Our past experience shape the way we look at people and the world around us.What are some of the experiences that have shaped your outlook and the way you live now?Use specific examples to support your answer.

Everybody in their life learns with experiences and follows that throughout their lifetime. As we move on in our life we meet so many people, sometimes we had good experiences or bad. According to that we always learn a lesson and then behave accordingly. Experience that effect my outlook for people were as follow;

Firstly, when I was a kid my mother always advice me not to talk to strangers, but I never hear bother that advice. One day my friend got kidnapped by a guy who was stranger to us but sometimes he came to give us chocolates to eat. After that I was thrilled by new persons specially who offers us to eat something.

Secondly,during my school days when I was on a trip with friends, I fell down in a pond and helpless. All of my friends were watching and shocked what to do next and called our teacher. My teacher jumped in that pond without thinking for a second and saved me. After that incident my respect for all the teachers and specially that one was increased. I realize how a teacher sacrifice their time and energy to teach us lessons of books and life.

Those were the example of my life that changed my outlook for some people that can not be modified. They helped me to judge people and help others without even a another thought.

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