Given high unemployment rate, it is recommended that the government only provide primary education and no secondary education. What do you think?
In light of increasing youth unemployment in the community, many people believe that the government should subsidise only primary school instead of higher levels. However, I personally disagree with this statement, because such change will have detrimental effect to the fabric of the society.
To start with, secondary level is an indispensable for intellectual-required industries. Usually, secondary school is seen as the most pivotal preparation of university, in which students are provided with essential knowledge. While unemployment may be stemmed from lacks of state investment into job provision, secondary school ensures adolescents to have efficient wisdom for further education, therefore generates more well-trained employees in important fields. For example, in order to engage in colleges that educate information technology, a student must possess exceptional mathematics knowledge and logical thinking skill, which is only taught in the secondary level of education. As a result, without appropriate supports from the government to high school attendants, the country will probably suffer from intelligence shortage in the future.
Additionally, if the government stop financially supporting secondary education, social inequality will be exacerbated. In such reality, only children from high-income families are able to attend high schools, accordingly process higher education. Finally, only these lucky fresh graduates can have well-paid jobs and promote further in the career ladder, while youngsters from poor families have to choose manual occupation. This results in a widened income gap between socioeconomic strata, which is a serious inequality in a community.
In conclusion, although at first glance cutting off investment in secondary education appears as a reasonable solution for high unemployment rate, it will reduce the national intellectual ability, and also cause inequality between classes. Therefore, I totally disagree with the statement.
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Essay evaluations by e-grader
Transition Words or Phrases used:
accordingly, also, finally, first, however, if, may, second, so, therefore, well, while, for example, in conclusion, as a result, to start with
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 8.0 13.1623246493 61% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 8.0 7.85571142285 102% => OK
Conjunction : 3.0 10.4138276553 29% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 5.0 7.30460921844 68% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 8.0 24.0651302605 33% => OK
Preposition: 42.0 41.998997996 100% => OK
Nominalization: 20.0 8.3376753507 240% => Less nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1707.0 1615.20841683 106% => OK
No of words: 282.0 315.596192385 89% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 6.05319148936 5.12529762239 118% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.09790868904 4.20363070211 97% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.2348764789 2.80592935109 115% => OK
Unique words: 182.0 176.041082164 103% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.645390070922 0.561755894193 115% => OK
syllable_count: 540.0 506.74238477 107% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.9 1.60771543086 118% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 4.0 5.43587174349 74% => OK
Article: 2.0 2.52805611222 79% => OK
Subordination: 6.0 2.10420841683 285% => Less adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 1.0 0.809619238477 124% => OK
Preposition: 7.0 4.76152304609 147% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 13.0 16.0721442886 81% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 21.0 20.2975951904 103% => OK
Sentence length SD: 55.1703118861 49.4020404114 112% => OK
Chars per sentence: 131.307692308 106.682146367 123% => OK
Words per sentence: 21.6923076923 20.7667163134 104% => OK
Discourse Markers: 11.0 7.06120827912 156% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 0.0 5.01903807615 0% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 5.0 8.67935871743 58% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 5.0 3.9879759519 125% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 3.4128256513 88% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.202989132678 0.244688304435 83% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0627311226656 0.084324248473 74% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0514223747482 0.0667982634062 77% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.11688280022 0.151304729494 77% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0297103545839 0.056905535591 52% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 17.9 13.0946893788 137% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 24.78 50.2224549098 49% => Flesch_reading_ease is low.
smog_index: 13.0 7.44779559118 175% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 15.0 11.3001002004 133% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 17.81 12.4159519038 143% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 10.39 8.58950901804 121% => OK
difficult_words: 102.0 78.4519038076 130% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 13.0 9.78957915832 133% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.4 10.1190380762 103% => OK
text_standard: 13.0 10.7795591182 121% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 89.8876404494 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 8.0 Out of 9
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.
Transition Words or Phrases used:
accordingly, also, finally, first, however, if, may, second, so, therefore, well, while, for example, in conclusion, as a result, to start with
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 8.0 13.1623246493 61% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 8.0 7.85571142285 102% => OK
Conjunction : 3.0 10.4138276553 29% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 5.0 7.30460921844 68% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 8.0 24.0651302605 33% => OK
Preposition: 42.0 41.998997996 100% => OK
Nominalization: 20.0 8.3376753507 240% => Less nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1707.0 1615.20841683 106% => OK
No of words: 282.0 315.596192385 89% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 6.05319148936 5.12529762239 118% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.09790868904 4.20363070211 97% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.2348764789 2.80592935109 115% => OK
Unique words: 182.0 176.041082164 103% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.645390070922 0.561755894193 115% => OK
syllable_count: 540.0 506.74238477 107% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.9 1.60771543086 118% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 4.0 5.43587174349 74% => OK
Article: 2.0 2.52805611222 79% => OK
Subordination: 6.0 2.10420841683 285% => Less adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 1.0 0.809619238477 124% => OK
Preposition: 7.0 4.76152304609 147% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 13.0 16.0721442886 81% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 21.0 20.2975951904 103% => OK
Sentence length SD: 55.1703118861 49.4020404114 112% => OK
Chars per sentence: 131.307692308 106.682146367 123% => OK
Words per sentence: 21.6923076923 20.7667163134 104% => OK
Discourse Markers: 11.0 7.06120827912 156% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 0.0 5.01903807615 0% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 5.0 8.67935871743 58% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 5.0 3.9879759519 125% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 3.4128256513 88% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.202989132678 0.244688304435 83% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0627311226656 0.084324248473 74% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0514223747482 0.0667982634062 77% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.11688280022 0.151304729494 77% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0297103545839 0.056905535591 52% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 17.9 13.0946893788 137% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 24.78 50.2224549098 49% => Flesch_reading_ease is low.
smog_index: 13.0 7.44779559118 175% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 15.0 11.3001002004 133% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 17.81 12.4159519038 143% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 10.39 8.58950901804 121% => OK
difficult_words: 102.0 78.4519038076 130% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 13.0 9.78957915832 133% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.4 10.1190380762 103% => OK
text_standard: 13.0 10.7795591182 121% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 89.8876404494 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 8.0 Out of 9
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.