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The development of any society mostly depends on the competence of its young generation . So, it is our first and foremost duty to nurture our young genneration carefully . Any wrong process in case of nurturing them can briddle their growth, can be a great threat to our society . So, we should choose the best way to develop a young leader by instilling theam a sense of cooperation, not competition

To develop leadership, it is necessary to participate in many kind of group work .Because , It teaches us - how to communicate with other people, cause a group is made of many people of different characteristics. Moreover, in a group , we can share idea and learn to appreciate others decision . It helps us to lessen our ego problem and help to rise a quality of consider other's opinion .
But a sense of competiotion leads to a tendency to work secretly that others can not know what he is doing . A sense of competion can destroy our tendency to work together. when , we compete , we learn little . Cause , when we compete , we want to be the best and want ot be appreciated by others . This types of mentality destroy our sharing tendency and develop a hostile environment among mates.

Competition not only hinder the personal growth of anybody , it also makes the environment hostile for them which make the situation difficult for a leader . When, a leader is choosen , then other of the group want to show him digrace to other . So , they try to hinder the path of a leader rather help him which make the environment difficult . So , It hinders the development of industry, society , So , competitive nature hinders the growth of everybody in passive way .

Though competitive nature can hinder the growth , it sometimes stimulate to other to do better . Example, in a class , we work so hard to be first in the class , though the achievement in less comparing to work in cooperative environment.

In conclusion , It is important to show the right path to our young people to be our future leader for betterment of our society . We should make the environment cooperative to work which make the environment easier to them to make decision cause everybody will engage themselves to solve the problem .

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Average: 1.6 (1 vote)
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, if, moreover, so, still, then, in conclusion, kind of

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 11.0 19.6327345309 56% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 9.0 12.9520958084 69% => OK
Conjunction : 6.0 11.1786427146 54% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 5.0 13.6137724551 37% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 39.0 28.8173652695 135% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 59.0 55.5748502994 106% => OK
Nominalization: 19.0 16.3942115768 116% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1817.0 2260.96107784 80% => OK
No of words: 376.0 441.139720559 85% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.83244680851 5.12650576532 94% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.40348946061 4.56307096286 97% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.87511492006 2.78398813304 103% => OK
Unique words: 170.0 204.123752495 83% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.452127659574 0.468620217663 96% => OK
syllable_count: 580.5 705.55239521 82% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.59920159681 94% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 17.0 4.96107784431 343% => Less pronouns wanted as sentence beginning.
Article: 3.0 8.76447105788 34% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 2.70958083832 111% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.67365269461 60% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 4.22255489022 95% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 19.0 19.7664670659 96% => OK
Sentence length: 19.0 22.8473053892 83% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 60.3020559362 57.8364921388 104% => OK
Chars per sentence: 95.6315789474 119.503703932 80% => OK
Words per sentence: 19.7894736842 23.324526521 85% => OK
Discourse Markers: 3.73684210526 5.70786347227 65% => OK
Paragraphs: 6.0 5.15768463074 116% => OK
Language errors: 42.0 5.25449101796 799% => Less language errors wanted.
Sentences with positive sentiment : 12.0 8.20758483034 146% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 6.88822355289 58% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 4.67664670659 64% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.0576865018003 0.218282227539 26% => The similarity between the topic and the content is low.
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0226151922351 0.0743258471296 30% => Sentence topic similarity is low.
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0196910814033 0.0701772020484 28% => Sentences are similar to each other.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0335713233134 0.128457276422 26% => Maybe some paragraphs are off the topic.
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.014837492679 0.0628817314937 24% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.2 14.3799401198 78% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 60.65 48.3550499002 125% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.1628742515 123% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.5 12.197005988 78% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.73 12.5979740519 85% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.64 8.32208582834 92% => OK
difficult_words: 73.0 98.500998004 74% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 15.0 12.3882235529 121% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.6 11.1389221557 86% => OK
text_standard: 10.0 11.9071856287 84% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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It is not exactly right on the topic in the view of e-grader. Maybe there is a wrong essay topic.

Rates: 16.67 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 1.0 Out of 6
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