Write a letter to your future roommate that lets her know you better

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Write a letter to your future roommate that lets her know you better

The moment was intense- the sun’s last rays shone through the glass , the fan buzzed over my head and the sheet crumpled as I fixated on my opponent’s face. I could see a grim expression and I knew that she felt lost. I had never won but this time I knew that I would. It was a simple UNO card game but we treated it like a battle. My friend considered herself to be an expert in the game But that day it was clear that I would win. I was ready to make my next me that she jumped up , pulled the bed sheet and scattered all the cards. The battlefield collapsed. My definite victory turned out to be draw. I narrowed my eyes and glared at her. I recalled all those games that she had easily won and all the times when she would laugh at me. However, I could not remember any time when I disrupted the game because I was losing .

And so it makes me sure that I am not a quitter. I never leave any race in the middles. Even though I feel that I might lose I make it a point to get to the finish line. When I joined my coaching classes in 9th grade, everyday felt like a struggle. My classmates were much better than I and the curriculum was too heavy. Earlier I felt confident and intelligent because of my school grades. But then I realized that there were many people who were diligent and intellectual. Even the subject Biology that I felt I had mastered turned out to broader than my expectations. Everyday I wished that it was the last day of the class. However, I did not leave . I increased my hours of study and level of effort . the results were slow to come. But I persisted and succeeded in making myself comfortable with the course . I was no longer at the bottom and I could match the speed. Had I quit at that time I would have never learn how to cope with changing environment or mange workload. Even though I lose many races I know that each one comes with a lesson. They show me my limits and push me further to lift my restricting bars. They take me to the edge of capacity and allow me to stretch further.

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No. of Grammatical Errors: 0 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 0 2
No. of Sentences: 28 15
No. of Words: 394 350
No. of Characters: 1587 1500
No. of Different Words: 209 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.455 4.7
Average Word Length: 4.028 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.261 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 85 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 55 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 34 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 19 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 14.071 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 5.264 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.321 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.365 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.405 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.153 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 2 5