The graph below shows the changes in food consumption by Chinese people between 1985 and 2010.Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

Essay topics:

The graph below shows the changes in food consumption by Chinese people between 1985 and 2010.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

<span id="docs-internal-guid-a24a9d58-7fff-74b4-a7a1-e1e57a576628"><p dir="ltr" style="line-height:1.38;margin-top:0pt;margin-bottom:0pt;"><span style="font-size: 14pt; font-family: Arial; color: rgb(0, 0, 0); background-color: transparent; font-variant-numeric: normal; font-variant-east-asian: normal; vertical-align: baseline;">The given line graph provides information from the research into the average amount of each type of food eaten by a Chinese citizen per week over a 25-year period. The unit was measured by grams.</span></p><br><p dir="ltr" style="line-height:1.38;margin-top:0pt;margin-bottom:0pt;"><span style="font-size: 14pt; font-family: Arial; color: rgb(0, 0, 0); background-color: transparent; font-variant-numeric: normal; font-variant-east-asian: normal; vertical-align: baseline;">Overall, according to the data, while the other counterparts followed upward trends, figure for salt consumption fall gradually over the period. Fish was the most popular food among Chineses in 25 years the research taken.</span></p><br><p dir="ltr" style="line-height:1.38;margin-top:0pt;margin-bottom:0pt;"><span style="font-size: 14pt; font-family: Arial; color: rgb(0, 0, 0); background-color: transparent; font-variant-numeric: normal; font-variant-east-asian: normal; vertical-align: baseline;">To be specific, in 1985, one Chinese person ate approximately just above 600 grams of fish per week. After witnessing a fluctuation, the figure steadily climbed up to nearly 900 grams in the end of 2010. Meanwhile, despite of having the lowest statistic, the amount of meat consumed by one citizen in a week was doubled to about 200 grams in 2010.</span></p><br><p dir="ltr" style="line-height:1.38;margin-top:0pt;margin-bottom:0pt;"><span style="font-size: 14pt; font-family: Arial; color: rgb(0, 0, 0); background-color: transparent; font-variant-numeric: normal; font-variant-east-asian: normal; vertical-align: baseline;">In contrast, the average amount of salt used in Chinese dishes gradually decreased. The figure was nearly 500 grams in 1985 however in 2010 one Chinese person only used one fifth kilograms of salt in their food.&nbsp;</span></p><div><span style="font-size: 14pt; font-family: Arial; color: rgb(0, 0, 0); background-color: transparent; font-variant-numeric: normal; font-variant-east-asian: normal; vertical-align: baseline;"><br></span></div></span>

To be specific, in 1985, one chinese person ate approximately just above 600 grams of fish per week. After witnessing a fluctuation, the figure steadily climbed up to nearly 900 grams in the end of 2010. Meanwhile, despite of having the lowest statistic, the amount of meat consumed by one citizen in a week was doubled to about 200 grams in 2010.

In contrast, the average amount of salt used in chinese dishes gradually decreased. The figure was nearly 500 grams in 1985 however in 2010 one chinese person only used one fifth kilograms of salt in their food.

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Average: 6.7 (1 vote)

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Transition Words or Phrases used:
however, if, so, while, in contrast

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 8.0 7.0 114% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 0.0 1.00243902439 0% => OK
Conjunction : 0.0 6.8 0% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 0.0 3.15609756098 0% => OK
Pronoun: 2.0 5.60731707317 36% => OK
Preposition: 59.0 33.7804878049 175% => OK
Nominalization: 4.0 3.97073170732 101% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2757.0 965.302439024 286% => Less number of characters wanted.
No of words: 354.0 196.424390244 180% => Less content wanted.
Chars per words: 7.78813559322 4.92477711251 158% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.33761313653 3.73543355544 116% => OK
Word Length SD: 9.76580106492 2.65546596893 368% => Word_Length_SD is high.
Unique words: 123.0 106.607317073 115% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.347457627119 0.547539520022 63% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 703.8 283.868780488 248% => syllable counts are too long.
avg_syllables_per_word: 2.0 1.45097560976 138% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 0.0 1.53170731707 0% => OK
Article: 9.0 4.33902439024 207% => Less articles wanted as sentence beginning.
Subordination: 3.0 1.07073170732 280% => Less adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 0.0 0.482926829268 0% => OK
Preposition: 9.0 3.36585365854 267% => Less preposition wanted as sentence beginnings.

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 10.0 8.94146341463 112% => OK
Sentence length: 35.0 22.4926829268 156% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 197.467566957 43.030603864 459% => The lengths of sentences changed so frequently.
Chars per sentence: 275.7 112.824112599 244% => Less chars_per_sentence wanted.
Words per sentence: 35.4 22.9334400587 154% => OK
Discourse Markers: 3.5 5.23603664747 67% => OK
Paragraphs: 3.0 3.83414634146 78% => More paragraphs wanted.
Language errors: 0.0 1.69756097561 0% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 1.0 3.70975609756 27% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 1.13902439024 176% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 7.0 4.09268292683 171% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.0560005763582 0.215688989381 26% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0411979690007 0.103423049105 40% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0257641314665 0.0843802449381 31% => Sentences are similar to each other.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0677151370491 0.15604864568 43% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0260395007267 0.0819641961636 32% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 33.0 13.2329268293 249% => Automated_readability_index is high.
flesch_reading_ease: 2.11 61.2550243902 3% => Flesch_reading_ease is low.
smog_index: 14.6 6.51609756098 224% => Smog_index is high.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 21.7 10.3012195122 211% => Flesch kincaid grade is high.
coleman_liau_index: 28.49 11.4140731707 250% => Coleman_liau_index is high.
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.83 8.06136585366 97% => OK
difficult_words: 55.0 40.7170731707 135% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 23.5 11.4329268293 206% => Linsear_write_formula is high.
gunning_fog: 16.0 10.9970731707 145% => OK
text_standard: 24.0 11.0658536585 217% => The average readability is very high. Good job!
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 67.4157303371 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 6.0 Out of 9
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