Which position do you agree with? Give specific reasons and examples to support your answ

Scientists are working in all over the country to make human life improved and easy. They are spending months or years on a research for well being of our society. Scientists invent new drugs, medicines and technologies to help world. I agree with the statement that scientists make more important contribution in society than artists. They do all their work for society without thinking of their own life.

First reason for my statement is, scientists work all day and night to discover cures for many deadly diseases of humans as well as animals. This improves life expectancy of patients and treat them as soon as possible. A single medicine that we take even for a simple pain, it takes many years of experiments to make it and provide it worldwide with as much less side effects as possible. They try to diagnose and treat diseases at initial stages so that it will improve the outcome of the treatment.

Secondly, scientists are discovering so many new technologies everyday to make human life much easier and comfortable. There are lots of devises that we use in everyday life since we woke up in the morning till the night we go to bed again. for example we use alarm clock or mobile to wake up in the morning, toaster, microwave oven, stove, refrigerator, laptop, watch etc. this is a small list of their inventions that makes our life much easier.

In a nut shell Scientists are helping us in our day to day life. Their discoveries are keeping people alive with healthy life after curing diseases. They makes our life simple and easy going without much complications. Now every thing is working with a single touch or with voice command. That's how scientists makes more contribution toward society than artists.

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Sentence: They makes our life simple and easy going without much complications.
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Sentence: That's how scientists makes more contribution toward society than artists.
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