TPO-08 - Independent Writing Task Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? Television advertising directed towards young children (aged two to five) should not be allowed.Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.

With the development of technology and mass media, parents definitely should control any consequence of Television advertising based on targeted ages. Child’s upbringing is often implemented deliberately by the information they received from some social media like television advertising. I can see why people might feel that we need restricted role to control the young children based on advertisement’ exposures, while others may have a negative attitude towards this restriction roles. On the whole, however, it is my opinion that advertising directed towards small kids should be control under several circumstances. This piece of writing will explain my view through this topic in more detail.

To being with, as for psychologists believe that targeted a plan toward a child’s min especially for purchasing some stuffs based on advertisement totally will affect them severally in their tendency and decision making attitudes. In addition, young baby see things that some companies present them in emotionally ways on the television and indirectly force their parents to buy this kind of stuffs and mostly parents are implied their children wishes. In other words, this tendency shows that children automatically just are focusing on their desire and overlooked any factors among this process. However, this behavior totally will be establish and set in their characteristics and they will bears this misconception about around with lest underestimation how to choose best option for his or her future. All in all, the role of parents to control and block this unpleasant behavior in beginning by controls the advertisements and dealt within this sticking stage. Recently I read an interesting book about how advertisement could make a mind alteration through the decision. One of the most and conspicuous one is that when children asked for unnecessary things such as toys just to bears this toys just for once and after that there is no attraction exist; its shows other effect that kids need appropriate couch to prioritize their needs or actually behind need that should learn how to distinguish the necessary things and unnecessary ones.

Last but not least, another reason for this view is that economical issue is seen more among the
Middle-class of society which instead of wasting their money for buying unnecessary things for their kids – toys or other stuffs which are presented in TV advertisements- , probably could be one of the most important portion of their investment in their education materials such as books or related materials of services. Statics show the fact that the purchasing for kids based their needs or among the middle class family or single parents as far as their financial aspect of their life is concerns. As matter of fact, this process unconsciously will affect their economic tremendously. Thus, controlling the advertisement by parents which targeted indirectly their parent’s income is a blessing in disguise and finally brings home several factors in their budget of family.

To recapitulate, even though there is no one formulate for this complex situation for parents. I strongly believe that it should be allowed to control the advertisement for specific age in young children. As for my opinion, these regulators would support their parents in several ways and pave their budgets issue and also to address the children upbringings issue for any tendency in young ages.

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Average: 7.3 (1 vote)
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Grammar and spelling errors:
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Suggestion: choose the best
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
actually, also, but, finally, however, if, look, may, so, thus, while, as for, as to, in addition, kind of, such as, in my view, in other words, on the whole

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 17.0 15.1003584229 113% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 18.0 9.8082437276 184% => OK
Conjunction : 22.0 13.8261648746 159% => OK
Relative clauses : 16.0 11.0286738351 145% => OK
Pronoun: 61.0 43.0788530466 142% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 67.0 52.1666666667 128% => OK
Nominalization: 18.0 8.0752688172 223% => Less nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2909.0 1977.66487455 147% => OK
No of words: 543.0 407.700716846 133% => OK
Chars per words: 5.35727440147 4.8611393121 110% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.82725184711 4.48103885553 108% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.98609031598 2.67179642975 112% => OK
Unique words: 280.0 212.727598566 132% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.515653775322 0.524837075471 98% => OK
syllable_count: 883.8 618.680645161 143% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.51630824373 106% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 9.0 9.59856630824 94% => OK
Article: 1.0 3.08781362007 32% => OK
Subordination: 5.0 3.51792114695 142% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.86738351254 0% => OK
Preposition: 6.0 4.94265232975 121% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 19.0 20.6003584229 92% => OK
Sentence length: 28.0 20.1344086022 139% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 87.3479684368 48.9658058833 178% => OK
Chars per sentence: 153.105263158 100.406767564 152% => OK
Words per sentence: 28.5789473684 20.6045352989 139% => OK
Discourse Markers: 8.26315789474 5.45110844103 152% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.53405017921 110% => OK
Language errors: 9.0 5.5376344086 163% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 11.0 11.8709677419 93% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 3.85842293907 104% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 4.88709677419 82% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.113179284651 0.236089414692 48% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0491759444672 0.076458572812 64% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0546598899182 0.0737576698707 74% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.075814779726 0.150856017488 50% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0487652748583 0.0645574589148 76% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 18.1 11.7677419355 154% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 43.06 58.1214874552 74% => OK
smog_index: 11.2 6.10430107527 183% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 14.2 10.1575268817 140% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 14.4 10.9000537634 132% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.75 8.01818996416 109% => OK
difficult_words: 128.0 86.8835125448 147% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 13.0 10.002688172 130% => OK
gunning_fog: 13.2 10.0537634409 131% => OK
text_standard: 14.0 10.247311828 137% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 73.3333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 22.0 Out of 30
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