You have borrowed something from your friend for a party, but it was damaged during the party. Write a letter to your friend and say- What was it?- How was it damaged?- What will you do about it?

Dear Sneh,

I hope this letter finds you in radiant health and the best of spirits. You remember, you lent me your beautiful shrug for my sister's wedding party. Unfortunately, it got abrasions and I would like to apologize for that.

It was so kind of you to lend me that shrug instantly, after realized my desire to bought a similar one. The shrug complemented my dress so well that I got a lot of compliments on party occasion. Alas, I devastate your shrug by mistakenly. It so happened when we were all dancing on the dance floor and suddenly tassels on the shrug muddled in my shoe heel and I heard a loud ripping noise. My heart skipped a beat when I saw the shrug torn completely from middle. I tried to get it darned from professional, but the tear is still showing.

Please forgive me for this and I would be happy to buy you a new shrug. Please let me know where you bought it from, so that I can buy that similar to this from there. I hope new one will be as awesome as the old one.

I am looking forward to hearing from you soon.

With love
Kiran

Votes
Average: 7 (1 vote)
Essays by the user:

Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, if, look, so, still, well, kind of

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 5.0 7.48453608247 67% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 4.0 4.92783505155 81% => OK
Conjunction : 6.0 5.05154639175 119% => OK
Relative clauses : 8.0 3.03092783505 264% => Less relative clauses wanted (maybe 'which' is over used).
Pronoun: 43.0 32.9175257732 131% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 24.0 26.3917525773 91% => OK
Nominalization: 0.0 3.85567010309 0% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 871.0 937.175257732 93% => OK
No of words: 204.0 206.0 99% => OK
Chars per words: 4.26960784314 4.54256449028 94% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.77926670891 3.78020617076 100% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.42905388334 2.54303337028 96% => OK
Unique words: 121.0 127.690721649 95% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.593137254902 0.622605031667 95% => OK
syllable_count: 263.7 290.88556701 91% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.3 1.41237113402 92% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 11.0 9.13402061856 120% => OK
Article: 1.0 0.824742268041 121% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 1.83505154639 109% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 0.463917525773 216% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 2.0 1.44329896907 139% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 14.0 12.6804123711 110% => OK
Sentence length: 14.0 16.3608247423 86% => OK
Sentence length SD: 30.7611768305 44.8134815571 69% => OK
Chars per sentence: 62.2142857143 76.5299724578 81% => OK
Words per sentence: 14.5714285714 16.8248392259 87% => OK
Discourse Markers: 2.78571428571 4.34317383033 64% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.29896907216 93% => OK
Language errors: 0.0 2.54639175258 0% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 9.0 7.41237113402 121% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 1.49484536082 134% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 3.94845360825 76% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.168499949601 0.216113520407 78% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0579492431644 0.0766984524023 76% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0555274623477 0.0603063233224 92% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.111610134867 0.12726935374 88% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0471174380479 0.0580467560999 81% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 6.0 8.37731958763 72% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 82.65 70.7449484536 117% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 3.82989690722 81% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 5.2 7.45979381443 70% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 6.89 8.71597938144 79% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 6.73 7.59969072165 89% => OK
difficult_words: 31.0 41.2886597938 75% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 6.5 8.62886597938 75% => OK
gunning_fog: 7.6 8.54432989691 89% => OK
text_standard: 7.0 8.15463917526 86% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 70.2247191011 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 6.25 Out of 9
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