TPO-49 - Independent Writing Task Do you agree or disagree with the following statement?The ability to maintain friendships with a small number of people over a long period of time is more important for happiness than the ability to make many new friends

Friends are important part of our life who help in the growth of the individual. Some people love to have lots of friends while some people prefer to have long term friendship with a few friends. In my opinion, long term friendships with a few friends contribute to our happiness more than many new friends. I feel this because of two reasons which I will explore in the following passage.

To begin with, we trust our old friends more than new friends. Trust is an important part of any relationship and it comes only with time. We always hesitate to trust those friends whom we meet few days ago as compared to trust those friends who have been with us for many years. For instance, last year, when I was thinking to start a new computer shop, I needed a partner in this business. But as I was starting new business, I wanted a trustworthy partner. I had to choose between my new friend, Nimisha and my old friend, Riya. I was more comfortable to trust Riya as I have been with Riya from last 10 years. In the end, I decided to start my business with Riya as my partner.

Further, old friends know us better than new friends. Friends who have been with us for a long time, would definitely understand us better and friendship without understanding is not a worthy one. We need our friends in our hard times and if a friend does not understand our feelings, he could not help us. I can give my personal example to support this. I failed in university’s last semester exams. It was devastating for me and my family as I was not expecting that I would not be able to get passing marks. At that time my childhood friend, Jasmine, helped me to come out of that sorrow and to summon confidence so as to reappear for university’s exams. She helped me a lot to prepare for exams and finally, I passed the exams.

In conclusion, I, strongly, believe that strong friendship with a few friends is better for happiness than making lots of new friends. This is because we can trust old friends easily and because they understand us much better.

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Grammar and spelling errors:
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Message: Possible agreement error -- use past participle here: 'termed'.
Suggestion: termed
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Line 7, column 622, Rule ID: SO_AS_TO[1]
Message: Use simply 'to'
Suggestion: to
...of that sorrow and to summon confidence so as to reappear for university's exams. S...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, finally, if, so, while, as to, for instance, i feel, in conclusion, in my opinion, to begin with

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 14.0 15.1003584229 93% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 7.0 9.8082437276 71% => OK
Conjunction : 9.0 13.8261648746 65% => OK
Relative clauses : 10.0 11.0286738351 91% => OK
Pronoun: 58.0 43.0788530466 135% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 44.0 52.1666666667 84% => OK
Nominalization: 2.0 8.0752688172 25% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1687.0 1977.66487455 85% => OK
No of words: 374.0 407.700716846 92% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.51069518717 4.8611393121 93% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.3976220399 4.48103885553 98% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.66228135254 2.67179642975 100% => OK
Unique words: 176.0 212.727598566 83% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.470588235294 0.524837075471 90% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 496.8 618.680645161 80% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.3 1.51630824373 86% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 16.0 9.59856630824 167% => OK
Article: 0.0 3.08781362007 0% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 3.51792114695 28% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.86738351254 54% => OK
Preposition: 5.0 4.94265232975 101% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 22.0 20.6003584229 107% => OK
Sentence length: 17.0 20.1344086022 84% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 30.7259615105 48.9658058833 63% => OK
Chars per sentence: 76.6818181818 100.406767564 76% => OK
Words per sentence: 17.0 20.6045352989 83% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.59090909091 5.45110844103 84% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 5.5376344086 36% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 16.0 11.8709677419 135% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 3.85842293907 52% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 4.88709677419 82% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.245180392678 0.236089414692 104% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0824911845451 0.076458572812 108% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0703744150174 0.0737576698707 95% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.174160355318 0.150856017488 115% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0401767041493 0.0645574589148 62% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 8.3 11.7677419355 71% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 79.6 58.1214874552 137% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 6.4 10.1575268817 63% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 8.58 10.9000537634 79% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 6.72 8.01818996416 84% => OK
difficult_words: 53.0 86.8835125448 61% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 6.5 10.002688172 65% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.8 10.0537634409 88% => OK
text_standard: 7.0 10.247311828 68% => The average readability is low. Need to imporve the language.
What are above readability scores?

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We are expecting: No. of Words: 350 while No. of Different Words: 200
Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:

para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.

So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:

reasons == advantages or

reasons == disadvantages

for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.

or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.


Rates: 60.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 18.0 Out of 30
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