Somepeople pursue career paths that lead to managemt position. Other people follow caree paths leading to position of individual responsibility, which do not involve managing others. Which career path are you likely to follow?
Chossing a right career path is a diffucult task in any students life. Because pursuing a career that lead to management position and pursuing the career which lead to position of individual responsibilty, both are the higher esteemed professions. Some students have a very good management skills which helps to lead any company or other institute where the management skills are required and others are the good in their individual ability. They are good to take their responsibilty but not able to manage any orgnization. Both career choices are equally better in their own position there is no comparision between them. Student only need to realise their own interest of subject. But I like to follow that career path which lead to positions of individual resposibility for two main reasons.
First of all for pursuaing the career in a managemnet position that needs more skill and more and detailed knowledge and ability to take resposibility of all people, and good management cum commanding ability. This career has its own positive and negative impact.
For example If any person is a team leader of 20 persons then that person must have ability to understand all peoples problem, to solve their problem, to guide them, to take a responsibility of their work, to have manage all that people and the most inportatnt to keep satiefied to the customer as well as to the workers also.
The second point is that the career path which lead to positions of individual resposibility has its own advantages and disadvantages. The advantage is that in this career anyone can learn with their own speed. Because for taking resposibility a person must have to gone through some kind of experiance in small scale. And for that a person can do the deep study in that subject.
For example Doctors, Advocates, and others like plumbers, drivers, these people have to receive a tharough knowledge in their respective field and have to receive some kind of experiance on their own.
In a conclusion this both kind of career choice its tests your ability to lear, taking libility and managing people and one can choose the career path according to their own subject of interest.
Sentence: Chossing a right career path is a diffucult task in any students life.
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Sentence: For example If any person is a team leader of 20 persons then that person must have ability to understand all peoples problem, to solve their problem, to guide them, to take a responsibility of their work, to have manage all that people and the most inportatnt to keep satiefied to the customer as well as to the workers also.
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Suggestion: Refer to peoples and problem
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Suggestion: Refer to have and manage
Sentence: Because for taking resposibility a person must have to gone through some kind of experiance in small scale.
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Suggestion: Refer to to and gone
Sentence: In a conclusion this both kind of career choice its tests your ability to lear, taking libility and managing people and one can choose the career path according to their own subject of interest.
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Sentence: Chossing a right career path is a diffucult task in any students life.
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Sentence: Because pursuing a career that lead to management position and pursuing the career which lead to position of individual responsibilty, both are the higher esteemed professions.
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Sentence: They are good to take their responsibilty but not able to manage any orgnization.
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Sentence: Both career choices are equally better in their own position there is no comparision between them.
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Sentence: Student only need to realise their own interest of subject.
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Sentence: First of all for pursuaing the career in a managemnet position that needs more skill and more and detailed knowledge and ability to take resposibility of all people, and good management cum commanding ability.
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Error: resposibility Suggestion: responsibility
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Sentence: Because for taking resposibility a person must have to gone through some kind of experiance in small scale.
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Sentence: For example Doctors, Advocates, and others like plumbers, drivers, these people have to receive a tharough knowledge in their respective field and have to receive some kind of experiance on their own.
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Sentence: In a conclusion this both kind of career choice its tests your ability to lear, taking libility and managing people and one can choose the career path according to their own subject of interest.
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