"Because of television and worldwide computer connections, people can now become familiar with a great many places that they have never visited. As a result, tourism will soon become obsolete."

Nowadays, televisions and worldwide computer connections are one of the most propagandistic instruments for the sake of tourism. Some people believe that the role of televisions and computer connection are destructive and hurt tourism. From my vantage point, televisions and worldwide computers, mostly, have constructive effect on tourism rate and in what follows the most compelling reasons are drawn.
First and foremost, the number of people who hope to visit specific country would have been increases whenever their knowledge of that country enhances. Indeed, human being are in favor of experimental evidences rather than visualized one. By way of illustration, one country which is advertising and showing atmospheric reality of specific region and encourage people to visit that place, would urge people to feel this issue experimentally. In this regard, breathing the fresh air, or watching and touching a monumental castle is not what people can understand from Tv program and they seek to feel these circumstances by themselves. Had the T.v program not shown alluring circumstances of city, no one would have been aware of opportunities provided by the city. Consequently, the rate of tourism to that city would increases.
Secondly, the number of people who pursue their dreams to buy specific devices increases too. In this regard, Televisions and worldwide computers play a propagandistic role here to enhance tourism industry. For instance, in the middle of documentary, which its main purpose is to increase the knowledge of its spectators of features in city, the sweetness of biking in coat, intentionally, is being shown. Hence, every one hopes to be in the same circumstances and first he will travel to that city and then he will buy bicycle. It is axiomatic that the documentary in television poses constructive effect in tourism and economic industry of that area. Thereby, the economy of specific are would increases as a repercussion of tourism enhancement and all of them came from constructive effect of tv.

However, the situation may differ and people may decide and value their circumstances. Indeed, there are some areas in which televisions and computer connections have destructive effect in tourism. Take a volcanic eruption phenomenon as an example. When, it has been demonstrated that people in those area suffer from, respiratory diseases, potential traumatic injuries, devastating effect of ashes and so forth, the potential visitors find the situation hard to visit and these criteria would give the cold feet and hence they decline to go on a trip. Therefore, it is crystal clear that, in some situation which is often problematic, people overweigh the drawbacks of a trip to its benefit and decline to go to those areas.

All in all, as the above-mentioned examples have illustrated, commonly, the rule of television is constructive. Not only does Tv programs enhance tourism rate by urging experimental feeling but also it increases economic rate of those area. However, in dangerous situation such as potential volcanic eruption area, people may decline to go on a trips.

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Average: 6.6 (1 vote)
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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 2, column 819, Rule ID: DID_BASEFORM[1]
Message: The verb 'would' requires the base form of the verb: 'increase'
Suggestion: increase
... the rate of tourism to that city would increases. Secondly, the number of people who p...
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Line 3, column 697, Rule ID: DID_BASEFORM[1]
Message: The verb 'would' requires the base form of the verb: 'increase'
Suggestion: increase
...reby, the economy of specific are would increases as a repercussion of tourism enhancemen...
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Line 5, column 296, Rule ID: THIS_NNS[2]
Message: Did you mean 'this area' or 'those areas'?
Suggestion: this area; those areas
...it has been demonstrated that people in those area suffer from, respiratory diseases, pote...
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Line 7, column 230, Rule ID: THIS_NNS[2]
Message: Did you mean 'this area' or 'those areas'?
Suggestion: this area; those areas
... but also it increases economic rate of those area. However, in dangerous situation such a...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, consequently, first, hence, however, if, may, second, secondly, so, then, therefore, for instance, such as

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 20.0 19.5258426966 102% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 12.0 12.4196629213 97% => OK
Conjunction : 24.0 14.8657303371 161% => OK
Relative clauses : 15.0 11.3162921348 133% => OK
Pronoun: 34.0 33.0505617978 103% => OK
Preposition: 69.0 58.6224719101 118% => OK
Nominalization: 12.0 12.9106741573 93% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2632.0 2235.4752809 118% => OK
No of words: 494.0 442.535393258 112% => OK
Chars per words: 5.32793522267 5.05705443957 105% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.71445763274 4.55969084622 103% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.08242370035 2.79657885939 110% => OK
Unique words: 241.0 215.323595506 112% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.487854251012 0.4932671777 99% => OK
syllable_count: 834.3 704.065955056 118% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.59117977528 107% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 3.0 6.24550561798 48% => OK
Article: 8.0 4.99550561798 160% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 3.10617977528 32% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.77640449438 56% => OK
Preposition: 7.0 4.38483146067 160% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 23.0 20.2370786517 114% => OK
Sentence length: 21.0 23.0359550562 91% => OK
Sentence length SD: 53.3001629679 60.3974514979 88% => OK
Chars per sentence: 114.434782609 118.986275619 96% => OK
Words per sentence: 21.4782608696 23.4991977007 91% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.08695652174 5.21951772744 97% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.97078651685 101% => OK
Language errors: 4.0 7.80617977528 51% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 13.0 10.2758426966 127% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 5.13820224719 78% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 6.0 4.83258426966 124% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.157723340346 0.243740707755 65% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0507224239668 0.0831039109588 61% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0406952230303 0.0758088955206 54% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0961491422572 0.150359130593 64% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0388135816508 0.0667264976115 58% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.4 14.1392134831 102% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 41.7 48.8420337079 85% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.92365168539 111% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 12.7 12.1743820225 104% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.63 12.1639044944 112% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.45 8.38706741573 101% => OK
difficult_words: 118.0 100.480337079 117% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.5 11.8971910112 71% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.4 11.2143820225 93% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 11.7820224719 76% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 66.67 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 4.0 Out of 6
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